Lions in Sheep Clothing
Sometimes, those who love us the most, hurt us the most.13 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
I think you described betrayal very well - as both a physical destructive ("deadly toxin") force as well as a spiritual/emotional one with the once united hearts being torn. Best wishes in the contest!
I think you described betrayal very well - as both a physical destructive ("deadly toxin") force as well as a spiritual/emotional one with the once united hearts being torn. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2024
Comment from Navada
You've used some potent imagery here to capture the effect of betrayal and its long-lasting effects. Thanks so much for the share and best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
You've used some potent imagery here to capture the effect of betrayal and its long-lasting effects. Thanks so much for the share and best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Thanks Navada!!
Comment from Daylily
This is a strong presentation of wounded emotions through the unfaithfulness of another. It reads well and holds interest all the way through. I also like the descriptive title you selected.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
This is a strong presentation of wounded emotions through the unfaithfulness of another. It reads well and holds interest all the way through. I also like the descriptive title you selected.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Betrayal Poetry Contest. Your word imagery is outstanding. I love the personification of the betrayal.... you did well expressing your emotions. I know the feeling.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
Excellent entry for the Betrayal Poetry Contest. Your word imagery is outstanding. I love the personification of the betrayal.... you did well expressing your emotions. I know the feeling.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Oh my goodness, thank you so much for the kind review! Such an honor!
Comment from Brenda Strauser
Austin,
Betrayal by a loved one cuts to your very heart. You depicted this well. I could feel how much this person hurt you. I liked your word choice throughout the poem. Great job.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
Austin,
Betrayal by a loved one cuts to your very heart. You depicted this well. I could feel how much this person hurt you. I liked your word choice throughout the poem. Great job.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much!
Comment from Tetamarina66
This is very well written very powerful,deep and quite descriptive.
Your quite good writer I bet you get A's in English class or Composition class.
Hope your Christmas was good.
I posted a story about my current kitty Wikki as you know due to my love of kitties.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
This is very well written very powerful,deep and quite descriptive.
Your quite good writer I bet you get A's in English class or Composition class.
Hope your Christmas was good.
I posted a story about my current kitty Wikki as you know due to my love of kitties.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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Thanks for another amazing review, hope your Christmas was great!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your well chosen words here certainly ruffled feathers as betrayal leaves a scar that will never heal and your interpretation hits home here, a fine post Austin,love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
Your well chosen words here certainly ruffled feathers as betrayal leaves a scar that will never heal and your interpretation hits home here, a fine post Austin,love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023
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Thanks Dolly!
Comment from June Sargent
This poem successfully captures the shattering disappointment of betrayal. Your well chosen words create an image of glass being broken into shards that cut deeply. Well done!
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2023
This poem successfully captures the shattering disappointment of betrayal. Your well chosen words create an image of glass being broken into shards that cut deeply. Well done!
Comment Written 26-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much, June!!
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Hey there Austin. I am assuming there's no chance this is fiction talking. All the signs show that someone very close to you has betrayed and hurt you badly.
And what a great day to write about it. After all this is the day our Savior was born to save us from ourselves. Because we are human, we can really screw up. I hope what happened for you can be reconciled, as it is never good to carry that burden on yourself. That is why we are reminded about how we are only saved by His Grace.
I just wrote one I think you would like a lot. It even talks about a boy whose parents were hurtful to this boy and he was going to take a bottle of pills. It is called, Come Follow Me.
And remember i told you I am always here for you. Don't forget that. It goes for anything. I am here. Even if you need to talk.
Anyway, awesome poem. And straight to the point. I love the truth and honestly about it. Thanks for sharing and good luck with the contest. Debi
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
Hey there Austin. I am assuming there's no chance this is fiction talking. All the signs show that someone very close to you has betrayed and hurt you badly.
And what a great day to write about it. After all this is the day our Savior was born to save us from ourselves. Because we are human, we can really screw up. I hope what happened for you can be reconciled, as it is never good to carry that burden on yourself. That is why we are reminded about how we are only saved by His Grace.
I just wrote one I think you would like a lot. It even talks about a boy whose parents were hurtful to this boy and he was going to take a bottle of pills. It is called, Come Follow Me.
And remember i told you I am always here for you. Don't forget that. It goes for anything. I am here. Even if you need to talk.
Anyway, awesome poem. And straight to the point. I love the truth and honestly about it. Thanks for sharing and good luck with the contest. Debi
Comment Written 25-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much Debi for the continuous encouragement and support!! Betrayal hurts so much.
Comment from Yusita
Wow. The imagery as well as the feeling conveyed here is strong and very moving. This is an excellent piece that describes the experience of betrayal in a raw, accurate, and powerful way. The last line was a great ending.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
Wow. The imagery as well as the feeling conveyed here is strong and very moving. This is an excellent piece that describes the experience of betrayal in a raw, accurate, and powerful way. The last line was a great ending.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much!