Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

Your selection of picture is graphic and arresting. Your poetry is concise and haunting. Easter is upon us. Have a great weekend and enjoy better weather. Karen

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024

Thanks so much, Karen, for the positive comments. I plan to take advantage of the nicer weather. I hope you do too.
Joan

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 29-Feb-2024

:-)

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

I can't find the explanation of what differentiates a Ukiah from a Haiku. I guess I need to join the club!
Anyway, there's nothing back-to-front about your poem, except the inference that six weeks out of fifty-two isn't really enough. Perhaps forty-six weeks would be better!

 Comment Written 29-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 29-Feb-2024

Thanks, Tony,
Yes we do need to remember His sacrifice more often than we do.
I have learned a lot in this club and then other clubs I have entered
I realized I have to go back and rewrite this because I missed that it was supposed use mono-rhyme. I will repost a new one when I correct it.
Joan

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Joan,
I applaud your poem, remembering Christ's sacrifice on a Roman cross.
Have you ever heard Wendy Francisco's song, "Where Is The Lamb"? Please, search for it in Youtube. It tells the story of Abraham's obedience in sacrificing his son, Isaac... and how it compares to God allowing Jesus to be crucified for the sins of the world. Abraham didn't have to go through with his offering, but God did. And Jesus paid the price for all mankind.
Can I offer a suggestion to your poem?
"six weeks every year some
remember one man's
agony, death, and rebirth." ... (I suggest,

for six weeks every year
we recall one man's
agony, death, and rebirth )
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I've been involved in Gospel music since I was 25 years old, Joan, so there are a lot of songs in my pointed head. Here's another oldie for Easter. I hope it blesses you as much as it has me. Search Youtube for it. It's called "A Broken Heart" by Dallas Holm.

Blessings,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024

Hi Kimbob,
Thanks for the nice review, the constructive criticism of editing and the song recommendations. I will look them up.
JOan

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. It's sad that only for six weeks every year many people only remember the one who died for our sins. He should be remembered every second of every day. I enjoyed reading.

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024

Thank you, Barbara.
You are so right.
Joan

Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick

Excellent

This is a nicely written poem. Your photo is very fitting and compliment your words well. Very nicely done. Great poem for the club entry.well done.

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024

Thanks for the encouraging words, Joanne.
Joan

reply by Joanne Gill-Maddick on 28-Feb-2024

Your welcome

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Not a day goes by that I forget Christ's sacrifice for me. I love my Savior and Lord so much and cherish my salvation. Sending you my best today as always and blessings in Christ.
Sal xos

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024

Thanks for the comments a the stars, Sally.
Joan

Comment from John Ciarmello

Excellent

It's such a beautifully worded piece, dp. I try to remember Him every day. It becomes easier as the world around us gets more difficult to bear.

Thank you for this post! Best, JohnC

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024

Thanks for the nice review, John. You are so right that we need strength from faith to bear are the war and physical violence.
Joan

Comment from jake cosmos aller

Excellent

excellent short sweat re-telling of the foundational myth of Christianity capturing in a few short lines the passion of the Christ. Perfect timing for Easter

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024

Thanks for this nice review, Jake. It is much appreciated.
Joan

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Beautifully presented ukiah poem Joan. You share your faith and what this time of year means to you on the lead in to Easter. Well done with this backwards haiku,
Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024

Thanks, Pearl, for reading and reviewing my poem.
Joan

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This is a reverse haiku isn't it? And yours is a very impressive one for the club, beautifully presented, and fulfilling the brief. Your fine words, inspired by faith, flow very pleasingly in this verse form. Well done, Joan. Debbie

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2024

Yes it is, Debbie. Thanks for thorough and encouraging review.
Joan