Leap Year Laughing
a 75-word story11 total reviews
Comment from Dimzdale1
Ah, I get it. There is no dialogue, but I get your meaning. Thank you for your earlier comments on my work, I will try to continue to improve. Again, Thank you.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Ah, I get it. There is no dialogue, but I get your meaning. Thank you for your earlier comments on my work, I will try to continue to improve. Again, Thank you.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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I have a million examples in my portfolio, D.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Haaaa! GOOD ONE!! I did not see it coming, and that's the sign of a terrific flash story. I bet it will do very well in this contest. Good luck to you at the polls! xo
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Haaaa! GOOD ONE!! I did not see it coming, and that's the sign of a terrific flash story. I bet it will do very well in this contest. Good luck to you at the polls! xo
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Rachelle
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Clowns are usually hilarious. Missing clowns is not so much fun! They found the shoes but not the missing person. Can you remember where they dressed as clowns and did dreadful things?
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Clowns are usually hilarious. Missing clowns is not so much fun! They found the shoes but not the missing person. Can you remember where they dressed as clowns and did dreadful things?
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Clowns, right?
Comment from papa55mike
That's right, it's never too late to begin again. Don't forget the red nose. What a wonderfully written little story. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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That's right, it's never too late to begin again. Don't forget the red nose. What a wonderfully written little story. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Mike
Comment from derek campbell
Very good sir! I like your style keep up the good work and good luck! I hope you keep on writing your very talented don't give up my vote goes to you...............,,:::......,;(?)!!???(((;;;,::::
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Very good sir! I like your style keep up the good work and good luck! I hope you keep on writing your very talented don't give up my vote goes to you...............,,:::......,;(?)!!???(((;;;,::::
Comment Written 01-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Derek
Comment from Begin Again
Love the shoes! In this upside and sideways world we live in today, if you can find some laughter to add to someone's day...do it and do it again. Laughter is the best medicine. A cute 75 word flash Good luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Love the shoes! In this upside and sideways world we live in today, if you can find some laughter to add to someone's day...do it and do it again. Laughter is the best medicine. A cute 75 word flash Good luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Carol
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Oh no. Not a clown! I enjoyed the story but as with anything relating to clowns it brought a feeling of unease. I am thinking that was intentional? Nice entry for the 75 Word Story contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Oh no. Not a clown! I enjoyed the story but as with anything relating to clowns it brought a feeling of unease. I am thinking that was intentional? Nice entry for the 75 Word Story contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Marilyn
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Some people just do not know a good thing when they see it as depicted by "felt the day was long enough without the mechanations of the buffoon."
If the "oversized shoes" (which implies clown footwear) belongs to "the missing adolescent" (which implies he was Boo-Koo the Street Clown), little uncertain here. How can the narrator be the one who's "Time to entertain again" has arrived? Is the reason because he is four years older and last performed in the previous Leap Year?
Hand-counted seventy-five words so meets that contest requirement.
A tense change from past (from the beginning of the story up to "Today though" where "I am looking" to the end of the story becomes present tense.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Some people just do not know a good thing when they see it as depicted by "felt the day was long enough without the mechanations of the buffoon."
If the "oversized shoes" (which implies clown footwear) belongs to "the missing adolescent" (which implies he was Boo-Koo the Street Clown), little uncertain here. How can the narrator be the one who's "Time to entertain again" has arrived? Is the reason because he is four years older and last performed in the previous Leap Year?
Hand-counted seventy-five words so meets that contest requirement.
A tense change from past (from the beginning of the story up to "Today though" where "I am looking" to the end of the story becomes present tense.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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The limited word requirements make it necessary for the reader to fill in certain aspects of the story. I find that it reads okay as either a Leap Year serial killer, or as a friendly clown who dresses up every four years to entertain.
I don't see a tense shift from beginning to end, since it begins in the present, reflects on the past, then ends in the present.
Happy day.
Comment from RodG
Your story has all the elements setting, plot, characters, and theme. I like the subtle elements of mystery you snuck in (where is Boo Koo the clown and why did he disappear?). Good surprise ending where we learn his identity. I enjoyed your FF tale. Rod
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Your story has all the elements setting, plot, characters, and theme. I like the subtle elements of mystery you snuck in (where is Boo Koo the clown and why did he disappear?). Good surprise ending where we learn his identity. I enjoyed your FF tale. Rod
Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Rod
Comment from Elise H
That last line feels so sinister, I love it. I hope I'm not reading this wrong, but your narrator is responsible for Boo-Koo's disappearance, right? If so, this is really clever.
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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That last line feels so sinister, I love it. I hope I'm not reading this wrong, but your narrator is responsible for Boo-Koo's disappearance, right? If so, this is really clever.
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Comment Written 27-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Elise
