Comment from Treischel

Excellent

This is a sad poem that resonates with the truth about a breakup. Written as a free-flowing free verse poem in four quatrains of mixed meter. The sentiments ring through with emotion. Then it provides a ray of hope. Very nice.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024

Thanks again. I think I am beginning to find a bit of a creative spirit again!

Comment from Mrs Melody Ann Sharpe

Average

The first line in each stanza is thought-provoking. Starting the last stanza with similar words - eg Happy to witness the ..... to keep the flow of the poem similar is the only suggestion I have.
I enjoyed the picture your words painted.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024

Thank you so much. I am trying to regain my creative spirit!

Comment from Baltimore Born

Excellent

This poem is well-crafted. The poem reads and flows well. Break ups are difficult to handle. Your poem gives some of the struggles a person might have with a ending of a relationship. The last stanza turns this around in the message of hope. Good poem.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2024

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024

Thank you so much. My intent was to not be totally hopeless but to indicate looking forward because there is always a possibility of a better tomorrow.

reply by Baltimore Born on 12-Feb-2024

You are welcome.