Ambulance 51
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Ambulance 51 Chapter 3"The story follows two men who are EMTs
6 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I'm proud of you for entering the contest. I don't think I could write 1,000 words a day and I'm glad you can!! I am so behind in reviewing that I can't keep up with daily chapters but will check in on you before the end of the month.
Great characters - they are likable and have a good rapport. I also liked the color-coding of the injuries.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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I'm proud of you for entering the contest. I don't think I could write 1,000 words a day and I'm glad you can!! I am so behind in reviewing that I can't keep up with daily chapters but will check in on you before the end of the month.
Great characters - they are likable and have a good rapport. I also liked the color-coding of the injuries.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars and your continued support. Have a blessed.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm so sorry you had problems with Google Docs and hope you didn't have to rewrite chapter two. I think all of us who have used Google Docs with any regularity have had a problem or two. But I lost a whole story last week on Microsoft 365. So, it can happen anywhere, and I still don't know why. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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I'm so sorry you had problems with Google Docs and hope you didn't have to rewrite chapter two. I think all of us who have used Google Docs with any regularity have had a problem or two. But I lost a whole story last week on Microsoft 365. So, it can happen anywhere, and I still don't know why. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate tyhe many stars. Have a blessed day.
Comment from royowen
I love watching the male good humour among sporting teams, no team member is allowed to be more self important than he should, and quite often is allocated a less than flattering nickname, your intuition serves you well Liz, well done, blessings Roy
PS, My nickname was bluey,
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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I love watching the male good humour among sporting teams, no team member is allowed to be more self important than he should, and quite often is allocated a less than flattering nickname, your intuition serves you well Liz, well done, blessings Roy
PS, My nickname was bluey,
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day, Bluey.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was a well written story. Your description of the the firehouse and its crew sets the scene. The day filled with action was well written. I love how each member of the squad is unique and brings their own personalities that you capture so well.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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I thought this was a well written story. Your description of the the firehouse and its crew sets the scene. The day filled with action was well written. I love how each member of the squad is unique and brings their own personalities that you capture so well.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Have a blessed day.
Comment from Esther Brown
As I medical provider (with a fireman for a husband) I was drawn to your story. It is hard to write realistically about medical drama. Please re-find the lost stories...I like the idea of the mental health side being written. I noted a couple little things...if you read it aloud you will find them yourself so I won't waste time commenting. Looking forward to the rest of the story...
Esther
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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As I medical provider (with a fireman for a husband) I was drawn to your story. It is hard to write realistically about medical drama. Please re-find the lost stories...I like the idea of the mental health side being written. I noted a couple little things...if you read it aloud you will find them yourself so I won't waste time commenting. Looking forward to the rest of the story...
Esther
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I wish you would point the errors out, because I see the same thing over and over. I appreciate all the feedback you give me. Have na blessed day.
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OK...Who is Rosie? Dispatcher?
I liked the description of who the people were but missed her.
Tiny bit confused about Bean. Was it an easy ride due to being in shape or being close? Not a contributing factor unless he becomes a big part of the story due to his abilities.
I need to know what "Thing 2" means and where "Thing 1" was and what it means. Likely part of past stories...
I am so new at this site, I am not quite sure about reviewing yet, but I do know what it feels like to have everyone say they like it without giving anything constructive. I want your feelings about dead bodies, seeing friends die and medical helplessness despite our excellent intentions. I know the feelings but to be able to write them is a healing gift.
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Rosie is the voice on the GPS Mitch and his son are Thing 1 and Thing 2. When I lost chapter 2. That is where the story is about those names.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is a very good story. I am enjoying reading it. I do hope you don't give up.
They could sit down to eat the breakfast Bean had cooked, finishing it before the first alarm. ('down' is an extra word that's not needed)
"We had a couple of beers at the 19th hole and talked for a long time�¢?"I should have said I spoke (Evil Eddie)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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This is a very good story. I am enjoying reading it. I do hope you don't give up.
They could sit down to eat the breakfast Bean had cooked, finishing it before the first alarm. ('down' is an extra word that's not needed)
"We had a couple of beers at the 19th hole and talked for a long time�¢?"I should have said I spoke (Evil Eddie)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. Your opinion is valuable to me. I appreciate you pointing out the errors. I keep going back and forth, am I a writer or not a writer? Please keep me honest.
