A Timeless Waltz
in love's embrace7 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Eugene,
This is a romantic sonnet using a romantic font. It has as many swirls as a well danced waltz. The font does make some of the words hard to read.
A good ballroom dance always shows the feeling of the dancers involved as this one does.
I think you might want to find synonyms for embrace because you use it three times.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Hi Eugene,
This is a romantic sonnet using a romantic font. It has as many swirls as a well danced waltz. The font does make some of the words hard to read.
A good ballroom dance always shows the feeling of the dancers involved as this one does.
I think you might want to find synonyms for embrace because you use it three times.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Joan,
Thank you for your review. Eight years ago I began this journey as a novice poet and writer and have over the years learned from many of the best and most talented writers and poets who have all been inspired and encouraged me to become a better writer. I'm overwhelmed and surprised by the 10 wins I've received in the past two months.
You have been a wonderful reviewer of my poems and writings and I appreciate your help and encouragement in helping me to achieve success.
All the best,
Eugene
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I am pleased to have helped you, Eugene. You're welcome on all accounts.
Joan
P.S I have just published a book called "The Interloper (and other stories in prose and poetry)" by Joan Pechter. It is available on Amazon.com
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You used the waltz as the perfect metaphor for a love story in this contest entry. How wonderful and romantic. They rhyming was perfect too. I enjoyed the entire experience of reading this entry. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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You used the waltz as the perfect metaphor for a love story in this contest entry. How wonderful and romantic. They rhyming was perfect too. I enjoyed the entire experience of reading this entry. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Barbara,
Thank you for your wonderful reviews of my poetry. You are one of my favorite writers here on Fanstory and I appreciate and value your comments.
All the best,
Eugene
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Thank you, you just warmed my heart.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
There you go again another gorgeous poem how beautiful is that it's a lovely couple dancing to beautiful words written below I can almost hear music to it I see no fault in anything that you've written I see no issues with grammar or statics or punctuation or subject matter think it's a sublime and wonderful peace that you have submitted I wish you best of luck in the contest you have a contender here and I hope your evening is amazing!
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There you go again another gorgeous poem how beautiful is that it's a lovely couple dancing to beautiful words written below I can almost hear music to it I see no fault in anything that you've written I see no issues with grammar or statics or punctuation or subject matter think it's a sublime and wonderful peace that you have submitted I wish you best of luck in the contest you have a contender here and I hope your evening is amazing!
Comment Written 10-Jan-2024
Comment from patcelaw
This is a lovely rhyming poem you have done for the contest, and I wish you the very best in the contest. I wish for you a very happy and prosperous new year. Your presentation is beautiful.
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This is a lovely rhyming poem you have done for the contest, and I wish you the very best in the contest. I wish for you a very happy and prosperous new year. Your presentation is beautiful.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2024
Comment from BethShelby
This is a very rhyming poem. Your poem like you childrens stories are a pleasure to read. This should do well in the rhyming poetry contest. Dance is form of art that lends itself well to romance.
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This is a very rhyming poem. Your poem like you childrens stories are a pleasure to read. This should do well in the rhyming poetry contest. Dance is form of art that lends itself well to romance.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Your verse is beautifully 'embraced' in sonnet form, Eugene! Its musical cadence seems perfect for the theme of dance as well as poetry in general (the two seemingly overlapping). Thanks for sharing and good luck! Debbie
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Your verse is beautifully 'embraced' in sonnet form, Eugene! Its musical cadence seems perfect for the theme of dance as well as poetry in general (the two seemingly overlapping). Thanks for sharing and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 10-Jan-2024
Comment from Sally Law
Eugene is back in the FanStory house! Beautifully written and presented rhyming poem! Wowzers! Looks like a blue ribbon winner to me. So romantic too. A virtual ***six*** for today with compliments.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))
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Eugene is back in the FanStory house! Beautifully written and presented rhyming poem! Wowzers! Looks like a blue ribbon winner to me. So romantic too. A virtual ***six*** for today with compliments.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))
Comment Written 10-Jan-2024
