2023 Gypsy's Tanka
Viewing comments for Chapter 94 "The Musty Scent of Betrayal"-
10 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
This poem has a very strong appeal, with not merely a mention of past events, but also it creates very vivid images with a reference to the scents that once evoked a loving relationship but now only emphasize the sorrow felt.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2024
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This poem has a very strong appeal, with not merely a mention of past events, but also it creates very vivid images with a reference to the scents that once evoked a loving relationship but now only emphasize the sorrow felt.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words.
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Comment from dragonpoet
Hi MariVal,
This is a good tanka. I like the strong metaphor of the mind as an attic for storage of memories. This poem has a sad feel to it.
Congrats for placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great rest of the week.
Joan
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2024
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Hi MariVal,
This is a good tanka. I like the strong metaphor of the mind as an attic for storage of memories. This poem has a sad feel to it.
Congrats for placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great rest of the week.
Joan
Comment Written 10-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
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Don't mention it.
Joan
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy---- and I'd never have stuff in the attic that belonged to my ex for two reasons. One, no attic here, and b. because I would have a ritualistic cleansing bon fire and torch all her clothes and my memories!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Another fine poem, Gypsy---- and I'd never have stuff in the attic that belonged to my ex for two reasons. One, no attic here, and b. because I would have a ritualistic cleansing bon fire and torch all her clothes and my memories!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, my friend.
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I wondered if you were going to write a poem for this betrayal contest. I am not at all surprised because betrayal poetry is ONE of your best areas. I don't mind saying you have many. Thank you for sharing this poem with us ang I want to wish you luck, but I doubt you'll need it.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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I wondered if you were going to write a poem for this betrayal contest. I am not at all surprised because betrayal poetry is ONE of your best areas. I don't mind saying you have many. Thank you for sharing this poem with us ang I want to wish you luck, but I doubt you'll need it.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, Barbara. You are very kind. May you have a wonderful 2024.
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Comment from shelley kaye
excellent tanka and perfect for the betrayal contest
great imagery - could totally "see" that attic of dusty memories!
smooth flow of words connecting nicely
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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excellent tanka and perfect for the betrayal contest
great imagery - could totally "see" that attic of dusty memories!
smooth flow of words connecting nicely
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words. May you have a wonderful 2024!
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Comment from aryr
Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Gypsy. Great tanka. The tanka was wishes for luck in the entry. Wonderful pictures were sadly but greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Gypsy. Great tanka. The tanka was wishes for luck in the entry. Wonderful pictures were sadly but greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much, Barbara. You are very kind. May you have a wonderful 2024. Blessed be.
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Comment from GWHARGIS
It must not be over then. To keep the moments of someone who betrayed you means they still have a piece of your heart. The imagery was strong. The once beautiful flowers and shiny read candy boxes now dead, dusty and tucked away. Much like that piece of the heart. Great poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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It must not be over then. To keep the moments of someone who betrayed you means they still have a piece of your heart. The imagery was strong. The once beautiful flowers and shiny read candy boxes now dead, dusty and tucked away. Much like that piece of the heart. Great poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much May you have a wonderful 2024.
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Comment from Julie Helms
This is a beautiful poem and I really like how you did not tell us what the betrayal was, only the impact of it. Comparing it to those things in the attic was very effective. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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This is a beautiful poem and I really like how you did not tell us what the betrayal was, only the impact of it. Comparing it to those things in the attic was very effective. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Happy new year!
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Comment from lyenochka
I like that you make "betrayal" a scent. I remember that Dean loved the word "detritus." And I'm sure betrayal smells like something rotting. Great descriptions in your poem! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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I like that you make "betrayal" a scent. I remember that Dean loved the word "detritus." And I'm sure betrayal smells like something rotting. Great descriptions in your poem! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Happy new year!
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Comment from patcelaw
This is a good for the material poetry contest I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I wish you a very happy new year and may you be healthy and prosperous in the new year.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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This is a good for the material poetry contest I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I wish you a very happy new year and may you be healthy and prosperous in the new year.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Happy new year!
Gypsy hugs