Baseball and the Bridge
75 word flash contest entry13 total reviews
Comment from BermyBye50
jmdg1954
Congrats on your win in the 75 Word Story contest. Your free verse poem captures the dreams ans aspirations of youth and the gift of friendship with short concise dialogue and a little unexpected humor. Well done.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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jmdg1954
Congrats on your win in the 75 Word Story contest. Your free verse poem captures the dreams ans aspirations of youth and the gift of friendship with short concise dialogue and a little unexpected humor. Well done.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Eugene.
I am sorry for the late reply of many thanks! I read this the day you posted it, but never responded. That?s "my bad" as kids would say.
I appreciate your reading this short little diddy and your congrats on the win mean a lot.
Cheers, my friend,
John
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, this was so much fun to read! I love a story with a happy ending too, and yours is not only happy but witty -- "Suddenly they rode a bridge of laughter instead." I see how this is the winner!
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Oh, this was so much fun to read! I love a story with a happy ending too, and yours is not only happy but witty -- "Suddenly they rode a bridge of laughter instead." I see how this is the winner!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
Comment from Jumbo J
Firstly John... congratulations on your win in the seventy-five word story contest my Brother.
I believe you captured the essence of friendship and comradery of boyhood. The bridge of connection has many levels in common... and with boys... and dare I say it, 'older boys' as well, do love to make known their gassy achievements... hmmmmm, or was it the dog?:))
I could hear the boys laughing... great punchline to cap it all off!
With our thoughts we create...
common ground.
Kindest regards,
James.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Firstly John... congratulations on your win in the seventy-five word story contest my Brother.
I believe you captured the essence of friendship and comradery of boyhood. The bridge of connection has many levels in common... and with boys... and dare I say it, 'older boys' as well, do love to make known their gassy achievements... hmmmmm, or was it the dog?:))
I could hear the boys laughing... great punchline to cap it all off!
With our thoughts we create...
common ground.
Kindest regards,
James.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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So I?m sitting here watching basketball and saying thank you on this semi-baseball story. Hmph? just a sports nut!
My friend, James thank you so much for the congrats on my winning the contest, the six stars and for being a friend! Your reviews never dissapoint, always positive and leaves me feeling on no a high!
Thanks my brother?
John
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Hahahaha!! You have captured the essence of boys: sports and gas. This gave me a good chuckle. Great work, and good luck with it at the polls, Mystery Writer. I have a hunch it will do well. xo
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Hahahaha!! You have captured the essence of boys: sports and gas. This gave me a good chuckle. Great work, and good luck with it at the polls, Mystery Writer. I have a hunch it will do well. xo
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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This did well? I won? woo-hoo! Sorry for getting back to you so late, I?ve been working a lot lately.
Rachelle, thank you for this great review.
John
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Congrats!!
Comment from Jeano
I've read them all, and yours stands out as having a good chance for a win. Friendships are based on many things, even if it is a fart. That's how boys are. Good luck with this contest.
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I've read them all, and yours stands out as having a good chance for a win. Friendships are based on many things, even if it is a fart. That's how boys are. Good luck with this contest.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The season of baseball is upon us. When I was reading this, I wondered why the boys didn't invite the boy to play baseball with them even though he could not throw a ball.
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The season of baseball is upon us. When I was reading this, I wondered why the boys didn't invite the boy to play baseball with them even though he could not throw a ball.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
Comment from Wendy G
Typical boy humour, but it was obviously sufficient to have him included in the group, despite his lack of baseball skills. Very humorous write. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
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Typical boy humour, but it was obviously sufficient to have him included in the group, despite his lack of baseball skills. Very humorous write. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I loved this little story. I grew up with two brothers and this is a conversation they couldn't easily had. Charming story in only 75 words, A perfect entry for the 75 Word Story contest. Good luck.
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I loved this little story. I grew up with two brothers and this is a conversation they couldn't easily had. Charming story in only 75 words, A perfect entry for the 75 Word Story contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2024
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Hand-counted seventy-five words, so meets that requirement of the contest.
Boys and baseball go hand-in-hand. And, like most boys, if you can not play baseball you do not fit in with the team.
Joey found a way to belong. He, and his one thing that possibly fit him in with his friends even more than baseball...a fart.
Want boys to laugh? That little stunt does the trick every time.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Hand-counted seventy-five words, so meets that requirement of the contest.
Boys and baseball go hand-in-hand. And, like most boys, if you can not play baseball you do not fit in with the team.
Joey found a way to belong. He, and his one thing that possibly fit him in with his friends even more than baseball...a fart.
Want boys to laugh? That little stunt does the trick every time.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Some adults too.
Thank you for reading and sharing.
Comment from mermaids
Your story sounds true to life, something boys would be discussing with each other. It is nice that these boys end up being friends. Good entry for the contest, you tell a tale in few words.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Your story sounds true to life, something boys would be discussing with each other. It is nice that these boys end up being friends. Good entry for the contest, you tell a tale in few words.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024
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Thank you so very much.
