Comment from Lea Tonin1

Excellent

Here here! Yes retirement should be a freedom party! You followed the contest rules very well. Awesome Bob and I really like the subject matter. You chose as well as the picture gives me a nice smile. And I appreciate those I see. No issues with esthetics, sentence structure, spelling, or subject matter. Best of luck to you and I hope you have a great night!

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023

Thanks, Lea. No luck on the great night. Insomnia again.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Excellent entry for the 5/7/5 fire contest. the presentation is good. Concrete images easy to visualize.

Good syllables count and connection between lines.

Good luck in the contest.

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023

Thanks, Gypsy. I retired four years ago.

Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

Lol I can't wait to retire but the government keeps changing the age of retirement!! I Will build a bonfire with everything I have to do with my job as a nurse!! An enjoyable little poem.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023

That's a good idea with the bonfire.

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

it's always a wonderful day to celebrate...
when you retire...no more having to wake
up before you want to...doing things around the
house you have wanted to do for years...
YEA...I love your poem...very well written...
picture perfect...love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023

Thanks, Linda. I got up at 4:00 AM for so many years that I still can't sleep beyond 5:00 AM.

reply by l.raven on 21-Oct-2023

I worked two jobs at one time...
raising two kids...
one was a bouncer at night...
so I was up until 2:00am...or later...
now I have trouble sleeping at night...
but I am also retired...
and your so very welcome...love xxoo

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

What will be burned here? Or is the bonfire just a celebration? Not sure what is going on, but your post rhymes anyway, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023

Thanks, Christine. The bonfire was for all my regrets. Now that I'm retired, I'm going to try to not have any.

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

This is excellent work. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in a readers. Happy Retirement! I retired from teaching, early, due to disability. So I miss working with kids, teaching. That's why I hope to publish books for children and young adults. What are you able to or planning to do in your retirement? Good luck with whatever that is.

Best wishes,

Alexandra

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023

Thanks, Alexandra. I, also, retired early from teaching after ten years because of sickness in the family. I then worked at another job for over forty years. I now plan to write poetry, cut firewood, and try to keep my body healthy.

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Thank you for making me smile! I really enjoyed the image accompanied by your lovely sentiments of ambition following retirement. The monrhyme works well and I'm still smiling. So that's good. Although I would prefer that bon fire be one word:) Good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023

Thanks, Debbie. You are right about bonfire. My bad.