Comment from Aiona

Excellent

What a lovely fulfillment of the etheree prompt. It follows the syllable count restrictions effortlessly, like it was meant to be that way, not just because of the prompt. I love that it also rhymes. I'm really not a fan of free verse, so the skill it took to make it RHYME and still fit the syllable count is pretty amazing. The only issue I have with the poem is this one line:
"they both were soothed with a tender kiss."

I can understand soothing pain, but does bliss need soothing? I'm a little confused.

Maybe something like "Those times both came with a tender kiss" would fit better. But then "time" is repeated three times in two lines.

I'm sure you can think of something better than I did!

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024

Thank you very much for your input. Much appreciated

Comment from Navada

Excellent

I really like your tribute to your parents and the skill you displayed not only in creating a full reverse etheree but also incorporating rhyme. Thanks for the share and good luck for the contest! :)

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024

Thank you. I wrote that poem ( not like that, I modified it for contest) over 40 years ago when I was a freshman in HS for Parents appreciation night

Comment from Yusita

Excellent

This is a beautiful and heartfelt poem that many of us resonate with. Loving parents are such a blessing. I'm so thankful for mine! Lovely write.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024

Thank you