Panpipes
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is quite an approach: High-pitched Javanese clarinets keened, and drummers wove intricate rhythmic patterns on their double drums to drive the tempo and the heartbeat to higher levels." I think the fact we hoped Kjahan was going to win made the fight more suspenseful as in a movie. The plot thickens: "The police could be informed in the morning." This brings out the point about how tv ormovies affect people's actions and attitude: "as is often the case in TV dramas, there were several passionate bedroom scenes. This could certainly lead to the makings of a cautionary tale. Ooof we are drawn to ch. 5. Excellent A+ especially the blow by blow description of the fight. You are a darn good writer.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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This is quite an approach: High-pitched Javanese clarinets keened, and drummers wove intricate rhythmic patterns on their double drums to drive the tempo and the heartbeat to higher levels." I think the fact we hoped Kjahan was going to win made the fight more suspenseful as in a movie. The plot thickens: "The police could be informed in the morning." This brings out the point about how tv ormovies affect people's actions and attitude: "as is often the case in TV dramas, there were several passionate bedroom scenes. This could certainly lead to the makings of a cautionary tale. Ooof we are drawn to ch. 5. Excellent A+ especially the blow by blow description of the fight. You are a darn good writer.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
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Thanks, Liz, for these most affirming comments. Greatly appreciated. So glad to hear that you are enjoying this story. The six is icing on the cake!
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you are a good writer
Comment from Cindy Warren
Seems I missed a chapter. I didn't think the guy she bet with would want to pay, but he did. I felt kind of sorry for Bapit. He really doesn't have a clue, does he? He should have cleared out of that hotel the second he felt something was wrong, and what he did to Ayesha couldn't have earned him anything other than a kick in the balls.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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Seems I missed a chapter. I didn't think the guy she bet with would want to pay, but he did. I felt kind of sorry for Bapit. He really doesn't have a clue, does he? He should have cleared out of that hotel the second he felt something was wrong, and what he did to Ayesha couldn't have earned him anything other than a kick in the balls.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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Thanks for your comments, Cindy. Always appreciated. Wishing you all the best for the festive season. Tony.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh wow, this was the chapter I missed although your helpful background notes had previously given the gist of Bapit's aberrational behaviour! The boxing match is vividly conveyed. And clearly Ayesha is delighted with her winnings and in excellent humour, unfortunately to her cost later in the hotel room. This is all building nicely, though I can't help but feel sorry for Bapit, unceremoniously carried off to that hovel. A great job, Tony! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Oh wow, this was the chapter I missed although your helpful background notes had previously given the gist of Bapit's aberrational behaviour! The boxing match is vividly conveyed. And clearly Ayesha is delighted with her winnings and in excellent humour, unfortunately to her cost later in the hotel room. This is all building nicely, though I can't help but feel sorry for Bapit, unceremoniously carried off to that hovel. A great job, Tony! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thanks for this review, too. Yes, it looks as though Bapit is in deep trouble.
I appreciate your kind words. All good wishes for Christmas and the coming year. Tony
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And season's greetings to you too, Tony.
Comment from Pam (respa)
A good chapter that shows some of the nature of Thai culture from the boxing match to the events of the evening. Had Ayesha placed a bet on the match, and that's why she had the money? It's too bad Bapit had watched the American television program he had, or the night would have gone differently. I don't think there is going to be a good outcome for Bapit from the sound of it. Too many people wanting to take advantage of other people.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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A good chapter that shows some of the nature of Thai culture from the boxing match to the events of the evening. Had Ayesha placed a bet on the match, and that's why she had the money? It's too bad Bapit had watched the American television program he had, or the night would have gone differently. I don't think there is going to be a good outcome for Bapit from the sound of it. Too many people wanting to take advantage of other people.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Pam. Yes, Ayesha has plenty of money for her immediate needs. Somchai gave her a little over US $1000 for the necklace. Her 3000 baht (about US$90) bet on Bapit's brother would have netted her another 9000 bahts.
Maybe she has enough to bribe the police? ... or maybe not!
Poor Bapit is definitely in strife.
