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Comment from Pearl Edwards
I think what makes your chapters easier for us readers to digest is that you show us your emotions in the present time as well, and that shows us that you have found methods of coping, both back then and now.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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I think what makes your chapters easier for us readers to digest is that you show us your emotions in the present time as well, and that shows us that you have found methods of coping, both back then and now.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Unblock that style. I thought it would break up a bit of the Having is created when reading such a thing. I thought you like it so very much thank you again!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I have heard that stress continues until decisions are made. This is real-life drama that is hard to read but necessary to express.
Suggestion:
Mother sitting there with a "what now" expression on her face.
I would say:
Mother was sitting there with a "What now?" expression on her face.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
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I have heard that stress continues until decisions are made. This is real-life drama that is hard to read but necessary to express.
Suggestion:
Mother sitting there with a "what now" expression on her face.
I would say:
Mother was sitting there with a "What now?" expression on her face.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
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Well thank you that's a perfect suggestion I appreciate that! Thank you again for another fine review from you I'm always happy to see them. Everyone offers a wonderful tips and the suggestions for change Words of support all the great things that everyone here on the This site has done very much including yourself thank you again have a great night!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
I wonder what happened in this man's life that he was so insecure, made to feel so helpless, that he had to mistreat another human being the way he treated you. I sense the end is coming. It will be good to move on for your sake. It's time to let the healing begin. Thanks so much for sharing this painful experience gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Hello Lea,
I wonder what happened in this man's life that he was so insecure, made to feel so helpless, that he had to mistreat another human being the way he treated you. I sense the end is coming. It will be good to move on for your sake. It's time to let the healing begin. Thanks so much for sharing this painful experience gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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There was 2 issues with my stepfather. He was born angry he had a quick temper. Blew off the handle on a regular basis. Second reason he could have gone on to pro hockey with the hockey player extraordinaire. But his father wouldn't let him to work in the mines to help support the family instead. He never forgave his father for that was extremely angry about it. We were his targets. Thank you my friend tom you are amazing! You ask the best questions and make the needed comments thank you again I hope you're having a good evening!
Comment from LJbutterfly
You were slowly filling up with anger and fear, but the anger boiled over and you blurted out some of what was bottled up inside. I'm sure you knew what would happen, and it happened. Thump! Crash! Now, it's your mother's turn. She needs a Thump and Crash for doing nothing. I am so, so glad you were strong enough to survive and are now able to tell all.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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You were slowly filling up with anger and fear, but the anger boiled over and you blurted out some of what was bottled up inside. I'm sure you knew what would happen, and it happened. Thump! Crash! Now, it's your mother's turn. She needs a Thump and Crash for doing nothing. I am so, so glad you were strong enough to survive and are now able to tell all.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank you again for reading so happy to see you there. Thank you very much for your review. I appreciate it as always. I hope your evening is great!
Comment from w.j.debi
People can only be pushed so far and then they either break or rebel. I'm glad you didn't curl in on yourself and give up. You did not deserve this treatment. No one does. How to escape the abuse. That is the hard part. What are the choices? Shelter and some food or the streets and not knowing if it could be worse? You are an excellent story teller.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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People can only be pushed so far and then they either break or rebel. I'm glad you didn't curl in on yourself and give up. You did not deserve this treatment. No one does. How to escape the abuse. That is the hard part. What are the choices? Shelter and some food or the streets and not knowing if it could be worse? You are an excellent story teller.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thank you. I'm so glad you like my style of writing. I appreciate that so much. I never thought I could put 2 words together. For I'm so glad that people are saying it's good writing, so thank you for that. Define compliment not a lot of choices. When you're 16. In Canada you have no rights until you're 18 I mean there was things like social services at that time called social welfare or Zen at 1234 for kids. My family's very much involved with them. So they were able to divert and eliminate any issues with abuse to their great advantage. Thank you so much I appreciate you and so glad in there with me!
Comment from JSD
The cinquain at the top is amazing. And your handling of language throughout is superb. Whatever happens, Lea, never lose sight of the fact that you are a brilliant writer. I don't know where it comes from but never let go of it. Xxx
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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The cinquain at the top is amazing. And your handling of language throughout is superb. Whatever happens, Lea, never lose sight of the fact that you are a brilliant writer. I don't know where it comes from but never let go of it. Xxx
Comment Written 11-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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John thank you again my friend i'm so happy You like this thank you!
