Catalina
Always hopeful.19 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic
and do a good job with your descriptions.
-You allow the reader to visualize the each scene.
-It is organized like a story would be, setting the
scene with the rain and gulls; having some tea
or chowder because it is cold from the rain.
-Of course, you will wait for Catherine!
-Well done and creative.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic
and do a good job with your descriptions.
-You allow the reader to visualize the each scene.
-It is organized like a story would be, setting the
scene with the rain and gulls; having some tea
or chowder because it is cold from the rain.
-Of course, you will wait for Catherine!
-Well done and creative.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Pam, for your insight and time. It's much appreciated.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Navada
I like the way you've interpreted the visual image with a series of short, sharp observations creating an overall backstory. It also captures the sadness of a tourist destination affected by bad weather - something we've probably all experienced.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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I like the way you've interpreted the visual image with a series of short, sharp observations creating an overall backstory. It also captures the sadness of a tourist destination affected by bad weather - something we've probably all experienced.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Navada, for your insight and time. It is much appreciated.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Yardier, I enjoyed reading your poem, and I could relate as i live in Ocean County, NJ--a beach tourist area. Of special note:
CATHERINES LATE
OF COURSE, I'LL WAIT.
(Sounds like a smart decision)
Well done. This poem made me smile. Margaret ~ LateBLoomer
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Hello Yardier, I enjoyed reading your poem, and I could relate as i live in Ocean County, NJ--a beach tourist area. Of special note:
CATHERINES LATE
OF COURSE, I'LL WAIT.
(Sounds like a smart decision)
Well done. This poem made me smile. Margaret ~ LateBLoomer
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, Margaret. I'm pleased you enjoyed the theme.
Yes, it was a smart decision to wait for Catherine, she took the photo!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
An interesting concept. The picture is a work of art in the framing and colors. Your writing is spare but paints a visual all on it's own. Together, I was capitated. Have a good year. Karen
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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An interesting concept. The picture is a work of art in the framing and colors. Your writing is spare but paints a visual all on it's own. Together, I was capitated. Have a good year. Karen
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Karen. I'm pleased the work touched you. I'm having a good year so far, I hope you do as well. Yard
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With just about everyone on here suffering some health crisis in either them or their family, I am wishing good health to all.:-) Karen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I'm Spanish and I like the name 'Catalina'
I would connect lines to improve the flow... something like this....
RAIN CAME
and TOURISTS LEFT
but GULLS HUDDLE
watching me drinking HOT TEA with CREAM, or
PERHAPS CHOWDER.
Of course, CATHERINE is LATE - I'LL WAIT.
Well done!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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I'm Spanish and I like the name 'Catalina'
I would connect lines to improve the flow... something like this....
RAIN CAME
and TOURISTS LEFT
but GULLS HUDDLE
watching me drinking HOT TEA with CREAM, or
PERHAPS CHOWDER.
Of course, CATHERINE is LATE - I'LL WAIT.
Well done!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Gypsy for the pointer. It does flow better. Of course I will have to get Catherine's approval, she took the photo. (;-)
Comment from Annmuma
Without any educated basis for reviewing poetry, I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. The story told was fun, easy to follow and the scene was skillfully set. Good job. ann
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Without any educated basis for reviewing poetry, I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. The story told was fun, easy to follow and the scene was skillfully set. Good job. ann
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Ann. I'm please you enjoyed the read.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Very nice poem with a good visual picture of a rainy day on a supposedly sunny island. Hot tea with cream and a bowl of chowder seem like a lovely way to spend some time with a friend.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Very nice poem with a good visual picture of a rainy day on a supposedly sunny island. Hot tea with cream and a bowl of chowder seem like a lovely way to spend some time with a friend.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thanks Carol. You are so right. A cool day, a little rain and no crowd makes for a warm time with a friend.
Comment from Thesis
I enjoyed this. It was light, inspiring, and yes - hopeful. You described the scene well, weighed options, and showed possibilities and loyalty in waiting for someone who you hoped would show up. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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I enjoyed this. It was light, inspiring, and yes - hopeful. You described the scene well, weighed options, and showed possibilities and loyalty in waiting for someone who you hoped would show up. Nicely done.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Thesis. It was a lucky day on rainy Catalina.
Comment from jim vecchio
This reminded me of my Italian-American heritage. When I was a child, my mom used to greet a kindly old woman who lived near the Church. She called her "Godalina". I asked her how she got a name like that and she explained her name was "Catherina." It seems like I enjoyed the trip to Catlina more than you. I hope Ctherine made it safe!
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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This reminded me of my Italian-American heritage. When I was a child, my mom used to greet a kindly old woman who lived near the Church. She called her "Godalina". I asked her how she got a name like that and she explained her name was "Catherina." It seems like I enjoyed the trip to Catlina more than you. I hope Ctherine made it safe!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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What a wonderful review, Jim. I'm so pleased the poem invoked a wonderful memory. Yes, Catherine did make it safely. She took the photo!
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Great to hear this wasn't only a good piece of writing, but that it ended happily!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Sometimes on the beaches it's best when the other tourists have left. My husband I go to the beaches during the off season. Thank you for sharing this with us. I enjoyed reading and remembering some of our boardwalk enjoyment.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Sometimes on the beaches it's best when the other tourists have left. My husband I go to the beaches during the off season. Thank you for sharing this with us. I enjoyed reading and remembering some of our boardwalk enjoyment.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Barb. My wife and I enjoy less crowded venues too. We got a special winter deal for Catalina island. It couldn't have been any better at all; little rain, few tourists, and photo op's everywhere. My wife took the photo with about a thousand more! She's a photo nut.
BTW, the hot tea idea came from you.