Freedom
Riding on my motorcycle7 total reviews
Comment from Jeano
Joy, repair and maintenance of owning a bike. You covered it all. I thought you riding a motorcycle but wasn't positive until I got to the last line which made me want and go back and read it again. Funny how I got so much more out of your poem, knowing for sure you were riding a Harley. I could feel the breeze and smell the leather. I need to start reading the little clips at the top instead of just diving into the poem itself. I liked it. I rode horses for years so I could relate to some of the feelings. Nice job.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Joy, repair and maintenance of owning a bike. You covered it all. I thought you riding a motorcycle but wasn't positive until I got to the last line which made me want and go back and read it again. Funny how I got so much more out of your poem, knowing for sure you were riding a Harley. I could feel the breeze and smell the leather. I need to start reading the little clips at the top instead of just diving into the poem itself. I liked it. I rode horses for years so I could relate to some of the feelings. Nice job.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind words. God bless.
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent free verse poem, you've scribed some very strong language, thank you for posting, it is a treat to read anf experience, well done, great job, blessings Roy
Typo : Freedom and its (w)renchin'
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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This is an excellent free verse poem, you've scribed some very strong language, thank you for posting, it is a treat to read anf experience, well done, great job, blessings Roy
Typo : Freedom and its (w)renchin'
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thanks, you saved a word. I'm polish and English is the hardest language. I've always had to study harder and still haven't perfected it.
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You?re brilliant
Comment from BenThrone
I'm not a biker myself, but my dad definitely was, and I remember the sense of exhilaration when he would take me out on a ride. You have captured that spirit well in this free verse poem. I wonder at the spelling of "rome" however; did you mean "roam"? Or is this an oblique reference to the city? If so that needs clarification if you want the reader to understand the reference.
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I'm not a biker myself, but my dad definitely was, and I remember the sense of exhilaration when he would take me out on a ride. You have captured that spirit well in this free verse poem. I wonder at the spelling of "rome" however; did you mean "roam"? Or is this an oblique reference to the city? If so that needs clarification if you want the reader to understand the reference.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2024
Comment from Reece Gibson
This flows nicely. An excellent display of wordsmith. A story of a renegade comes to mind. I don't ride a Harley but I do trail ride and race my 125 dirt bike. It is pure freedom and Euphoria when ripping the throttle.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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This flows nicely. An excellent display of wordsmith. A story of a renegade comes to mind. I don't ride a Harley but I do trail ride and race my 125 dirt bike. It is pure freedom and Euphoria when ripping the throttle.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thanks your comments mean alot.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
The passion you feel toward your Harley and riding shines through your well written words. I rode on a Harley Dressee twice and sxreamed non stop.
I think your tone and "voice" here is authentic and you use imagery well. I think you might want to brighter the colors, or add a photo, if I had to make a suggestion.
Best wishes
Alex
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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The passion you feel toward your Harley and riding shines through your well written words. I rode on a Harley Dressee twice and sxreamed non stop.
I think your tone and "voice" here is authentic and you use imagery well. I think you might want to brighter the colors, or add a photo, if I had to make a suggestion.
Best wishes
Alex
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thanks yes I'll have to see how to add a photo. Nice to hear from you.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi
This poem as smoothly as the wind around you as you ride even though it has different rhyme schemes. I hope you where a helmet along with your leather. I think people who drive in convertibles may have a similar feeling of freedom.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Hi
This poem as smoothly as the wind around you as you ride even though it has different rhyme schemes. I hope you where a helmet along with your leather. I think people who drive in convertibles may have a similar feeling of freedom.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thanks Joan, yes the helmet is very important and I didn't mention. Health to you also.
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No problem, Teresa. Thanks for the good health wishes.
Joan
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed your poem. I would love riding with my husband on his motorcycle. Just that feeling of being free was great. You expressed that feeling throughout your poem. Rhyming words were good. Great job.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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I enjoyed your poem. I would love riding with my husband on his motorcycle. Just that feeling of being free was great. You expressed that feeling throughout your poem. Rhyming words were good. Great job.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thanks, your commenting means alot to me.
