Comment from Colorado Owl

Average

I'm not a fan of this style, but the message has some validity. It's awkward to read. I prefer words to flow more naturally. For example,
"... is disguise as a identity" I think should be "... is disguised as an identity."

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2024

Comment from S_Magz

Excellent

Deep and controversial.

I have to read the poem many times to look for some sense. I'm glad I did that.

This written is a genius, poetic and at the same time editorial. I like how the poem portrays an irony of government as an 'identity', that it has a public image (a good image for that matter), but hidden in this 'identity' is a monster of violence and manipulation.

The writer has his own style which I like. Makes the poem unforgettable.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2024

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

This is a powerful (and important) message. The repetition of phrases such as "a secret identity" and "the government is a violent disguise" emphasizes how these themes are connected. I think your poem does an excellent job of shedding light on this.

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2024