Ghost
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "The Cry"Biography/Supernatural
15 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Another heart breaking piece of your soul, and it's true what doesn't kills you makes you stronger, and here you are today stronger and bolder than ever. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Another heart breaking piece of your soul, and it's true what doesn't kills you makes you stronger, and here you are today stronger and bolder than ever. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Thank you Iza! I'm so sorry I was unable to get back to you sooner I've suffered a bad accident and got third degree burns but I wanted to wish you a happy New year hope your Christmas was great and that your evening will be grand as well! Thank you again!
Comment from Austin Yu
There are so many parts of this short story that have excellent imagery and analogies that make me feel as though I'm suffering through the same pain, like the scabs, and scars. Nice work!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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There are so many parts of this short story that have excellent imagery and analogies that make me feel as though I'm suffering through the same pain, like the scabs, and scars. Nice work!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Thank you again Austin I appreciate your reviews and your kind comments I hope you had a good Christmas and your new year will be great too have an awesome day!
Comment from Ric Myworld
I left home at 15 and hitchhiked across the country to sleep under a blue, plastic tarp beneath the Hollywood sign. Within two weeks, the money ran out and survival got rough. But I promised I'd never go back, and didn't. I've felt for you since I started reading your chapters. Wishing you the best! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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I left home at 15 and hitchhiked across the country to sleep under a blue, plastic tarp beneath the Hollywood sign. Within two weeks, the money ran out and survival got rough. But I promised I'd never go back, and didn't. I've felt for you since I started reading your chapters. Wishing you the best! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Further to my email thank you again I appreciate this so very much!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
As I read your chapters about your early life, Lea I wonder if I would have had the courage to not only survive but to fight for life as you had to. I'm glad that by this chapter you could feel the writing, releasing was having its effect. Just one edit -
Maybe she can keep (a) secret.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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As I read your chapters about your early life, Lea I wonder if I would have had the courage to not only survive but to fight for life as you had to. I'm glad that by this chapter you could feel the writing, releasing was having its effect. Just one edit -
Maybe she can keep (a) secret.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the edit I really appreciate those they helped me very much! For me living through it there was no choice live or die. I think it's instinct or our sense of self preservation. I'm not sure. Thank you for the fine compliment your review and fine rating! I hope your Thanksgiving was great!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
An apple, bologna, and milk. It sounds like you were living on a first or second grader's rations.
A couple of other reviewers may have commented on your change in verb tenses. I just take it that it comes a lot more as what is called 'stream-of-consciousness' and will flip between verb tenses due to that process of recalling events. But if you end up publishing this somewhere more formally, you could always get a good editor to make it more uniform in verb tense if desired.
The end of this chapter indicates that there is hope, that perhaps a friend on the outside could help in some way.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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An apple, bologna, and milk. It sounds like you were living on a first or second grader's rations.
A couple of other reviewers may have commented on your change in verb tenses. I just take it that it comes a lot more as what is called 'stream-of-consciousness' and will flip between verb tenses due to that process of recalling events. But if you end up publishing this somewhere more formally, you could always get a good editor to make it more uniform in verb tense if desired.
The end of this chapter indicates that there is hope, that perhaps a friend on the outside could help in some way.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thank you, my friend always appreciate your reviews and any edits you can suggest is valuable to me. I appreciate it very much. And there is hope at the end of the tunnel thank you so much again!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
While it's a moot point, and of course I wasn't the one dealing with the issues that you were, I think I might have been tempted to set that damned house on fire while they were gone and just leave and let them figure out what to do next. That's just me though. I hate the way you've been treated, though as I mentioned, it's in the past. Hopefully the healing is continuing as you write.
Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2023
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Hello Lea,
While it's a moot point, and of course I wasn't the one dealing with the issues that you were, I think I might have been tempted to set that damned house on fire while they were gone and just leave and let them figure out what to do next. That's just me though. I hate the way you've been treated, though as I mentioned, it's in the past. Hopefully the healing is continuing as you write.
Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2023
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I believe you me, I've had all kinds of interesting thoughts. I thought about firing the house. How about knocking them out first door I saw many things. Cross my mind growing up of what I would have liked to have done. It's always that thing inside me that tells me no, no, you can't do what it is. And thank you again, my friend Tom. You are most amazing reviewer. I appreciate you very much. I'm the broken record that's going to keep saying thank you. Thank you have a great day!
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Hello Lea,
You don't sound like a broken record, you sound like someone who is finally being heard. I'm so glad you're sharing your story, though it's distressing.
Blessings,
Tom
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Thank you my friend!
Comment from damommy
I hope you ran while you could. I'll find out in the next chapter. What a beating that was. If you had gone to the police, they would have locked him up if not your mother, too.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2023
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I hope you ran while you could. I'll find out in the next chapter. What a beating that was. If you had gone to the police, they would have locked him up if not your mother, too.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2023
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Oh, how I wish that I wasn't so afraid of everything at that time. There isn't much that I would have liked to have done differently. Thank you again for reading. I so appreciate you and so happy to see your name come up! Thank you!
Comment from Lisasview
Hi there... me again..
So, you just need to watch your tense...past and present.
You are writing this from your past experiences so this means you need your tenses to be past not present.
Every part of my back and legs is tender.
Here you need Were not IS.
know now my threshold is low.
and here you need WAS not IS
Lisa
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Hi there... me again..
So, you just need to watch your tense...past and present.
You are writing this from your past experiences so this means you need your tenses to be past not present.
Every part of my back and legs is tender.
Here you need Were not IS.
know now my threshold is low.
and here you need WAS not IS
Lisa
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Absolutely right, thank you for seeing that sometimes I do overlook. Occasionally, that's why we have awesome reviewers and editors like yourself for which I appreciate you so very much. Thank you again my friend!
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You are so welcome.
Sometimes when writing about the past we all feel like it is the present so that is why the tenses get a bit confused.
Lisa
Comment from BethShelby
I'm glad you have decided to talk ro someone. You certainly needed to talk to someone. I can't imagine someone that could leave you in such condition and still expect you to slave over the house.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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I'm glad you have decided to talk ro someone. You certainly needed to talk to someone. I can't imagine someone that could leave you in such condition and still expect you to slave over the house.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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There are many things I didn't understand it's a kid growing up the lie that I never got the lie of it for me but overtime as I grew older and I learned more things about them and others. Not in evidence, I have here to read. It is time now to give it all some light the publish. And I hope it helps someone. Surely thank you again my friend may you have the greatest day!
Comment from Jim Wile
There appears to be no one in your extended family with a vestige of morality in them because if there were, someone would have rescued you from the hell you were in. I just don't see how people can turn a blind eye to someone in your plight. It's absolutely shameful.
I hope you contact your friend and that something comes of it; you don't deserve to have to live under such conditions.
This was a well written chapter, Lea. I could feel your pain every time you moved. It was very well described. - Jim
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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There appears to be no one in your extended family with a vestige of morality in them because if there were, someone would have rescued you from the hell you were in. I just don't see how people can turn a blind eye to someone in your plight. It's absolutely shameful.
I hope you contact your friend and that something comes of it; you don't deserve to have to live under such conditions.
This was a well written chapter, Lea. I could feel your pain every time you moved. It was very well described. - Jim
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you again, Jim my friend. You always pick up exactly what I was trying to describe. Thank you again my friends you are amazing!
