A Winter's Scene
Imagine my painting ....13 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The image is awesome. It looks like a frozen waterfall. Your poem is lovely and written very well. The snowy display of a clean blanket of snow will take away many headaches.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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The image is awesome. It looks like a frozen waterfall. Your poem is lovely and written very well. The snowy display of a clean blanket of snow will take away many headaches.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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I love the silence held by a fresh coat of snow
Even nature considers it holy and lay low until the melt begins and then that dance to the sound
Comment from Sugarray77
Oh, how beautiful Tom. I love this poem and the eloquent descriptions and vignettes you painted with your words. I enjoyed it and think it's perfect for the prompt. :)
Melissa
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Oh, how beautiful Tom. I love this poem and the eloquent descriptions and vignettes you painted with your words. I enjoyed it and think it's perfect for the prompt. :)
Melissa
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Oh May I say sincerely
Thanks for a swell review
Happy New Year
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet, you now have 11 votes.
Your poem complements well your beautiful artwork.
City folk think that in Winter there is not much going on in the countryside and mounts but they are wrong.
There is still lots of life despite mamma bear and cubs have gone to sleep.
Deer nibble on pine needles,and dry leaves but they also enjoy wild persimmons. The forest helps them stay protected from the cold gusty winds of winter and blizzards.
Rabbits and hares are sporting their winter coat and leave their burrows in search of buds, twigs bark and then there are the predators like the wolf, wild boar, and raptures.
PS; the twirly font looks cool but does make reading hard.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Ciao mystery poet, you now have 11 votes.
Your poem complements well your beautiful artwork.
City folk think that in Winter there is not much going on in the countryside and mounts but they are wrong.
There is still lots of life despite mamma bear and cubs have gone to sleep.
Deer nibble on pine needles,and dry leaves but they also enjoy wild persimmons. The forest helps them stay protected from the cold gusty winds of winter and blizzards.
Rabbits and hares are sporting their winter coat and leave their burrows in search of buds, twigs bark and then there are the predators like the wolf, wild boar, and raptures.
PS; the twirly font looks cool but does make reading hard.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Thanks for your kind words.
I increased the font size upon your ending note. I think it helps a little. I normally use Unna font but this piece called out for a windblown font.
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It reads better the larger font..
The swirls remind me of the ( winter) winds mentioned in you lovely poem.
It was a nice touch .
Keep safe🍀
Comment from Wendy G
Very lovely photo composite and also an excellent smooth and lyrical poem (but don't identify yourself in the notes by giving too much information.) Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Very lovely photo composite and also an excellent smooth and lyrical poem (but don't identify yourself in the notes by giving too much information.) Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Ok
I ll have a look
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is a well-written poem. Your imagery comes alive as I can see all the things you mentioned in motion. The artwork is also outstanding and illustrates the poem nicely. Terry.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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This is a well-written poem. Your imagery comes alive as I can see all the things you mentioned in motion. The artwork is also outstanding and illustrates the poem nicely. Terry.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thanks T
Now let?s set FS on fire in ?24
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Sadly, not much fire left in this old coot!
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I am beside my self with the many compliments given for this submission.
It is rather unusual. Thanks.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a lovely winter scene poem for the contest I wish you the very best in the contest, and may all of your writing. Be a blessing to those who read it. Thank you for sharing. Such a lovely work. Patricia.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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This is a lovely winter scene poem for the contest I wish you the very best in the contest, and may all of your writing. Be a blessing to those who read it. Thank you for sharing. Such a lovely work. Patricia.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Aah
Thanks for your supportive review
HNY
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I sure like your imagery. Favorite phrases were 'dropping dollops' and the snowshoe hare part and also 'a tawny doe' farther down.
Thank you for your great entry.
I am getting told by poets in my state poetry society that I need to work on 'tightening' poems. With that in mind, the suggestion I have is to try to eliminate words which mean nearly the same thing. I am not so proficient at this, but one thing I thought of was where you say "a tawny doe advances forward." Since 'advances' means moving forward already, you could eliminate the word 'forward.'
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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I sure like your imagery. Favorite phrases were 'dropping dollops' and the snowshoe hare part and also 'a tawny doe' farther down.
Thank you for your great entry.
I am getting told by poets in my state poetry society that I need to work on 'tightening' poems. With that in mind, the suggestion I have is to try to eliminate words which mean nearly the same thing. I am not so proficient at this, but one thing I thought of was where you say "a tawny doe advances forward." Since 'advances' means moving forward already, you could eliminate the word 'forward.'
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Good point
I understand
Still, it flows so for now we will leave as is
Comment from Daylily
This entry contains excellent imagery involving the senses during a snowy winter season. The concluding verse leads readers into the approaching time of spring when waterfalls flow once more into established thoroughfares. I enjoyed reading this very much.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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This entry contains excellent imagery involving the senses during a snowy winter season. The concluding verse leads readers into the approaching time of spring when waterfalls flow once more into established thoroughfares. I enjoyed reading this very much.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thank you. It has been well received, but unlikely to reach a "Best" ribbon as I simply do not have sufficient followers.
Comment from royowen
This is a lovely poem, with lots of highly descriptive language which gives a fine impetus to this fine poem, this is a credit to you, and a most well written poem has been produced, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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This is a lovely poem, with lots of highly descriptive language which gives a fine impetus to this fine poem, this is a credit to you, and a most well written poem has been produced, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thanks for the grand review.
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Welcome
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
there's a lot of great imagery in this. It could almost be a literary passage in some old book. It reads very well indeed. It's a nice walk through nature and the scene.
Best of luck to you
GMG
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Hi there,
there's a lot of great imagery in this. It could almost be a literary passage in some old book. It reads very well indeed. It's a nice walk through nature and the scene.
Best of luck to you
GMG
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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It's been a while since I heard from you. I do hope you have been fine. I appreciate your kind words.
