Living On The Edge
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Living On The Edge - Chap 3"The blending of good and evil.
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Don't apologise for the length, it was such a great read I didn't notice it, in fact, you could have made it longer.
Now we have Troy shot, and Sami scared out of her wits. But she thinks it's Troy scaring her, but it's not, and I don't think it was Troy who sent the letter. This is a really good story, Carol. I'm glad I can continue you on. Very well done, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Don't apologise for the length, it was such a great read I didn't notice it, in fact, you could have made it longer.
Now we have Troy shot, and Sami scared out of her wits. But she thinks it's Troy scaring her, but it's not, and I don't think it was Troy who sent the letter. This is a really good story, Carol. I'm glad I can continue you on. Very well done, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Good morning, Sandra. So nice to see you and hear your encouragement. I've been struggling all night with how to proceed or if I even should. This challenge is so limited I find myself cramming story on top of story too fast. I can't write the details like I prefer. So a few minutes ago, I started Chapter 10 and decided to try and write it the way I like....if I make the 30 days fine. If I don't, at least I tried. I wonder who else is doing the challenge and whether they are facing the same thoughts. Well, off I go to write. Have a great day!!! Love you, ((HUGS)) Carol
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I haven't seen any others, but there must be. I'll let you know if I find another one. You'll do this easily, you can always add to it after the contest is over, but at the moment, I think you're doing a great job. 🥰💐🍷🥰
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Thanks...guess I just missed that special touch of support you always have. Hope all is well.......
Hugs, Carol
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I just saw I gave Allie a new name!! Sorry about that! I'm off to another chapter now. xxxx
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Not a problem... I just love that you ar enjoying the story. I am much calmer today and writing slower,,,not speed wise but story wise. Thanks!
Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, there's lots of excitement in this chapter! I could feel the fear in Alyssa's heart as she read the letter, spotted Troy in the restaurant, and made her way home. No wonder she broke down and cried. Then Troy is shot! I'm sure he's got many enemies now. The question is, Which one did this? Great job! Hugs! Carol
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Wow, there's lots of excitement in this chapter! I could feel the fear in Alyssa's heart as she read the letter, spotted Troy in the restaurant, and made her way home. No wonder she broke down and cried. Then Troy is shot! I'm sure he's got many enemies now. The question is, Which one did this? Great job! Hugs! Carol
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Now that's exactly what I wanted the reader to feel. I needed the emotion to grab you. Now I can smile... Thank you so much for enjoying it and continuing to read.
Smiles, Carol
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Glad you're smiling again!
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. This guy has been out of prison for a couple of days, and he gets shot. I wonder who shot him? At first, I thought, who would call a policewoman to bring lunch to him on her day off"
Then I recognized he was an evil guy or had something on Alyssa. I can't wait to find out. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. This guy has been out of prison for a couple of days, and he gets shot. I wonder who shot him? At first, I thought, who would call a policewoman to bring lunch to him on her day off"
Then I recognized he was an evil guy or had something on Alyssa. I can't wait to find out. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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You are narrowing in on the fact that he's the evil brother, not the one who just left prison. He might be bitter but he's not bad. Thanks for reading and I hope you'll be able to catch up so you can get a little money too.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Yup I enjoyed it already, and as you can see I read it backwards:) but it's a good plot, balanced action and elements of surprise. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next chapter.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Yup I enjoyed it already, and as you can see I read it backwards:) but it's a good plot, balanced action and elements of surprise. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next chapter.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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thank you so much, Iza. I can't tell you how much I appreciate you taking the time to catch up on my story. Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
This chapter is packed with excitement and action. You do an excellent job with this type of writing. You have this reader on the edge of her chair, waiting to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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This chapter is packed with excitement and action. You do an excellent job with this type of writing. You have this reader on the edge of her chair, waiting to see what happens next.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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April,
Hope you are feeling better. I see you've been busy reading and I hope enjoying every chapter. I really appreciate your dedication to my efforts.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
