Ghost
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Orange Cleanse "Biography/Supernatural
15 total reviews
Comment from namspoon
It would be best to read the rest of your story to completely understand the content of this chapter. Changing directions, jumping into the brush, covering one's self with mud - try chancing chiggers and blood-sucking leeches to the necessity to dive into and be completely covered in mud. I'm just kidding. Good writing.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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It would be best to read the rest of your story to completely understand the content of this chapter. Changing directions, jumping into the brush, covering one's self with mud - try chancing chiggers and blood-sucking leeches to the necessity to dive into and be completely covered in mud. I'm just kidding. Good writing.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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Lol...your funny! Yes you might find it a little more plausible for sure if you wish to read. The book is called Ghost. Feel free! Thank you for your review! I'm honored to receive this and your fine rating!
Comment from Ginda Simpson
What is so compelling about your story is that you don't hesitate or overthink, but simply let the words splash onto your page. It's an emotional storm and you let it pour. Brava!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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What is so compelling about your story is that you don't hesitate or overthink, but simply let the words splash onto your page. It's an emotional storm and you let it pour. Brava!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much. I tried to do that. But I tried not to inject too much stuff. Just let it flow it was the pace my mind wanted to go. Thank you, Ginda, so happy to receive your review and your kind comments too. As well as your fine rating! I hope you have the best evening!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I love the way you described the cleansing, refreshing tropical rain. Interesting knowledge you had at that age about the white birch bark, the army cadets helped you through. Yes, everyone deserves a little luck.
Great chapter Lea well written.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023
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I love the way you described the cleansing, refreshing tropical rain. Interesting knowledge you had at that age about the white birch bark, the army cadets helped you through. Yes, everyone deserves a little luck.
Great chapter Lea well written.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 22-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023
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Valda amazing review and fine rating for which I thank you again. I'm truly honored!
Comment from Teri7
This is very interesting what you have penned. You use great descriptive words and I could tell what was going on because of your descriptive words. Thanks for sharing! love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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This is very interesting what you have penned. You use great descriptive words and I could tell what was going on because of your descriptive words. Thanks for sharing! love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Thank you Teri for reading I appreciate it very much. Thank you for your kind words and review is like gold to me. If you wish, this is a chapter in my book called ghost an auto bile in my portfolio. But you may find it a valuable risk. And I welcome you to it. Thank you so much again for your review and your awesome comment!
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You are so welcome! I added you to where I will get your posts. I look forward to reading more of your work!
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Thank you so much, Teri! I'm happy to have you and I should like to be your fan as well so I could read your work too! This chapter is part of a book I'm writing called "Ghost", which is in my portfolio. Feel free to read anytime you wish thank you again! I feel very humbled and honored. I hope you have an amazing day.
Comment from JSD
The prologue is beautiful again. Watching the sky. And clouds pregnant with raindrop kids! Superb. Song of my shoes! Puddles showing their tummies. You are such a wordsmith. Brilliant stuff. Keep going!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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The prologue is beautiful again. Watching the sky. And clouds pregnant with raindrop kids! Superb. Song of my shoes! Puddles showing their tummies. You are such a wordsmith. Brilliant stuff. Keep going!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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John, that's such kind compliments, thank you. I'm so happy you liked them. I tried to throw in a little bit of beauty along in this very unattractive story. You make my day thank you so much! Until glad you're along for the ride have an awesome evening!
Comment from kahpot
Another wonderful read, you certainly have had some situations in your life, and yet (here) still so young, I loved the story and the bigger darker font makes for great reading****kahpot
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Another wonderful read, you certainly have had some situations in your life, and yet (here) still so young, I loved the story and the bigger darker font makes for great reading****kahpot
Comment Written 15-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, I appreciate you reading it and offering your kind comments, this is how we grow. Anything said in a constructive way is welcome in my world. Thanks for hanging out and reading and following along and for your reviews like gold!
