Sharon Melissa
Acrostic for a special woman6 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This acrostic poem, SHARON MELISSA, has the proper formatting and shows the subject of the verse that she is valued and worthy of another's recognition.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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This acrostic poem, SHARON MELISSA, has the proper formatting and shows the subject of the verse that she is valued and worthy of another's recognition.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Hi, Bill - Thank you for reading and reviewing! - Aisha
Comment from Douglas Goff
What a great tribute to an old friend. I think it is a special honor to be forever immortalized in writing like this.
I would suggest holding or switching color of the first letter in each sentence to highlight/reveal here name. Lends a poignancy to the work.
Great piece. You have talent!
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What a great tribute to an old friend. I think it is a special honor to be forever immortalized in writing like this.
I would suggest holding or switching color of the first letter in each sentence to highlight/reveal here name. Lends a poignancy to the work.
Great piece. You have talent!
D
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Aisha,
A lovely poem for a woman who seems to have impacted your life in some way, albeit to take the ex away. I have one of those I am thankful for on a daily basis.
I like the part about letting go of the idea that you have to be perfect to be a friend (you put it way more poetic). It's a valid point.
Take care,
Rhonda
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Hi Aisha,
A lovely poem for a woman who seems to have impacted your life in some way, albeit to take the ex away. I have one of those I am thankful for on a daily basis.
I like the part about letting go of the idea that you have to be perfect to be a friend (you put it way more poetic). It's a valid point.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I sounds like you were glad to get rid of this guy and this girl with a kind heart became a good friend, I liked: (salvation by relationship), a poignant post Aisha, I wonder if she has ever read your poem? love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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I sounds like you were glad to get rid of this guy and this girl with a kind heart became a good friend, I liked: (salvation by relationship), a poignant post Aisha, I wonder if she has ever read your poem? love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Hi, Dolly - This was in 1985. I wrote it to give to her because the guy didn't treat her any better than he treated me. ;-) This is what I wrote about him the same year...
Requiem from the Last One
The image is of a funeral ? it is yours.
You are an old man when you die,
telephone in your hand.
I find you,
slumped in the chair
that made you comfortable in my home.
I sigh,
take the receiver and call
the spirits to come and mourn.
I know the names ?
hours and hours of
litanies of your loves:
your mother and toni and diane and pam and pat and elizabeth and melissa ?
and? and... and?
I handle the business of your burial,
knowing, as you would never admit,
that I was not the one, either ?
just the last one.
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Men never change Aisha, I know someone who treated his ex-wife badly for years and then I met him and he was the same with me x x x
Comment from Kelly Hope
This is a great poem. I'm still learning how to express myself with not as many words, as the same as this poem. It's a great read, very fascinating.
God bless!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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This is a great poem. I'm still learning how to express myself with not as many words, as the same as this poem. It's a great read, very fascinating.
God bless!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Hi, Kelly - Thank you! I saw your request to review your poetry, and will do so. - Aisha
Comment from royowen
Sometimes some things are hard to change, the definition of a biblica saint is not quite the same as a biblical saint, all believers are ordained as saints, no one glows more than anyone else, but a lovely tribute, it's an excellent post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Sometimes some things are hard to change, the definition of a biblica saint is not quite the same as a biblical saint, all believers are ordained as saints, no one glows more than anyone else, but a lovely tribute, it's an excellent post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Roy.
