Retribution
Did you think I would let it go?10 total reviews
Comment from Jeano
Seems Joey knows how to get in trouble. Very cute story. You didn't waste any words and were able to set it up, and play it out all within the guidelines. Very well done. There's definitely a competition going on here. This is one of them. Good luck.
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Seems Joey knows how to get in trouble. Very cute story. You didn't waste any words and were able to set it up, and play it out all within the guidelines. Very well done. There's definitely a competition going on here. This is one of them. Good luck.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
Comment from jessizero
This interaction between brother and sister was hilarious. I think they were both to blame, but I must admit I was cheering for Joey. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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This interaction between brother and sister was hilarious. I think they were both to blame, but I must admit I was cheering for Joey. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a short short story that does a good job explaining how a brother gets back at his sister for telling on a late arrival home. I would just suggest a couple of punctuation changes here:
At 7:30 a.m. this morning, I produced a video showing her at her worst. Brushing her teeth, her hair a mess, she had no idea I was going to send it to all her peers.
Maybe try:
At 7:30 a.m. this morning, I produced a video showing her at her worst--brushing her teeth, her hair a mess. She had no idea I was going to send it to all her peers.
I meant to say there could be a long dash between worst and brushing, which can be inserted in the Advanced Editor page.
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This is a short short story that does a good job explaining how a brother gets back at his sister for telling on a late arrival home. I would just suggest a couple of punctuation changes here:
At 7:30 a.m. this morning, I produced a video showing her at her worst. Brushing her teeth, her hair a mess, she had no idea I was going to send it to all her peers.
Maybe try:
At 7:30 a.m. this morning, I produced a video showing her at her worst--brushing her teeth, her hair a mess. She had no idea I was going to send it to all her peers.
I meant to say there could be a long dash between worst and brushing, which can be inserted in the Advanced Editor page.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
Comment from Lisasview
I loved your 100 Word Contest Dash post... Very funny... at first I thought it was about two sisters...and was quite surprised to find it was a young man.
I wish you the very best of luck in the contest,
Lisa
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I loved your 100 Word Contest Dash post... Very funny... at first I thought it was about two sisters...and was quite surprised to find it was a young man.
I wish you the very best of luck in the contest,
Lisa
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
Comment from sherrygreywolf
My son's name is Joe(y) and I can literally see him doing this to his sister. And her reaction would have been quite the same. You have written a cute little piece for the 100 Word Dash contest and it should do quite well. No errors noted. Good job.
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My son's name is Joe(y) and I can literally see him doing this to his sister. And her reaction would have been quite the same. You have written a cute little piece for the 100 Word Dash contest and it should do quite well. No errors noted. Good job.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2024
Comment from Julie Helms
Ahh, sibling love at its finest! I was an only child, so I missed out on all that. It seems to have gotten nastier in the digital age. You produced a complete story with characters and conflict. Thanks for sharing! Julie
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Ahh, sibling love at its finest! I was an only child, so I missed out on all that. It seems to have gotten nastier in the digital age. You produced a complete story with characters and conflict. Thanks for sharing! Julie
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
lol That's funny and in just 100 words! This is an excellent story for the challenge! It is believable from my excellent and it made me truly laugh.
Best wishes,
Alex
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lol That's funny and in just 100 words! This is an excellent story for the challenge! It is believable from my excellent and it made me truly laugh.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
Comment from lancellot
This is an interesting little tale. I think it will resonate with those who had little annoying brothers, or pranks between siblings. Those fond memories will lead to member votes.
Good idea.
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This is an interesting little tale. I think it will resonate with those who had little annoying brothers, or pranks between siblings. Those fond memories will lead to member votes.
Good idea.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
Comment from Begin Again
Joey, Joey, Joey..... that's worse than a woman scorned! You put your life in serious danger. LOL Siblings are going to be siblings and are guaranteed to get even when tables are turned. Well done.
Smiles, Carol
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Joey, Joey, Joey..... that's worse than a woman scorned! You put your life in serious danger. LOL Siblings are going to be siblings and are guaranteed to get even when tables are turned. Well done.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
Comment from Janilou
LOL I bet Joey and Brooke take a long time to repair this little rift!
A good entry in the contest. Exactly one hundred words. I wish you all the best!
Jan
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LOL I bet Joey and Brooke take a long time to repair this little rift!
A good entry in the contest. Exactly one hundred words. I wish you all the best!
Jan
Comment Written 07-Feb-2024