Comment from LJbutterfly
I grew up in a big city, and find your will and ability to survive in the wilderness, alone, remarkable. I am so sorry this story is biographical, but must admit, fiction could not be any more compelling. Your memory of the party and the people chasing you added extra mystery and suspense. Your creative way of telling the reader what you are currently doing, like waking up at 5:05 am, mixed with backstory memories, is like telling two stories at once. The fact that you are sorting all of this out, tells us you survived. This is very well done.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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I grew up in a big city, and find your will and ability to survive in the wilderness, alone, remarkable. I am so sorry this story is biographical, but must admit, fiction could not be any more compelling. Your memory of the party and the people chasing you added extra mystery and suspense. Your creative way of telling the reader what you are currently doing, like waking up at 5:05 am, mixed with backstory memories, is like telling two stories at once. The fact that you are sorting all of this out, tells us you survived. This is very well done.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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That is high praise, thank you.
I'm very humbled and honored to receive Your kind and compassionate comments and your observations are spot on! I appreciate you, and thank you so very much. It's so nice to see you are review come up!
Comment from Jim Wile
Your presence of mind and your ingenuity continue to amaze me, Lea. I can just picture you standing out in that storm luxuriating in the cleansing effect of that rain, feeling as though it was washing away all the filth of your past and giving you a fresh start. Then you are able to get yourself and your equipment dried off, sit down and eat a meal, never panicking or feeling sorry for yourself, just using your brain and your cadet skills to survive.
This was beautifully written too with sentences like, "The little ponds exposed their diamond bellies to the sun cheekily showing off their wares."
You're able to evade your discoverers and quickly think of a way to remain hidden to them. All very impressive. All of this continually reinforces that you were not a victim but a survivor.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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Your presence of mind and your ingenuity continue to amaze me, Lea. I can just picture you standing out in that storm luxuriating in the cleansing effect of that rain, feeling as though it was washing away all the filth of your past and giving you a fresh start. Then you are able to get yourself and your equipment dried off, sit down and eat a meal, never panicking or feeling sorry for yourself, just using your brain and your cadet skills to survive.
This was beautifully written too with sentences like, "The little ponds exposed their diamond bellies to the sun cheekily showing off their wares."
You're able to evade your discoverers and quickly think of a way to remain hidden to them. All very impressive. All of this continually reinforces that you were not a victim but a survivor.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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That was an awesome review so very thoughtful and kind of you.
And you have amazing insight in case you didn't know. That's very much on the money, shall we say! I'm very glad you like my writing. I'm very glad when anyone likes my writing, but especially you 0right Being such a prolific, are you amazing right to yourself. Thank you again, Jim, enjoy your evening!
Comment from damommy
You were lucky to get away from him. No telling what might have happened, even with a big group. I'm not familiar with Alpha Ghetti. What is it? I hope you learned your lesson about getting too close to people out there.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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You were lucky to get away from him. No telling what might have happened, even with a big group. I'm not familiar with Alpha Ghetti. What is it? I hope you learned your lesson about getting too close to people out there.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much I appreciate your compassion too enjoy your evening!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
I too lived in a rain forest, but in Southeast Alaska. The Tongass National Forest. No birches down there, some alder, yellow cedar, spruce and hemlock. If a person had a way to get some yellow cedar, it burns hot and fast, but unfortunately leaves no coals. I understand the feeling of loneliness. You're right, you can be surrounded by people and still be lonely. You were lucky to escape the group that was chasing you. Lord knows how it might have turned out. We wouldn't be reading your story now. Thanks for sharing.
Blessings,
Tom
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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Hello Lea,
I too lived in a rain forest, but in Southeast Alaska. The Tongass National Forest. No birches down there, some alder, yellow cedar, spruce and hemlock. If a person had a way to get some yellow cedar, it burns hot and fast, but unfortunately leaves no coals. I understand the feeling of loneliness. You're right, you can be surrounded by people and still be lonely. You were lucky to escape the group that was chasing you. Lord knows how it might have turned out. We wouldn't be reading your story now. Thanks for sharing.
Blessings,
Tom
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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Yeah I knew my physical limitations but was better for me to hide and wait. Yeah, Alaska is beautiful in many places. I'll took my sons to the yukon. Looked at a vast forest on rolling hills as far as the eye can see. Stunted old growth pine.. gorgeous. Thank you again, Tom. I'm always happy to see your reviews. Knowing that you're hanging in there with me? Appreciate it more than you know. I hope you have an awesome evening!
