Panpipes
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
You immediately tell the reader about the major by the way you have described different aspects of him. You have handily used metaphors & similes along with your other techniques. Your story is not all about pretty panpipes You have some gut to your story. This is a not simple plot. It runs very much like the shows I am drawn to. Thank you...I'll be back
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2024
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You immediately tell the reader about the major by the way you have described different aspects of him. You have handily used metaphors & similes along with your other techniques. Your story is not all about pretty panpipes You have some gut to your story. This is a not simple plot. It runs very much like the shows I am drawn to. Thank you...I'll be back
Comment Written 23-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2024
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Thank you for another glowing six-star review, Lisa. I'm delighted that you are still engaged with this story and enjoying it. I very much appreciate your comments about the character building and the plot. Best wishes, Tony
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This is an unusual story which makes a very interesting and captivating.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I hope Bapit can soon redeem himself in Ayesha's eyes, bless him. Not only does he regret doing what he thought he was supposed to do, he probably wouldn't have known what to do after that part!
Ayesha needs him, she doesn't really have anyone else. I suppose Major Suttiku couldn't really charge her with murder, not now. I do worry about that poor doctor though. He is right to worry! Another excellent chapter, Tony. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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I hope Bapit can soon redeem himself in Ayesha's eyes, bless him. Not only does he regret doing what he thought he was supposed to do, he probably wouldn't have known what to do after that part!
Ayesha needs him, she doesn't really have anyone else. I suppose Major Suttiku couldn't really charge her with murder, not now. I do worry about that poor doctor though. He is right to worry! Another excellent chapter, Tony. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 06-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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Thanks again for reading and responding to this chapter, Sandra. Poor Bapit has much to overcome before there's any prospect of a happy ending. Ayesha, too
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Tony, you a spinning a wonderful tale here. It beginning to be difficult to know who you can trust and who you can't. I would certainly never trust the Thai police. And poor Ayesha is certainly a victim of a great conspiracy..at least that's how I see it. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2023
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Wow, Tony, you a spinning a wonderful tale here. It beginning to be difficult to know who you can trust and who you can't. I would certainly never trust the Thai police. And poor Ayesha is certainly a victim of a great conspiracy..at least that's how I see it. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 26-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2023
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Yes, the major is definitely a hard boiled egg and Ayesha seems to have been drawn into the hot water with him!
Comment from Cindy Warren
Poor Bapit. I don't know how someone who was born and raised there could be so innocent. He doesn't seem to have been sheltered. And the rest of the characters are such scoundrels! Not sure about Ayesha yet. She may not be as bad as the others, but she's nobody's fool.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Poor Bapit. I don't know how someone who was born and raised there could be so innocent. He doesn't seem to have been sheltered. And the rest of the characters are such scoundrels! Not sure about Ayesha yet. She may not be as bad as the others, but she's nobody's fool.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Thanks for your review and comments, Cindy. I think Bapit is fairly streetwise but sexually naive. His life, in that respect, has probably been sheltered.
At this stage, I'd say Ayesha is more sinned against than sinning.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well done. Quite an intriguing story. But remind me not to visit Thailand. I don't think I would like it - at least not the places Ayesha and Bapit visit.
I have to admit, though, I couldn't figure how Ayesha fared being penniless.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Well done. Quite an intriguing story. But remind me not to visit Thailand. I don't think I would like it - at least not the places Ayesha and Bapit visit.
I have to admit, though, I couldn't figure how Ayesha fared being penniless.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023
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Thailand is a fascinating place. Wonderful people. However, the world is full of rogues, especially the world of fiction! As with many places in the world, the tourist industry spawns some pretty unsavoury places.
Ayesha wasn't penniless for long. The proceeds of the necklace sale were close to US$1000, and she won her bet at the boxing stadium.
Thanks for another motivating review. All good wishes, Tony
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I thought Bapit got her money. Guess I missed something.
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Only the winnings.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Rapid is in a lot of pain. Poor guy.
Thai coffin ritual for Bruno is very creepy, I hope he won't be buried.
Well done, Tony
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis  Â
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Rapid is in a lot of pain. Poor guy.
Thai coffin ritual for Bruno is very creepy, I hope he won't be buried.
Well done, Tony
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis  Â
Comment Written 24-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Thanks for your review and comments, Gypsy. Appreciated, as always. Tony.
Comment from phill doran
Hello again,
Great! I really thought you'd spare Bapit, so, again, a great twist.
I expect the grannies will have you for not putting a caution on this part, you know: "Caution, Sodomy Ahead", or something like that. (Heaven knows what it would look like as a road sign...)
Tony, there's been superb attention to the technical detail throughout, and I must compliment you. Not heavy-handed but light, and enough, and relevant enough, for the reader to know (or believe) that you have done your research.
cheers
phill
PS:
"...to believe he was returning it.Then, realising how foolish..." missing a space after the full stop
"...In the meantime,' Suttikul continued..." and it appears to have ended up here as an extra space after the speech mark.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Hello again,
Great! I really thought you'd spare Bapit, so, again, a great twist.
I expect the grannies will have you for not putting a caution on this part, you know: "Caution, Sodomy Ahead", or something like that. (Heaven knows what it would look like as a road sign...)
Tony, there's been superb attention to the technical detail throughout, and I must compliment you. Not heavy-handed but light, and enough, and relevant enough, for the reader to know (or believe) that you have done your research.
cheers
phill
PS:
"...to believe he was returning it.Then, realising how foolish..." missing a space after the full stop
"...In the meantime,' Suttikul continued..." and it appears to have ended up here as an extra space after the speech mark.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Thanks again, Phill, for your affirming comments and sixth star. I've corrected the spacing now. Appreciate your sharp eye. All the best, Tony.
Comment from lyenochka
It's good that Ayesha is more human than the "spider" that Somchai seems to be likening her to. I guess both of them are worried about Bapit. But why didn't the police chief accuse her of murder? He had to cover his own tracks, I guess. Another interesting chapter!
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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It's good that Ayesha is more human than the "spider" that Somchai seems to be likening her to. I guess both of them are worried about Bapit. But why didn't the police chief accuse her of murder? He had to cover his own tracks, I guess. Another interesting chapter!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Helen. I think Major Suttikul may have something else in mind for Ayesha.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Ugh. Poor Bapit. I was hoping nothing bad old happen to him but he paid the price for trying to drink away his problems. This was another great chapter. If Aeysha had touched Bruno, she would have felt him warm. A "dead" giveaway. Great story. Gretchen
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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Ugh. Poor Bapit. I was hoping nothing bad old happen to him but he paid the price for trying to drink away his problems. This was another great chapter. If Aeysha had touched Bruno, she would have felt him warm. A "dead" giveaway. Great story. Gretchen
Comment Written 23-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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Thanks for the review and your comments, Gretchen. Always appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from royowen
The only hope I can see in this story is the Lieutenant, he clearly despises the major, I'm not sure what the point of the plot is, but already the very thing that marks these cultures is the corruption that probably it's poverty that probably marks it's culture, probably not enough check, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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The only hope I can see in this story is the Lieutenant, he clearly despises the major, I'm not sure what the point of the plot is, but already the very thing that marks these cultures is the corruption that probably it's poverty that probably marks it's culture, probably not enough check, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023
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Thanks for the review and your comments, Roy. Always appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
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Well done
