Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

I'm southern we were raised on stories like those.
Lots of Louisiana stories. This was told well. Unpacking again tomorrow. I have a small path in my room now. I will have to get a new computer, Karen

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024

Thank you.
Sorry about having to get a new computer. That's a close second to moving.
Good luck with getting settled in.

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 31-Jul-2024

All my computers have no updates to get anymore. So, in order to work with other things I need a new non chrome unit.
Ideas? Karen

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

This is a well written story. I'd recommend steering away from the heavy telling at the start. When you use dialogue and internal thought you show us vs telling. But outside of that this was an enjoyable read. I like how you worked your way to the curse. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024

Thank you.
Yes. My problem was that i had 5 hours to submit and it was going on bedtime. (smiley face here)
I appreciate your review and the five stars.

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

I'm guessing the cursed object was the love potion. Hmm, I have to tell you, reading that first paragraph wasn't easy. Are you sure you needed that dialect to tell this story? The editing and actual writing structure is fine though.

And the ending is a bit confusing.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024

Thank you. You should have seen the 1st paragraph when I stayed true to actual dialect. The locals would hardly comprehend the newer version.
They needed to be bumpkins whether set in New Orleans, New Jersey, or the Appalachians.