Tender
Wanting and trusting in love47 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Lisa
Congrats on the win. It is a strong poem full of promise and seduction. He gives, she gives and both seem to receive. Well placed intriguing promises. I enjoyed the read very much. Congratulations again. Kiwi
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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Hi Lisa
Congrats on the win. It is a strong poem full of promise and seduction. He gives, she gives and both seem to receive. Well placed intriguing promises. I enjoyed the read very much. Congratulations again. Kiwi
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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And, then sadly he leaves her for another woman...
I do not remeber getting a review from you before now.
Perhaps we could be Fans?
Lisasview
Comment from Michael Groover
Your poem beautifully captures the sensual and intimate moment shared between two lovers. The imagery of tender hands caressing a naked body and the sensation of satin sheets between entwined arms create a vivid and passionate scene.
The transition from bright sunlight to cloudy weather mirrors the changing emotions and atmosphere in the poem, adding depth to the narrative. The focus on the soft, grey-blue eyes filled with love and desire adds a personal and emotional touch to the poem.
The poem expresses a strong connection and desire between the two individuals, emphasizing the depth of their affection and the intensity of their physical and emotional connection.
The final lines introduce a sense of melancholy and longing, suggesting that the speaker is reflecting on a past relationship or a love that was lost. The contrast between the passionate moments and the feeling of loss creates a bittersweet tone, making the poem emotionally resonant.
Overall, your poem effectively conveys the complexities of love, desire, and nostalgia, and it does so with elegance and sensuality.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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Your poem beautifully captures the sensual and intimate moment shared between two lovers. The imagery of tender hands caressing a naked body and the sensation of satin sheets between entwined arms create a vivid and passionate scene.
The transition from bright sunlight to cloudy weather mirrors the changing emotions and atmosphere in the poem, adding depth to the narrative. The focus on the soft, grey-blue eyes filled with love and desire adds a personal and emotional touch to the poem.
The poem expresses a strong connection and desire between the two individuals, emphasizing the depth of their affection and the intensity of their physical and emotional connection.
The final lines introduce a sense of melancholy and longing, suggesting that the speaker is reflecting on a past relationship or a love that was lost. The contrast between the passionate moments and the feeling of loss creates a bittersweet tone, making the poem emotionally resonant.
Overall, your poem effectively conveys the complexities of love, desire, and nostalgia, and it does so with elegance and sensuality.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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Oh my goodness your review is one I want to keep forever and ever. Thank you so much for taking the time not only to read but to analyse my poem and leave me with such a clear review...
There is one point that you do not delve into that I thought I might mention... The line about the other woman...many that read my poem skipped that line for some reason??
But the fact to you understood the meaning (metaphors) within my poem are greatly appreciated.
I believe this is the first review of mine that I have seen from you.
I wonder if you would like to be Fans?
Also, I think you would enjoy Nymph and Desires Withering Vines... which you can find in my portfolio..
By the way I won First Place for my poem,
Lisa
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
"Pulling me closer, I feel your desire ...(dance me)"
maybe missing "with"?
I love romantic poetry and yours doesn't disappoint. I know the pain of loving someone who chooses someone else. Well done. The rhymes don't sounded forced.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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"Pulling me closer, I feel your desire ...(dance me)"
maybe missing "with"?
I love romantic poetry and yours doesn't disappoint. I know the pain of loving someone who chooses someone else. Well done. The rhymes don't sounded forced.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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Good morning,
No ~ dance me ~ is the way I want it to read... it means something different than dance with me...
dance me goes with the rest of the line...
Hard to explain.
By the way I won First Place for my Tender poem.
Lisa
Comment from Janis M.
Many others have said it, but the phrase dance me with love is uniquely beautiful and puts to words that otherwise would be indescribable. The tragedy at the end is all too familiar for many of us.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Many others have said it, but the phrase dance me with love is uniquely beautiful and puts to words that otherwise would be indescribable. The tragedy at the end is all too familiar for many of us.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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I just love your review for my latest post!!!
Thank you so so much Janis...
Perhaps we could be Fans?