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Thanks for sharing everything, Tony. You are welcome for the review.
Comment from LJbutterfly
The story is compelling, but I most enjoyed the descriptions and the writing. I love watching TV boxing, and your vivid account of the match between Klahan and Thaksin made it easy to envision the fight. I also enjoyed reading the tender development of feelings between Ayesha and Bapit. I'm sorry he was so mistaken in the end. Now what's going to happen to either one of them? See you in the next chapter.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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The story is compelling, but I most enjoyed the descriptions and the writing. I love watching TV boxing, and your vivid account of the match between Klahan and Thaksin made it easy to envision the fight. I also enjoyed reading the tender development of feelings between Ayesha and Bapit. I'm sorry he was so mistaken in the end. Now what's going to happen to either one of them? See you in the next chapter.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Lorraine. So glad to hear you are continuing to enjoy the story. Wishing you all the best for Christmas and the coming year. Tony
Comment from GWHARGIS
Okay, this was a "yikes" chapter on so many levels. First, the fact that Bapit was so inexperienced he used a macho television character as his guide to romance.
Second: she has been traumatized by her now late husband and was expecting to have gentle love. Surprise, surprise.
Third: poor guy goes to a gay bar and gets drunk then swept away by a stranger. And now my imagination is going crazy. Great writing. Gretchen
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Okay, this was a "yikes" chapter on so many levels. First, the fact that Bapit was so inexperienced he used a macho television character as his guide to romance.
Second: she has been traumatized by her now late husband and was expecting to have gentle love. Surprise, surprise.
Third: poor guy goes to a gay bar and gets drunk then swept away by a stranger. And now my imagination is going crazy. Great writing. Gretchen
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thanks very much for your review, Gretchen, and for the six stars. Bapit certainly seems to have got himself into a mess, and things don't look too rosy for Ayesha either.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting and fun chapter, although no fun for Bapit. He should never have learned romancing from such a stupid show. After drinking himself unconscious, he is about to learn another lesson it seems. Good details about the environment and the characters in particular.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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This is an interesting and fun chapter, although no fun for Bapit. He should never have learned romancing from such a stupid show. After drinking himself unconscious, he is about to learn another lesson it seems. Good details about the environment and the characters in particular.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Carol. I appreciate your kind comments. Bapit certainly seems to have made a complete fool of himself. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Wendyanne
Oh dear I think Bapit's going to be getting more than he bargained for!! You certainly have great knowledge of boxing and of Thai culture. I found this interesting as my youngest son is currently dating a Thai lady!! I enjoyed reading this very much!
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Oh dear I think Bapit's going to be getting more than he bargained for!! You certainly have great knowledge of boxing and of Thai culture. I found this interesting as my youngest son is currently dating a Thai lady!! I enjoyed reading this very much!
Comment Written 17-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. Greatly appreciated. Interesting about your youngest son.
All the best, Tony.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Ayesha and Bapit's misinterpretion may end their friendship. I thought she wanted to have sex but apparently not. It's too bad, they make a cute couple.
Well done, Tony, a very enjoyable chapter.
Her husband, Bruno, is abusive.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Ayesha and Bapit's misinterpretion may end their friendship. I thought she wanted to have sex but apparently not. It's too bad, they make a cute couple.
Well done, Tony, a very enjoyable chapter.
Her husband, Bruno, is abusive.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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I think she did, but Bapit's heavy-handed approach turned her off. It reminded her too much of her abusive husband.
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Oh.... that makes sense. Thank you.
Comment from Ulla
Hahaha, this had me laughing not loud, Tony. What a wonderful turn of event. Poor Bapit has got it all wrong. Women are certainly not as easy going as they seem. It's a hard lesson to learn. A great story this I turning out to be. Ulla:)
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Hahaha, this had me laughing not loud, Tony. What a wonderful turn of event. Poor Bapit has got it all wrong. Women are certainly not as easy going as they seem. It's a hard lesson to learn. A great story this I turning out to be. Ulla:)
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Ulla. I appreciate your kind comments. I doubt poor Bapit will have much to laugh about. Best wishes, Tony
