Gone
Being alone30 total reviews
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lisa,
it sounds like the lady he's waiting for was with him for awhile, since there was lipstick in the wineglass. This is a very sad poem, and it expresses something that I suppose most of us have experienced at some time in our lives. It seems incomprehensible that we could love a person so much and not have that love reciprocated. How we are tossed about in our lives, like clothes in a dryer until we finally find ourselves, hopefully where we're supposed to be. Well done gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Hello Lisa,
it sounds like the lady he's waiting for was with him for awhile, since there was lipstick in the wineglass. This is a very sad poem, and it expresses something that I suppose most of us have experienced at some time in our lives. It seems incomprehensible that we could love a person so much and not have that love reciprocated. How we are tossed about in our lives, like clothes in a dryer until we finally find ourselves, hopefully where we're supposed to be. Well done gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 22-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Good morning Dear Tom,
Thank you for your review. You hit the nail on the head...understanding exactly what my poem was about! I came in second on this poem...Loads of reviews but only a few vo......
Lisa, early morning in Spain
Comment from Michael Cassar
Gracefully written. The verse "waiting for you" gently echos and expresses the pain felt by the abandoned. The drama of loneliness is nicely depicted by its recalling significant events, maybe daily, imprinted in memory. A pain experienced by just the lonely person. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Gracefully written. The verse "waiting for you" gently echos and expresses the pain felt by the abandoned. The drama of loneliness is nicely depicted by its recalling significant events, maybe daily, imprinted in memory. A pain experienced by just the lonely person. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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First time I see a review from you Micheal?and what a wonderful review it is?
Thank you so much
I can in second in the contest
Lisa
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Maybe you can critique my poetry!!!
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Plan to...
Lisa
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Like your lonely poem. This poem is kind of difficult to write a review for as it seems like an unknown romance is waiting out yonder for someone, someday.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Like your lonely poem. This poem is kind of difficult to write a review for as it seems like an unknown romance is waiting out yonder for someone, someday.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Good morning Rosemary,
I ended up with second place. Interesting that you found it hard to connect with my words. This was written from a males perspective. Quite simple... they were have wine... she said it was over.... she left... he was heart broken...
Thank you for reading my poem,
Lisasview
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Congrats on the second pace win!
Comment from teafor2
lisa: A 'persona' poem written by the opposite gender. All the signs of
pensiveness...These repeated phrases and their accompanied ellipses
indicates the different reflections of subject with a fair amount of time consuming the day...Leading to excepting the fate of being alone. Good
luck in the contest. teafor2
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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lisa: A 'persona' poem written by the opposite gender. All the signs of
pensiveness...These repeated phrases and their accompanied ellipses
indicates the different reflections of subject with a fair amount of time consuming the day...Leading to excepting the fate of being alone. Good
luck in the contest. teafor2
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Ah, sadly your good wishes are too late for the Blind Contest that ended yesterday. I came in second...
I often write from a males perspective.
Thank you for taking the time to read and review...
How did you happen to see this one of mine? Did you see it in my portfolio?
Lisa
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Sorry, about that lisa. Yes...This one spoke to me from your portfolio. I've
only been back on site for two weeks?
teafor2
Comment from Boogienights
This is a terrific poem, filled with a lot of sadness and longing. It really captured the feeling of lonliness when love is unrequited. An excellent contest entry, best of luck to you.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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This is a terrific poem, filled with a lot of sadness and longing. It really captured the feeling of lonliness when love is unrequited. An excellent contest entry, best of luck to you.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2024
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Good morning and thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem Gone... I appreciate your well wishes for the contest...but it ended yesterday and I came in second...Loads of excellent reviews but very little v's...
Lisa
Comment from jaded831
Very relatable and moving. Extremely poetic a joy to read. I have experienced that same feeling, and the scenes we create in our own mind, amplifies the loneliness. You did a great job.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Very relatable and moving. Extremely poetic a joy to read. I have experienced that same feeling, and the scenes we create in our own mind, amplifies the loneliness. You did a great job.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Thank you dear Jaded...I am delighted to know you enjoyed my poem Gone for the contest...