This chapter is action on top of action. There was no time to relax. Every move Alyssa made and Troy made was filled with suspense and mystery. Who shot Troy, and who sent Alyssa the rose and note? I feel like I'm watching a movie.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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This chapter is action on top of action. There was no time to relax. Every move Alyssa made and Troy made was filled with suspense and mystery. Who shot Troy, and who sent Alyssa the rose and note? I feel like I'm watching a movie.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Hurrah! Thank you Lorraine.... Starting with Chap 6 I'm cutting down the length so it will be easier to read but more expensive for me to post....I just don't want to lose my followers because of the length. Hopefully I can still complete the story within the guidelines. If it gets close, I might have to increase, but for now I am trying. Thanks for putting a smile on my face.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Hope they get to Troy on time. So far it seems that Troy is the "Good" and his brother "Richard" is the "Evil"? And Alyssa has the wrong idea about Troy and will find out as she does her investigation.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Hope they get to Troy on time. So far it seems that Troy is the "Good" and his brother "Richard" is the "Evil"? And Alyssa has the wrong idea about Troy and will find out as she does her investigation.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Yes, Alyssa went from a newbie to an undercover cop before she had a chance to learn the ropes so to speak. Her friend was murdered and the person she thinks is responsible got a slap on the wrist. She's been very vocal and the stress has made her a bit paranoid as well. Another chapter or two and we will see where it's going. Enjoy the ride!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Very good writing and story. Tony comes off as likeable in spite of Alyssa's hatred of him. She seems a little over the top blaming him for something he swears he didn't do. His brother would be happy to see him back in prison. You have a good contrast between the brothers and the Police Chief comes off the loser. Or maybe I just like Bad Boys.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Very good writing and story. Tony comes off as likeable in spite of Alyssa's hatred of him. She seems a little over the top blaming him for something he swears he didn't do. His brother would be happy to see him back in prison. You have a good contrast between the brothers and the Police Chief comes off the loser. Or maybe I just like Bad Boys.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Good choice....I think Alyssa was new to the force before being suddenly shoved into a promotion and she got overwhelmed. Her friend was murdered, the person responsible seems to have gotten a slap on the wrist, and now he's living the free life....or so she thinks.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Great great and great! I wish I could give everything you write a six. You are outdoing yourself. Hello Random House contract! Send them a couple of chapters and they will be hooked. Karen
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Great great and great! I wish I could give everything you write a six. You are outdoing yourself. Hello Random House contract! Send them a couple of chapters and they will be hooked. Karen
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Awesome! I'll take all the virtual sixes I can get.... the fact that you are enjoying the story is enough for me. Imagine a few months ago, I thought I'd never write again. And now, friends like you are praising my work. I am ecstatic.
Thank you so much. Hugs, Carol
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Well, change your mind about thinking you can't do this. We will let you know if you are tilting. The longest thing I ever wrote was " I really don't belong here". It was about this guy in the mental hospital. Almost 9,000 words. I mean you had to bring a lunch. I wrote it when I first got here before I learned that people here want their reading in bite size chunks. Give it a read when you have time. I would appreciate your advice. I feel I ran out of steam at the end. Karen
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I've written other novels and a few I never finished due to family problems, but this time is different. I feel so good when I write. Thank you again.
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I know the chapters in this book are much longer than any others I've written but due to the time crunch and the story it's deemed necessary. So far I've not had any complaints.
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I will not give up writing for family drama this time. At my advanced age I will come first now. As long as somebody likes what I write, I will continue. :-)
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We all like it too much to moan about it. Plus, when the story is good we do not notice the length. :-)
Comment from royowen
So Troy has been shot, I think he might have made one or two enemies in His crooked life. I wonder what was in the letter Alyssa received and who sent the flowers it's sounding more and more sinister, well done, Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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So Troy has been shot, I think he might have made one or two enemies in His crooked life. I wonder what was in the letter Alyssa received and who sent the flowers it's sounding more and more sinister, well done, Blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Sinister is my new key word...at least for this chapter. lol Glad you are enjoy.
Smiles, Carol
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Well done