Comment from damommy
He really gets a kick out of someone's pain. I wish he could experience it for himself. Maybe he did and we don't know about it. I firmly believe what goes around, comes around.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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He really gets a kick out of someone's pain. I wish he could experience it for himself. Maybe he did and we don't know about it. I firmly believe what goes around, comes around.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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I believe it too and this is my way of having it come around. It's already causing a stir around here. My mother is nervous. I would like everything to happen right now. Unfortunately I cannot. But I do have interest coming from social services. So we shall see how the cookie crumbles. Thank you my friend appreciate you so very much!
Comment from Jim Wile
I'm so glad you are able to quell your anger by writing about it, Lea. I don't know if I'd be able to, given what you've gone through.
Your fortitude is admirable. I don't know how you made it through with your sanity intact. I fantasize about what I might have done with a stepfather like that. Probably would have taken a knife and slit his throat while he slept.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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I'm so glad you are able to quell your anger by writing about it, Lea. I don't know if I'd be able to, given what you've gone through.
Your fortitude is admirable. I don't know how you made it through with your sanity intact. I fantasize about what I might have done with a stepfather like that. Probably would have taken a knife and slit his throat while he slept.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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I have had many visions like that. Sometimes so much so I had to clench my fists close to my body so I didn't strike out.
I did not come through unscathed. I suffer from depression. It is managed through medication to a point where I just feel normal. I'm sorry, thank you for your fine comments. You're wonderful review. I shall always your amazing.
I appreciate all your Thoughts and suggestions appreciate you for hanging in there with me thank you again Jim
Comment from Rachelle Allen
In your soul, you had already left, so all he could hurt now was your body. You had crossed the threshold of caring about that anymore. Understandable....and simultaneously SO very dangerous. That man is such a savage, he ENJOYED hurting you. Meanwhile, there sat your wonderful mother, letting him...because, after all, he was footing all the bills.
Honestly, Lea, that you are still alive to tell this tale of abject horror is a bona fide miracle. Looks like it's someone else's turn to shudder now. To freakin bad.
Super duper great job with this harrowing chapter.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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In your soul, you had already left, so all he could hurt now was your body. You had crossed the threshold of caring about that anymore. Understandable....and simultaneously SO very dangerous. That man is such a savage, he ENJOYED hurting you. Meanwhile, there sat your wonderful mother, letting him...because, after all, he was footing all the bills.
Honestly, Lea, that you are still alive to tell this tale of abject horror is a bona fide miracle. Looks like it's someone else's turn to shudder now. To freakin bad.
Super duper great job with this harrowing chapter.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Hello, my friend. I am deeply honored by your review as always. You have wonderful insight. You've got amazing things to say. I'm created vice and which brings me to a place very soon where I will need to ask for advice from yourself and our mutual friend. I will send you a private message to your regular email. Thank you so much for being you! OX!
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Of course. Always happy to help you. xoxo
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
You know how much I'm hooked into your story, Lea and the problem is I want you to retaliate but, at the same time I just want to warn you that you're going to come off the hurt one. You built the tension up throughout and it was heading for more violence. But, hopefully, it's been a release for you, another piece of the story bravely excised for the moment. Well done, Lea! Debbie
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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You know how much I'm hooked into your story, Lea and the problem is I want you to retaliate but, at the same time I just want to warn you that you're going to come off the hurt one. You built the tension up throughout and it was heading for more violence. But, hopefully, it's been a release for you, another piece of the story bravely excised for the moment. Well done, Lea! Debbie
Comment Written 10-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thank you Debbie! Such an amazing review. oh yeah ass is going to get kicked! As most of the players are still around. Their is an issue with social services who failed us, Things happen will heat up for me around here.
Oh where no one knows me to continue this fight. My goal being the change in policies and direction within social services. And that my story goes out there and gives courage to someone else. I'm coming soon to a part while. I will need to ask questions and that is there is so much more content that I feel it should be split in two. I shall be getting to that point very soon. Thank you my friend I hope you don't mind if I ask your advise and that of our mutual friend. Two great ladies!
