He Came Back
50 words10 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
Who was he? We never find out. All we know in this brief story is that his ability to speak was limited, and he repeated the same sentence over and over again, because he was speaking of himself. He came back and you felt it in the chill. Best wishes in the contest.
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Who was he? We never find out. All we know in this brief story is that his ability to speak was limited, and he repeated the same sentence over and over again, because he was speaking of himself. He came back and you felt it in the chill. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Certainly a bit of a shudder mixed with the humour of this 50 word story. The repetition was haunting in itself. Nicely done, an imaginative and well expressed entry. Good luck! Debbie
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Certainly a bit of a shudder mixed with the humour of this 50 word story. The repetition was haunting in itself. Nicely done, an imaginative and well expressed entry. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
humorous poem
If a person came back, it would be frightening, would we not be a little concerned if that happened?
or were you referring to where some people like to dig up bodies for the fun of it?
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humorous poem
If a person came back, it would be frightening, would we not be a little concerned if that happened?
or were you referring to where some people like to dig up bodies for the fun of it?
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Maybe I had
To be there to
Understand who it was
And why they had
Such limited vocabulary
I miss what was happening
Good Luck
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Maybe I had
To be there to
Understand who it was
And why they had
Such limited vocabulary
I miss what was happening
Good Luck
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
Comment from Wendy G
Lol. Well I hope he didn't. But your story reminded me of a pet cat we once had, who did indeed come back after being dead for half an hour. He stayed alive and walking around for another half an hour then died again! Good wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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Lol. Well I hope he didn't. But your story reminded me of a pet cat we once had, who did indeed come back after being dead for half an hour. He stayed alive and walking around for another half an hour then died again! Good wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
Comment from Mia Twysted
That would be very spooky and at the same time it would make me feel like they're still there with me and they got some kind of last laugh getting everyone to say their phrase while they were being lowered into the ground.
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That would be very spooky and at the same time it would make me feel like they're still there with me and they got some kind of last laugh getting everyone to say their phrase while they were being lowered into the ground.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 50 Word story. You used very good descriptive words and very appropriate imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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This is a very well written 50 Word story. You used very good descriptive words and very appropriate imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
Comment from Iza Deleanu
He came back, but the question is do you want him back in that shape and form? This was so unexpected for a humors story, i guess is dark humor:)Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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He came back, but the question is do you want him back in that shape and form? This was so unexpected for a humors story, i guess is dark humor:)Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
Comment from jim vecchio
This was a strange story and a unique offering for that fifty word contest. Like all these flash fiction writings, it makes you want for more, but you did all you could in those brief fifty words.
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This was a strange story and a unique offering for that fifty word contest. Like all these flash fiction writings, it makes you want for more, but you did all you could in those brief fifty words.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
Comment from Bill Schott
This humorous fifty-word story, He Came Back, makes no real sense until one feels the pressure of thinking someone has been buried alive. That is a tough one.
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This humorous fifty-word story, He Came Back, makes no real sense until one feels the pressure of thinking someone has been buried alive. That is a tough one.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