Thank you for saying that I did a great job...
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Good morning Jaded,
Just a quick hello to say I came in second in the Lonely contest with Gone...
Thank you again for your excellent review,
Lisasview
Comment from Janet Foor
I think this is by far the best of the lonely poems I have read this far. My heart breaks for this person you describe so eloquently in your poem. I wish I had a sixth star for your poem.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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I think this is by far the best of the lonely poems I have read this far. My heart breaks for this person you describe so eloquently in your poem. I wish I had a sixth star for your poem.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much dear Janet for reading and reviewing my poem Gone.
Saying this is the best lonely poem means a lot to me.
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Good morning dear Janet,
Just a quick hello to say I came in second in the Gone contest. Thank you again for your excellent review,
Lisa
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Congratulations!!!. I thought yours was the best.
Comment from Julie Helms
Unreciprocated love is truly heartbreaking. You used excellent phrases to draw the imagery for the waiting, the realizing, the aloneness. The metaphor with the oncoming night is well done.
Julie
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Unreciprocated love is truly heartbreaking. You used excellent phrases to draw the imagery for the waiting, the realizing, the aloneness. The metaphor with the oncoming night is well done.
Julie
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Thank you dear Julie for your wonderful review! I do appreciate that you felt I used excellent phrases and that you saw my unplanned metaphors. I love metaphors and for me they just happen.
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Just a quick hello agin to say that I read your review to my sister about the metaphor and we both feel that you left me an excellent review... So thank you again...
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You are very welcome! I wish I knew who you were, I will look this up again once it is unblinded. :-)
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I know who you are dear Julie...and, if you can not find me I will remember to say something when the contest is over... I doubt I will win...
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I SEE you! Congratulations on your second place win! It was an awesome entry :-)
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Good morning Julie,
Just a quick hello to say I came in second in the Money contest with Gone. Thank you again for your excellent review,
Lisa
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Hi Lisa, you deserved first, but congratulations!! And you are very welcome! :-)
Comment from Jeano
I'm reading them all and only commenting on my number 1-2-3. Having read them all, this is my choice for first place. I liked the repetition, it brought power to the word loneliness. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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I'm reading them all and only commenting on my number 1-2-3. Having read them all, this is my choice for first place. I liked the repetition, it brought power to the word loneliness. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Wow, how wonderful to know my poem is your choice for first place. Thank you for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate it.
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Good morning Jean,
Just a quick hello to say that I came in second in the lonely contest with Gone. I really appreciate your V... and wonderful review.
Lisasview
Comment from cupa tea
This is a poem that could easily make me cry. I've experienced this. You've hit the nail on the head. I'm guessing you've experienced it as well because I can feel the grief in your poem.
Good Luck
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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This is a poem that could easily make me cry. I've experienced this. You've hit the nail on the head. I'm guessing you've experienced it as well because I can feel the grief in your poem.
Good Luck
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem Gone. I am so happy to know you were moved by it?when a poem of mine brings emotion to the reader I am thrilled.
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Good morning cup tea (cute name)
I just wanted to let you know that i came in second in the Lonely contest with my Gone..
Thank you so much for your well wishes,
Lisasview
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I'm glad to hear it. You had a wonderful poem!
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Did you read all the poems...and the one that won...
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Forgot to say thank you...
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I always read them all before I vote. But I didn't know who won....
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Thant is great to know... I actually went back and edited mine to get back the original layout I had for my poem... After I submitted it I realised it could not be more that 15 lines so I changed the lines...but I like my original version as it reads better...at least I think so. Anyway, it in back to my original in my portf.....
Lisa
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This happens, Red skies, an entry I made in a contest I cut shorter to match the contest. It got disqualified because they said it lacked something the contest required. I know that it didn't and the judges were wrong. I even pointed that out to them but they ignored me.
I prefer the longer version anyway, but the shorter one is here in my closet.
