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Comment from thoughtgame2
The beginning alone blew me away...literally. Besides the obvious (great!!!) Picture. You started this story with much bravado and sureness. As if you were very eager to get going. I can feel that. Its not normal. Its special. Thank you. Cant wait to read more. And by the way that drawing on my 2nd page was by me of my baby sister. I was protecting her. Just wanted you to know. Talk to you soon ...have a blessed new year sis.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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The beginning alone blew me away...literally. Besides the obvious (great!!!) Picture. You started this story with much bravado and sureness. As if you were very eager to get going. I can feel that. Its not normal. Its special. Thank you. Cant wait to read more. And by the way that drawing on my 2nd page was by me of my baby sister. I was protecting her. Just wanted you to know. Talk to you soon ...have a blessed new year sis.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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That's wonderful that you protected your sister and a great picture too I must say and thank you for reading and offering your kind review and very much appreciate it. your comments are valuable to me I thank you again! Have the best 2024 ever!
Comment from Julie Helms
As a prologue, it hints of conflict and tragedy and a story that needs to be told. So I think it is extremely successful as an introduction to your bio.
Only suggestion is to change "if I was a ballerina" to the subjunctive "if I were a ballerina".
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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As a prologue, it hints of conflict and tragedy and a story that needs to be told. So I think it is extremely successful as an introduction to your bio.
Only suggestion is to change "if I was a ballerina" to the subjunctive "if I were a ballerina".
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much Julie I'm glad you liked it I went ahead and made the change you suggested and these suggestions for edit are the most precious thing of all after all this is how writers learn at least how I learn anyway so thank you again for that wonderful gift I wish you all the best in 2024!
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You are very welcome! I agree with you and wish people would do more suggesting in reviews. I'm with you...that's how I learn! Happy New Year!
Comment from jmdg1954
Wow. Lea. I'm sorry you had to live through such difficult and trying times. What you are doing now requires a standing ovation!
I praise you for your strength and courage to share.
I will be around for the ride as an interested reader, but more so as a friend!
John
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023
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Wow. Lea. I'm sorry you had to live through such difficult and trying times. What you are doing now requires a standing ovation!
I praise you for your strength and courage to share.
I will be around for the ride as an interested reader, but more so as a friend!
John
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023
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Thank you, John. I appreciate that so much for reading and for your fine review. Also appreciated! I appreciate new friends thank you very much honored to have you as such! Enjoy your night!
Comment from Teri7
Lea, this is a very well written prologue. You used very good descriptive words letting us know what you will be writing about. I look forward to reading it as much as I can! love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023
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Lea, this is a very well written prologue. You used very good descriptive words letting us know what you will be writing about. I look forward to reading it as much as I can! love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much Teri! I appreciate your kind comments! Very happy to see you named, I have your fine with you and you're great ratings too I thank you so much. I hope you have a great evening!
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You are so welcome sweet friend. I hope you have a great afternoon and night! love and blessings, Teri
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
Perhaps this story will involve a little less pain and violence, I can only guess. So, is this going to be a trilogy, like JRR Tolkien's The Hobbit? I'll be interested in seeing what develops.
Blessings,
Tom
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Hello Lea,
Perhaps this story will involve a little less pain and violence, I can only guess. So, is this going to be a trilogy, like JRR Tolkien's The Hobbit? I'll be interested in seeing what develops.
Blessings,
Tom
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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There's so much content. It's no other choice but to break it down to 3 books. With these writings I break free. Thank you again my friend you're the best!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This prologue is well-written. It would draw in readers like me and others.
Only the tiniest of suggestions:
I'm pouring shudders out in gratitude that I do not have to go back there"
Just put a period after there and before the quotations marks at the end of the sentence.
Step lightly intrepid ones....
Just insert a comma after lightly.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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This prologue is well-written. It would draw in readers like me and others.
Only the tiniest of suggestions:
I'm pouring shudders out in gratitude that I do not have to go back there"
Just put a period after there and before the quotations marks at the end of the sentence.
Step lightly intrepid ones....
Just insert a comma after lightly.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you again, my friend for this wonderful rating and fine review. You are the best thanks so much!
Comment from Douglas Goff
Sounds like this will be interesting and powerful!
Quick fix:
been part of the masses of children who slipped under the radar ans then some.
A story of survival, of three
(and)
Good owning.
D
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Sounds like this will be interesting and powerful!
Quick fix:
been part of the masses of children who slipped under the radar ans then some.
A story of survival, of three
(and)
Good owning.
D
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you, my friend going in for the big fix. I appreciate you as always don't forget! Of course you wont forget. I tell you lots! I appreciate your Eagle eye pointing out the edits. Because I need that that's like gold to me! Thank you again my friend Make sure you have the best and most relaxing evening ever!
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Good opening. (Ha! We all make booboos. )
Comment from BermyBye50
Lea,
This is a courageous first step forward in telling your life story. Your revelations will surely provide the strength and comfort to others who have lived similar life experiences. I know this is a deeply personal story but I want you to know that I am profoundly touched by your willingness to share your life's story here on Fanstory.
I have bookmarked each chapter of your book. You're my hero.
Blessings always,
Eugene
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Lea,
This is a courageous first step forward in telling your life story. Your revelations will surely provide the strength and comfort to others who have lived similar life experiences. I know this is a deeply personal story but I want you to know that I am profoundly touched by your willingness to share your life's story here on Fanstory.
I have bookmarked each chapter of your book. You're my hero.
Blessings always,
Eugene
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you again my friend!!
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By the way you're
?Simply Beautiful?
You are the epitome
of loveliness
the true essence
of a woman
breathtakingly
defined
You are perfection?s
exquisite aura
conceived
in every
beguiling
sensuous curve,
You are naturally
spellbinding
truly paradise
to men?s
enchanted
minds,
You are imagined
romantic
notions
of
blissful
endless love,
You are simply
?Beautiful?
a wonder
an innocent
splendor
to behold.
© Eugene Harvey
Comment from BethShelby
So this book will be going back again over some of the same things you covered in the first book? You mention violence and I'm wondering how this will be different. Maybe you are planning to tell more about your sisters? I thought this book would be what happened after you managed to get away, but now I'm not sure.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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So this book will be going back again over some of the same things you covered in the first book? You mention violence and I'm wondering how this will be different. Maybe you are planning to tell more about your sisters? I thought this book would be what happened after you managed to get away, but now I'm not sure.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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The 1st book covers my life from birth to age of 17 2nd book. Will cover from that age up until 15 years later. And then there will be a third, which is my life to. Now there is so much to tell so very much happy to have you along for the ride! My sister's at that time we're safe. Mom was with her father, the youngest one and my sister was with an ant in-law of The Valley far enough. They couldn't do anything to her. Life for me carried on being difficult in different ways. I was wholly unprepared for being on my own and so it was very difficult at first I also went to a place. I shouldn't have been some place i'd known before. However, that will come up in the next book. Thank you again thank you again thank you so much for reading. I appreciate your consistency. You are a very kind human being and I appreciate all your words thank you!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Thank you for sharing this beautifully expressed prologue to your next book. It's an excellent preparation for what is to come and we brace ourselves for it. There are some small edits: anonymous; an(d); Take care, Lea. Love Debbie x
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you for sharing this beautifully expressed prologue to your next book. It's an excellent preparation for what is to come and we brace ourselves for it. There are some small edits: anonymous; an(d); Take care, Lea. Love Debbie x
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you Debbie, thank you. Thank you. I'm hoping I can publish. And there's so many people I would like to acknowledge. Nudge nudge wink wink! Thank you again I appreciate you very much For your review and you're fine rating too have a great night!
