Aiona's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 143 "Fifteen-Dollar Car Wash"Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.
3 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Aiona,
You're kids aren't the only ones who like going through car washes.
I like the colorful font which shows what the light in the soap bubbles
show.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Hi Aiona,
You're kids aren't the only ones who like going through car washes.
I like the colorful font which shows what the light in the soap bubbles
show.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 24-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks for your review, Joan.
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No problem, Aiona.
Joan
Comment from kiwisteveh
Five Fours are Twenty - check.
Coloured fonts echo rainbow colours in poem - check
Rhyme on all four lines - check.
Sense of fun - check!
Looks like a good entry to me!
Steve
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Five Fours are Twenty - check.
Coloured fonts echo rainbow colours in poem - check
Rhyme on all four lines - check.
Sense of fun - check!
Looks like a good entry to me!
Steve
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thanks for your review, Steve. :)
Comment from Barry Penfold
What a lovely little poem. Right on the point and I know just how fun it is to do the carwash thing. Good image and I hope you go well in the contest.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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What a lovely little poem. Right on the point and I know just how fun it is to do the carwash thing. Good image and I hope you go well in the contest.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thanks for the review, Barry. Any suggestions for improvement?
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Not really. I think you captured the moment well.Have a good day.