Guided by Faith
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Chapter 28 B"Can faith guide our path?
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Come on, Seth! LoL I think he should have kissed her, it was that kind of moment. He is over cautious, in my opinion.
I have to remind myself it has been about a month.
Well done, Barbara. Another great chapter.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2024
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Come on, Seth! LoL I think he should have kissed her, it was that kind of moment. He is over cautious, in my opinion.
I have to remind myself it has been about a month.
Well done, Barbara. Another great chapter.
Gypsy
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2024
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Seth is very protective of Emma AND, as we'll in my next post worried about all of her other protectors, her dad, Jake, and Pastor Pat. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mae Wright
I could really see this being a movie on Hallmark or Pureflix. I immediately noticed that there is a purity in the writing itselflike This is the first and only chapter I have read but it's got me thinking, "should I go back and read from the beginning, because I need to know what happens next." It sounds like a great story.
Mae
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2024
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I could really see this being a movie on Hallmark or Pureflix. I immediately noticed that there is a purity in the writing itselflike This is the first and only chapter I have read but it's got me thinking, "should I go back and read from the beginning, because I need to know what happens next." It sounds like a great story.
Mae
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2024
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WELCOME!!!! Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I hope to see you again.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I've got an air frier and they are amazing. I'm really sorry I used all my sixes before I'd realized, this is such a good chapter, taking us further into their relationship. I don't think it will be long now before we get that lingering kiss! This is a lovely story, Barbara, one that pulls you into the romance, but also making us wary of the next upset which is sure to come soon. Not between Seth and Emma, but by outside sources. Can't wait. Definitely get your six on Sunday. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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I've got an air frier and they are amazing. I'm really sorry I used all my sixes before I'd realized, this is such a good chapter, taking us further into their relationship. I don't think it will be long now before we get that lingering kiss! This is a lovely story, Barbara, one that pulls you into the romance, but also making us wary of the next upset which is sure to come soon. Not between Seth and Emma, but by outside sources. Can't wait. Definitely get your six on Sunday. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Their first kiss happens when you would least expect it but will happen. Emma's world gets turned upside down and she'll need to rely on Seth. Thank you for the kind review. Please continue to heal. My prayers are with you.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
This is another great chapter in which you moved along with the wonderful use of the dialogue between the characters. I felt the pain they must be going through - ah, young love.
Thanks for sharing, (did you want me to do a thorough reading with notes?) Just let me know - I don't want to get to nit-picky with anyone.
~MP~
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Hi there,
This is another great chapter in which you moved along with the wonderful use of the dialogue between the characters. I felt the pain they must be going through - ah, young love.
Thanks for sharing, (did you want me to do a thorough reading with notes?) Just let me know - I don't want to get to nit-picky with anyone.
~MP~
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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I appreciate your kind review. If you find errors, of course, I want to know it.
Comment from Aaron Milavec
Dear Barbara Wilkey,
You have a very smooth style of narrating your story. You invite the reader to sort out the character of the actors in your story. You do not identify anyone as the center of the story whose thoughts and feelings are always clear to the reader.
In the small selection I read, you use conflict as a way of creating puzzlement and a way of defining two different personalities interacting. Seth's slow dance and his unexpected leaving creates distress for Emma. He is protecting Emma from something--maybe a character flaw. In any case, the phone call with Emma's mother seems fabricated. The reader has to surmise that Emma's mother knows why Seth acted the way he did. From what I've read, this seems implausible. How would her mother know Seth better than Emma does? Furthermore, Emma appears like an unexperienced teenager who blindly follows her mother's advice.
The religious theme specified early (namely, "Depend on God in every part of your life, and He will guide, protect, and comfort you.") disrupts the quality of the narrative. It has the effect of projecting "a living God in action" whereas the narrative itself does not support this. I find this to be problematic.
Peace and joy in writing,
Aaron
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Dear Barbara Wilkey,
You have a very smooth style of narrating your story. You invite the reader to sort out the character of the actors in your story. You do not identify anyone as the center of the story whose thoughts and feelings are always clear to the reader.
In the small selection I read, you use conflict as a way of creating puzzlement and a way of defining two different personalities interacting. Seth's slow dance and his unexpected leaving creates distress for Emma. He is protecting Emma from something--maybe a character flaw. In any case, the phone call with Emma's mother seems fabricated. The reader has to surmise that Emma's mother knows why Seth acted the way he did. From what I've read, this seems implausible. How would her mother know Seth better than Emma does? Furthermore, Emma appears like an unexperienced teenager who blindly follows her mother's advice.
The religious theme specified early (namely, "Depend on God in every part of your life, and He will guide, protect, and comfort you.") disrupts the quality of the narrative. It has the effect of projecting "a living God in action" whereas the narrative itself does not support this. I find this to be problematic.
Peace and joy in writing,
Aaron
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Seth knew Emma's parents before he ever met Emma. Emma was overprotected by her parents and Seth knows this. Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Teri7
This was a great chapter! They keep getting more and more exciting. I always look forward to what happens next. You used great descriptive words and great dialogue. I had hoped I would have six stars to give you but I am all out! I am going to be so sad when the book is over. I will have to buy it when it is finished and in print! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2024
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This was a great chapter! They keep getting more and more exciting. I always look forward to what happens next. You used great descriptive words and great dialogue. I had hoped I would have six stars to give you but I am all out! I am going to be so sad when the book is over. I will have to buy it when it is finished and in print! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 10-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2024
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Don't worry about the six. I'm just glad you enjoyed reading. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Hello Barbara,
I missed following along on this one and thought it may have been too late to understand the particulars, but after reading this chapter, I found I understand a bit more than I imagined I would:
Seth has inherited many properties from his grandparents and has a sister who was written out of the will. He will give them a house he acquired and have them pay taxes and insurance.
He seems to have a hidden hangup with commitment, and I'm sure I missed something by not reading back chapters. I'm intrigued! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2024
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Hello Barbara,
I missed following along on this one and thought it may have been too late to understand the particulars, but after reading this chapter, I found I understand a bit more than I imagined I would:
Seth has inherited many properties from his grandparents and has a sister who was written out of the will. He will give them a house he acquired and have them pay taxes and insurance.
He seems to have a hidden hangup with commitment, and I'm sure I missed something by not reading back chapters. I'm intrigued! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 10-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2024
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Seth is being overprotective of Emma, as were her parents. Thank you for dropping by and reading and leaving this review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I'm out of sixes. Sorry. I really like the way this romance is moving. I have to keep reminding myself that they've only known each other a few weeks. Maybe their compatibility and chemistry makes it seem like they've known each other longer. I really enjoyed this chapter. Gretchen
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2024
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I'm out of sixes. Sorry. I really like the way this romance is moving. I have to keep reminding myself that they've only known each other a few weeks. Maybe their compatibility and chemistry makes it seem like they've known each other longer. I really enjoyed this chapter. Gretchen
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2024
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Thak you for the kind review. Please also remember Emma was raised in a protective bubble.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This was a lovely interlude for the two of them. I rather hoped Seth would manage a passionate kiss before he ran away, but I knew he wouldn't go any further. I am certainly enjoying your story and look forward to what comes next. I didn't find any errors.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2024
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This was a lovely interlude for the two of them. I rather hoped Seth would manage a passionate kiss before he ran away, but I knew he wouldn't go any further. I am certainly enjoying your story and look forward to what comes next. I didn't find any errors.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2024
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Seth is being overprotective of Emma, as were her parents. Thank yu for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You are moving the story along nicely along with the relationship. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. You are moving the story along nicely along with the relationship. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
