The Curse of Love
The best laid plans...2 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is a well written story. I'd recommend steering away from the heavy telling at the start. When you use dialogue and internal thought you show us vs telling. But outside of that this was an enjoyable read. I like how you worked your way to the curse. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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This is a well written story. I'd recommend steering away from the heavy telling at the start. When you use dialogue and internal thought you show us vs telling. But outside of that this was an enjoyable read. I like how you worked your way to the curse. Nicely done.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2024
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Thank you.
Yes. My problem was that i had 5 hours to submit and it was going on bedtime. (smiley face here)
I appreciate your review and the five stars.
Comment from lancellot
I'm guessing the cursed object was the love potion. Hmm, I have to tell you, reading that first paragraph wasn't easy. Are you sure you needed that dialect to tell this story? The editing and actual writing structure is fine though.
And the ending is a bit confusing.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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I'm guessing the cursed object was the love potion. Hmm, I have to tell you, reading that first paragraph wasn't easy. Are you sure you needed that dialect to tell this story? The editing and actual writing structure is fine though.
And the ending is a bit confusing.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Thank you. You should have seen the 1st paragraph when I stayed true to actual dialect. The locals would hardly comprehend the newer version.
They needed to be bumpkins whether set in New Orleans, New Jersey, or the Appalachians.
