Time to Mend
A loop poem15 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jessica,
This is a wonderful loop poem which shows us the havoc mankind is unleashing on our gift of nature. We are quickly deforesting and polluting it because of our lust for power and money.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on placing second
Happy New Year.
Joan
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Hi Jessica,
This is a wonderful loop poem which shows us the havoc mankind is unleashing on our gift of nature. We are quickly deforesting and polluting it because of our lust for power and money.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on placing second
Happy New Year.
Joan
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Joan, thank you so much for this wonderful review. Happy New Year to you! Xoxo
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Don?t mention it, Jessica.
Joan
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a terrific loop poem, Jessica. One of the best I've read. Super metre and rhymes in the right places and a good nod to take care of the planet, it's the only one we have.
The only thing is, if you could use the final word as the first word too, that could be easily be done, it would perfectimo. In my opinion it's perfectimo as is.
Wishing you all the best in the New Year and best of luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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This is a terrific loop poem, Jessica. One of the best I've read. Super metre and rhymes in the right places and a good nod to take care of the planet, it's the only one we have.
The only thing is, if you could use the final word as the first word too, that could be easily be done, it would perfectimo. In my opinion it's perfectimo as is.
Wishing you all the best in the New Year and best of luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Gloria, I'm truly honored by your encouraging review. Thank you so much. Your suggestion is also very much appreciated, I will revisit! Thank you again, and wishing you the happiest new year! Xo
Jessica
Comment from RainbewLatte
Wow. I really like the ending. And the message! Taking a step back to really enjoy this work of loop poetry, I just think to myself, oh this seems near impossible to write mind speak volumes and leave a message we're probably all too familiar with. The imagery/the images you paint are immaculate. I mean, just take these two masterful lines, they wow-ed me deeply.
"Air polluted by the crowds
Crowds our lungs and fills the sky"
The use of "crowds" in two (I may be wrong for this) very different contexts but they almost loop together one the result of the other. Just, amazing!
I don't think this is the first I've came across your work, as the presentation rings a bell, a presentation that is very present indeed.
Thanks for taking the time to share! Happy New Year!
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Wow. I really like the ending. And the message! Taking a step back to really enjoy this work of loop poetry, I just think to myself, oh this seems near impossible to write mind speak volumes and leave a message we're probably all too familiar with. The imagery/the images you paint are immaculate. I mean, just take these two masterful lines, they wow-ed me deeply.
"Air polluted by the crowds
Crowds our lungs and fills the sky"
The use of "crowds" in two (I may be wrong for this) very different contexts but they almost loop together one the result of the other. Just, amazing!
I don't think this is the first I've came across your work, as the presentation rings a bell, a presentation that is very present indeed.
Thanks for taking the time to share! Happy New Year!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a well-done loop poem. It breathes life into hurt Earth and tells how we have wounded our planet. The way you loop each ending word to the next line is excellent. I am happy to add my review to your collection.
Enjoy the weekend and don't forget to have a happy new year!
Jesse
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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This is a well-done loop poem. It breathes life into hurt Earth and tells how we have wounded our planet. The way you loop each ending word to the next line is excellent. I am happy to add my review to your collection.
Enjoy the weekend and don't forget to have a happy new year!
Jesse
Comment Written 30-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Jesse. I appreciate that so much!
Xo
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Mending Earth is a full-time job and needs a helping hand from us.
Have a wonderful Sunday.
Jesse
Comment from Lisasview
Hello Jessica,
Just finished reading and reviewing another one of yours dear Jessica and found this one...
I feel this is extremely well done.. Have't tried a Loop poem yet...
I wish you the very best of luck in the contest.
Lisasview
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Hello Jessica,
Just finished reading and reviewing another one of yours dear Jessica and found this one...
I feel this is extremely well done.. Have't tried a Loop poem yet...
I wish you the very best of luck in the contest.
Lisasview
Comment Written 30-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Lisa. I appreciate that so much!
Xo
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You are so welcome,
Lisa
Comment from Wendy G
That is a super Loop poem, clearly written, very timely and relevant and it contains a clear message to alert us all to the state of degradation of our planet. Very best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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That is a super Loop poem, clearly written, very timely and relevant and it contains a clear message to alert us all to the state of degradation of our planet. Very best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Wendy!
Comment from lyenochka
Fabulous loop poem! You met the requirements of the looping PLUS the rhyme scheme. Great job and I love the message to ask the readers to care for the Earth as cutting down the life-giving trees affects the entire planet. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Fabulous loop poem! You met the requirements of the looping PLUS the rhyme scheme. Great job and I love the message to ask the readers to care for the Earth as cutting down the life-giving trees affects the entire planet. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much xoxo
Comment from Lea Tonin1
A very fine example of a loop poem! A very relevant subject too that's near and dear to my heart I find combination of writing scale and a very real issue today. Great job with this one!
The last stanza the last two lines of that stanza, rings bells and is as necessary as ever today!
I see no issues with aesthetics subject matter sentence structure grammar very well done very clever right or very important issue great job best of luck to you I hope you have a wonderful New year!
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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A very fine example of a loop poem! A very relevant subject too that's near and dear to my heart I find combination of writing scale and a very real issue today. Great job with this one!
The last stanza the last two lines of that stanza, rings bells and is as necessary as ever today!
I see no issues with aesthetics subject matter sentence structure grammar very well done very clever right or very important issue great job best of luck to you I hope you have a wonderful New year!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Lea, thank you! Xo
Comment from royowen
I think the time and propensity of men, is to rip things from the ground as costlessly as possible and leave it as such, but if each individual respects his little.acre and cares for it as a precious gift, God is pleased with that, beautifully written, blessing Roy
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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I think the time and propensity of men, is to rip things from the ground as costlessly as possible and leave it as such, but if each individual respects his little.acre and cares for it as a precious gift, God is pleased with that, beautifully written, blessing Roy
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Roy!
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Most welcome
Comment from barbara.wilkey
God gave us this planet to live on and be good stewards of and as a humanity we have failed miserably. Thank you for sharing this problem with us as a loop poem contest entry. I enjoyed reading and wish you the best of luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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God gave us this planet to live on and be good stewards of and as a humanity we have failed miserably. Thank you for sharing this problem with us as a loop poem contest entry. I enjoyed reading and wish you the best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Truly appreciated! Xo