Lisasview
Comment from BethShelby
Feeling the love and tenderness at the beginning of this poem where the two enjoy intimacy make this poem sound like the perfect relationship. By the third verse we realize that one person in this relationship isn't fully committed. It is heartbreaking to have someone we still care deeply move on. Beautifully written.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Feeling the love and tenderness at the beginning of this poem where the two enjoy intimacy make this poem sound like the perfect relationship. By the third verse we realize that one person in this relationship isn't fully committed. It is heartbreaking to have someone we still care deeply move on. Beautifully written.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much Beth for reading and reviewing my newest post... means a lot to me... I love having a twist at the end...
Lisa
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Hello Lisa.
You've seemed to learn a lot since those days a few weeks ago when you were asking me all of those questions about posting on FS. Now, you come off like a professional fanstorian as they call themselves. The provocative picture is a surefire hit with the many readers who choose a piece by its image. And the provocative words lure us in as well to read and hopefully review your work. Well done!
Jesse
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Hello Lisa.
You've seemed to learn a lot since those days a few weeks ago when you were asking me all of those questions about posting on FS. Now, you come off like a professional fanstorian as they call themselves. The provocative picture is a surefire hit with the many readers who choose a piece by its image. And the provocative words lure us in as well to read and hopefully review your work. Well done!
Jesse
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Hi Jesse
Thank you for your wonderful review.
I am so happy that you like it!!!
Hoping my post does well ?
Lisa
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Good morning, Lisa.
I'm happy your post is doing well.
Have a great day.
Jesse
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Yes it does look that way for now dear Jesse... but time will tell...
Lisa
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Time is on your side.
Jesse
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
There is a saying better to have loved and lost than to have never love at all.
I have never loved so I can't say anything on the matter.
The two had something unique and beautiful but he betrayed her trust and tossed her gift of love aside for another woman.
She is left with memories .. I can't help but wonder if she will still cherish the memories together or will her bitterness corrode them.
I was enjoying the romantic vibe and then out of the blue the unexpected twist.
That one line :
Losing you to her I could not bear...
might have easily hit some readers in the gut .. sadly, up to 40% unmarried couples and 20% married couple experience sexual infidelity. ( sigh)
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Ciao!
There is a saying better to have loved and lost than to have never love at all.
I have never loved so I can't say anything on the matter.
The two had something unique and beautiful but he betrayed her trust and tossed her gift of love aside for another woman.
She is left with memories .. I can't help but wonder if she will still cherish the memories together or will her bitterness corrode them.
I was enjoying the romantic vibe and then out of the blue the unexpected twist.
That one line :
Losing you to her I could not bear...
might have easily hit some readers in the gut .. sadly, up to 40% unmarried couples and 20% married couple experience sexual infidelity. ( sigh)
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Oh my goodness dear Tempeste I am delighted you really got my post and what it really is all about... Interesting that it made you wonder...
Thank you so much for your wonderful review...Delighted that you liked my poem... I think you gave me Six Stars... wow wonderful...
Lisa
Comment from Raul1
This is a very good rhyming poem and I think it flows well. It is clear and concise. Thank you for sharing! Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. Nice. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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This is a very good rhyming poem and I think it flows well. It is clear and concise. Thank you for sharing! Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. Nice. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Good morning Raul, So nice to hear from you! And, thank you so much for wishing me good luck in the contest... means a lot to me.
Lisa
Comment from Aussie
Your rhyming love poem gives insight into a love affair you thought would last forever. Nothing hurts more than losing the love of your life. Fiction or not, you have given color to being in love and then losing him. Well written. Best wishes in the contest. K xx
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Your rhyming love poem gives insight into a love affair you thought would last forever. Nothing hurts more than losing the love of your life. Fiction or not, you have given color to being in love and then losing him. Well written. Best wishes in the contest. K xx
Comment Written 29-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Good morning K. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. Glad you liked my poem and thank you for wishing me good luck in the contet!
Lisa
Comment from Paul McFarland
Only the last couplet hints that he is gone. Is that the case, Lisa? The main body of the poem seems to indicate that they are still together.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Only the last couplet hints that he is gone. Is that the case, Lisa? The main body of the poem seems to indicate that they are still together.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Ahhhh, Paul that is what is so interesting about reading poetry... The reader takes away from it what they think. That is why it is good to read a poem more than once...which I always do. In this case he left her for another woman... You will find that line in my poem...She is madly in love with him and trusts that he feels the same... but somehow (maybe he tells her?)that this is the last time they will be together... Lisa
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What would happen if "could" in the twelfth line was replaced with "can"?
