Drunken Actions
A tragic case of paranoia and mistaken identity.10 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Well, that caught me completely off guard as I am sure was your intention! This is an excellent entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction contest. It's not easy to get a reader invested in a story with just 100 words. Very well done. I wish I had a 6th star left to give it.
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Well, that caught me completely off guard as I am sure was your intention! This is an excellent entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction contest. It's not easy to get a reader invested in a story with just 100 words. Very well done. I wish I had a 6th star left to give it.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
Comment from Jim Wile
Another vivid lesson on why you shouldn't drink when you are agitated and depressed. Bad combination leading to potentially disastrous results as it did in your tragic flash story. Great job with a great ending, Thesis. - Jim
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Another vivid lesson on why you shouldn't drink when you are agitated and depressed. Bad combination leading to potentially disastrous results as it did in your tragic flash story. Great job with a great ending, Thesis. - Jim
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, great story! Good flash fiction might be the hardest type of stories to write for even the best writers. But you've made it look easy with this smooth flowing post. Thanks for sharing. Wish I had a six.
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Wow, great story! Good flash fiction might be the hardest type of stories to write for even the best writers. But you've made it look easy with this smooth flowing post. Thanks for sharing. Wish I had a six.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh my!!!! This is not at all good. Thank you for sharing this extremely well written contest entry. You have all the required elements of a short story. Good luck with the contest.
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Oh my!!!! This is not at all good. Thank you for sharing this extremely well written contest entry. You have all the required elements of a short story. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
Comment from patcelaw
That is such a tragic story, and I enjoyed listening to it. It's amazing the things that we will do when we are in a drink dragon state. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Also, wish you the best in this contest. Patricia .
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That is such a tragic story, and I enjoyed listening to it. It's amazing the things that we will do when we are in a drink dragon state. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Also, wish you the best in this contest. Patricia .
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
Comment from Brett Matthew West
An intriguing first sentence hook that makes one ponder why "Travis Whitley was having a breakdown."
Seeing one's wife "passionately kissing another man" would be more than enough for anger to swell and emotions to be overridden.
Things are not always as they appear though. Are they?
What a surprising twisted ending like well written Flash should contain.
Alcohol can definitely destroy the senses and cause a person to do uncontrolled acts, especially in the heat of the moment.
Hand-counted 100 words so meets that stated requirement of the contest.
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An intriguing first sentence hook that makes one ponder why "Travis Whitley was having a breakdown."
Seeing one's wife "passionately kissing another man" would be more than enough for anger to swell and emotions to be overridden.
Things are not always as they appear though. Are they?
What a surprising twisted ending like well written Flash should contain.
Alcohol can definitely destroy the senses and cause a person to do uncontrolled acts, especially in the heat of the moment.
Hand-counted 100 words so meets that stated requirement of the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Oops! I wonder how much his wife will love him now.
I saw a twist coming, but I didn't guess it - a twin, tricky. And the judges like tricky, so you should do well in this contest.
I love flash fiction - there's always a challenge to telling a whole story in few words.
Good luck and thanks for sharing.
xo
Pam
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Oops! I wonder how much his wife will love him now.
I saw a twist coming, but I didn't guess it - a twin, tricky. And the judges like tricky, so you should do well in this contest.
I love flash fiction - there's always a challenge to telling a whole story in few words.
Good luck and thanks for sharing.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
Comment from Brenda Strauser
What an interesting story. I enjoyed reading it. The picture goes well with it. The ending was different then I thought it would be. Well written. Great job
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What an interesting story. I enjoyed reading it. The picture goes well with it. The ending was different then I thought it would be. Well written. Great job
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
Comment from kahpot
Ha! Ha! "Bloody Hell" what an exceptional short read, you have really got the emotions and imagination going here, nothing else to say really, very well written best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Ha! Ha! "Bloody Hell" what an exceptional short read, you have really got the emotions and imagination going here, nothing else to say really, very well written best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Oh boy. I thought this was excellent. I did not see that ending coming. I thought you did a great job in sharing a rather complex story with only 100 words. Great job!
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Oh boy. I thought this was excellent. I did not see that ending coming. I thought you did a great job in sharing a rather complex story with only 100 words. Great job!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
