your love saved my life
true love3 total reviews
Comment from Aiona
What a sweet poem. It fits the 5-7-5 syllable count. It has a natural progression from 1. Stressed and lonely person 2. Two people falling in love and 3. The beginning of an improved life with love.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023
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What a sweet poem. It fits the 5-7-5 syllable count. It has a natural progression from 1. Stressed and lonely person 2. Two people falling in love and 3. The beginning of an improved life with love.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023
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thanks a lot
Comment from JSD
A beautiful little 5-7-5. You convey a great deal in your mere seventeen syllables. not sure about the capital letters, I think they detract a little, but there is a great idea here. Good luck with it.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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A beautiful little 5-7-5. You convey a great deal in your mere seventeen syllables. not sure about the capital letters, I think they detract a little, but there is a great idea here. Good luck with it.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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thanks
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a lovely, evocative 5-7-5. However, your last line is, unfortunately 7 syllables. It's easy to fix. Maybe: My life then began? I love the imagery of those sparks that triggered meaning and love in your life. The poem speaks volumes about that wonderful, spell-binding moment. I wish you luck in the contest! Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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This is a lovely, evocative 5-7-5. However, your last line is, unfortunately 7 syllables. It's easy to fix. Maybe: My life then began? I love the imagery of those sparks that triggered meaning and love in your life. The poem speaks volumes about that wonderful, spell-binding moment. I wish you luck in the contest! Debbie
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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thanks edited it already