Recrimination
Husband and wife, together against a common fear.10 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I feel I missed something with this contest entry. I read it twice. Maybe it's just me. I'm sure others figured it out. I guess I haven't figured out the solution. I got the characters, setting, problem. Hmm. Oh well, sometimes my brain forgets to work. Good luck with the contest.
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I feel I missed something with this contest entry. I read it twice. Maybe it's just me. I'm sure others figured it out. I guess I haven't figured out the solution. I got the characters, setting, problem. Hmm. Oh well, sometimes my brain forgets to work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
Comment from XinaD
This story packs a lot of punch for so few words. I've never seen a Vermont winter, but it sounds a lot like the ones where I'm at and you painted a perfect picture of something I can totally see happening. Great work!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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This story packs a lot of punch for so few words. I've never seen a Vermont winter, but it sounds a lot like the ones where I'm at and you painted a perfect picture of something I can totally see happening. Great work!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thanks SO much! Comments that a reader can "see" what I've described are the best! - Aisha
Comment from jessizero
Congratulations on getting this story down from 600+ words to only 100. Your story was well-told and very interesting. You managed to use many details in such a short piece. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Congratulations on getting this story down from 600+ words to only 100. Your story was well-told and very interesting. You managed to use many details in such a short piece. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the kind wishes, Jessi! Now that I understand more about how FanStory works, I've realized that one must sort of "buy into" a chance to win or there won't be enough reviewers. Ah, well - I'll just have fun putting work on the site. Aisha
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Driving into danger such as this sounds like a nightmare and I remember once being in a car that broke down in the depths of winter in France and neither of us had a phone signal. I heard a clunking sound and realised that the starter motor had stuck with the extreme cold as it was -20 degrees celsius. I suggested we rock the car to release it and we released the hand brake and the car rolled backwards and the starter motor then worked. It was a miracle! We got home in one piece and the terror of the situation as over. A fine write Aisha, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Driving into danger such as this sounds like a nightmare and I remember once being in a car that broke down in the depths of winter in France and neither of us had a phone signal. I heard a clunking sound and realised that the starter motor had stuck with the extreme cold as it was -20 degrees celsius. I suggested we rock the car to release it and we released the hand brake and the car rolled backwards and the starter motor then worked. It was a miracle! We got home in one piece and the terror of the situation as over. A fine write Aisha, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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I haven't been in this situation before - what a relief you could rock out!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
How will they handle this, indeed! I read entirely too much Stephen King to be comfortable with two people walking in the Vermont woods, alone, in the dark. Good entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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How will they handle this, indeed! I read entirely too much Stephen King to be comfortable with two people walking in the Vermont woods, alone, in the dark. Good entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Hi, Marilyn - Yes, I was hoping to convey a Stephen King-ish feel. :-) Thanks for reading and reviewing! Aisha
Comment from Teri7
Aisha, I enjoyed reading this 100 Word flash fiction story. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from the artwork you chose. It all went together very well.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Aisha, I enjoyed reading this 100 Word flash fiction story. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from the artwork you chose. It all went together very well.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Hi, Teri - I very much appreciate your review! - Aisha
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Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Recrimination, has the proper word count and seems to find the deadly pair "mistaker" and "pointer-outer" together and lost in the snow.
I am assuming it is their own footprints they come upon.
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This one-hundred-word story, Recrimination, has the proper word count and seems to find the deadly pair "mistaker" and "pointer-outer" together and lost in the snow.
I am assuming it is their own footprints they come upon.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
Comment from royowen
What a good entry in this contest, there's one thing about a chassis that certainly makes a difference to the the stability to the car, beautifully written, good luck in the flash fiction contest, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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What a good entry in this contest, there's one thing about a chassis that certainly makes a difference to the the stability to the car, beautifully written, good luck in the flash fiction contest, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Roy! Blessings to you, too!
Comment from Kelly Hope
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. There's a way that you express and portray this is meant to catch the eye. Keep up the good work, you're very talented and I can't wait for your next read.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. There's a way that you express and portray this is meant to catch the eye. Keep up the good work, you're very talented and I can't wait for your next read.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Hi, Kelly - thank you for reading, reviewing, and complimenting my work! To be honest, I had so much fun writing this, it doesn't seem right to call it work (smile).
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I'd love some feedback on my poetry, give it a look. Please 😊
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a dramatic scene. It sounds as though the character of Mick has an angry reaction and rather than slow down, he speeds up while driving with Loretta. But they survive a collision, only to find themselves alone in the dark, snow-covered woods, with only a trail of footprints to possibly guide them to somewhere else safer. Interesting train of events.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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This is a dramatic scene. It sounds as though the character of Mick has an angry reaction and rather than slow down, he speeds up while driving with Loretta. But they survive a collision, only to find themselves alone in the dark, snow-covered woods, with only a trail of footprints to possibly guide them to somewhere else safer. Interesting train of events.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Hi! Thank you for reading and reviewing! This couple had had a long night of sparring and sniping at each other and Mick had been drinking, but I had to cut all of that out to get to 100 words (smile). What I hoped to convey was that the event left them standing together instead of angry apart, regardless of what came next.
