Ghost
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Hard Truths"Biography/Supernatural
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
I loved that after writing this chapter you said that though your heart is heavy your soul is light because in revisiting the dark days you are able to turn on the light. Well done Lea
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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I loved that after writing this chapter you said that though your heart is heavy your soul is light because in revisiting the dark days you are able to turn on the light. Well done Lea
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023
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I'm so glad you like this one. There are some bright flashes along the way. I hope to show them too life is contradiction is it not? They say life's not fair get used to it. I hope you had the best night ever!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I like the additions you made very much. Seeing more facets to the diamond that comprises you is essential. It gives us a better insight into what strengthens your spirit, what upends it, what deletes it. You're a fascinating puzzle that we, your readers, are trying to put together.
I like the narrations between the chapters. It's like a kindness you offer before taking us into a terrifying place beside you. It changes the focus from us-reading-about-you to us-as-your-friend-experiencing-it-alongside-you. If we understand your demon on this level, we get the feeling as if we're possibly helping you to expunge it so you can come out on the other side of this book happy and whole.
Very cool way of doing this, Lea. It's a very unusual slant, and I feel as if it's working. It's like you're giving us a pep talk to agree help you to go down into this place with you.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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I like the additions you made very much. Seeing more facets to the diamond that comprises you is essential. It gives us a better insight into what strengthens your spirit, what upends it, what deletes it. You're a fascinating puzzle that we, your readers, are trying to put together.
I like the narrations between the chapters. It's like a kindness you offer before taking us into a terrifying place beside you. It changes the focus from us-reading-about-you to us-as-your-friend-experiencing-it-alongside-you. If we understand your demon on this level, we get the feeling as if we're possibly helping you to expunge it so you can come out on the other side of this book happy and whole.
Very cool way of doing this, Lea. It's a very unusual slant, and I feel as if it's working. It's like you're giving us a pep talk to agree help you to go down into this place with you.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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And while you do you are enforcing the feeling that I'm doing. What needs to be done, so thank you.
And that others respond to my story on Thursday. Prese about many things. These days you're a big part of that. You are friendship is important to me and I shall not forget! Thank u again!!
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Your friendship matters to me, as well. It's a two-way street. xoxo
Comment from JT traveller
As I have said before, this cannot be easy for you. You, Lea, are a survivor, having endured more than most of us can ever imagine let alone tolerate and come through the other end. Write, heal, let those emotions spill forth. I spent years being angry, feeling rejected but it is my time now and also yours. Shine on beautiful light. Jacqueline xx
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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As I have said before, this cannot be easy for you. You, Lea, are a survivor, having endured more than most of us can ever imagine let alone tolerate and come through the other end. Write, heal, let those emotions spill forth. I spent years being angry, feeling rejected but it is my time now and also yours. Shine on beautiful light. Jacqueline xx
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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I'm truly sorry these things happen to you. I know the feeling of anger the rage the frustration shanti absolute hopelessness understand. You're completely right let's shine thank you for your Kind of review compassion and support it's gold thank you!
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Comment from JJJeeve
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this chapter. I felt the added details even about the school and forest really made the story come alive. One small suggestion would be to change the 'i' to a capital. Keep going!
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading this chapter. I felt the added details even about the school and forest really made the story come alive. One small suggestion would be to change the 'i' to a capital. Keep going!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much for your kind review. I appreciate it a lot.
Your compassion and support is important and that to me is gold!
The chapter's part of the auto bill listed name above. You're welcome to read if you wish. I thank you very much again for your review. And your kind thoughts have an awesome day.
Comment from Jim Wile
I'm beginning to understand the dynamic between you and your younger sister now. It seems like you've gained some good insight into her motivations now that you are an adult. Did you show as much understanding at the time, or were you two always at odds with each other? So sad that your stepfather seemed to be fostering the ill will between the two of you. I'm curious what your relationship is like with her today?
It certainly does seem like your stepfather was goading you to strike out--probably so it would give him an excuse for beating you again.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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I'm beginning to understand the dynamic between you and your younger sister now. It seems like you've gained some good insight into her motivations now that you are an adult. Did you show as much understanding at the time, or were you two always at odds with each other? So sad that your stepfather seemed to be fostering the ill will between the two of you. I'm curious what your relationship is like with her today?
It certainly does seem like your stepfather was goading you to strike out--probably so it would give him an excuse for beating you again.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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At the time we were children. I knew and I didn't know. It was very a rock in a hard place. Stand in the way of someone and get punched out or don't and get punched out.
My sister and I remained at odds jealousy bloomed. She had one social idea. I had another. Their was hard pain between us. It's palpable, but I'll get into that a little later on. Jim. I want you to know how much your support means to me. Your compassion and your insight. I was scared to put the first chapter out. And yet it receives the response. It did and gave me strength to carry on. And every time I write a chapter. It's like OK that 1's washed away. Now I cannot think about it or not. Remember it or just call it resolved in my own mind. Thank you again I hope you have the best day!
Comment from BethShelby
A lot this post, you've posted before, but it probably should be repeated for us to realize what an impression this man made on your life. I think he knew nothing of what a decent father-in-law should do. It was horrible to pit sister against each other and try foster jealousy. You needed to be allies and no enemies. I'm surprised he did cause serious injuries that might have left your scared in physical ways as well as emotional. You are telling your story in a compelling way.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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A lot this post, you've posted before, but it probably should be repeated for us to realize what an impression this man made on your life. I think he knew nothing of what a decent father-in-law should do. It was horrible to pit sister against each other and try foster jealousy. You needed to be allies and no enemies. I'm surprised he did cause serious injuries that might have left your scared in physical ways as well as emotional. You are telling your story in a compelling way.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Thank you, thank you again. I appreciate your comment. Beth happy to receive them as always. I decided that 1 chapter was too large so I split it up and extrapolated on some of the points. I wished to make I am pleased and happy. Let your hanging in there and reading along. It's very satisfying in a way and uplifting too. Thank you again I hope your day is great!
Comment from JSD
I can read it and I just feel so sorry and it makes me burn with anger for the treatment you received. In a Hollywood movie he would die a horrible death, but it is difficult to think that that is just reducing yourself to his level.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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I can read it and I just feel so sorry and it makes me burn with anger for the treatment you received. In a Hollywood movie he would die a horrible death, but it is difficult to think that that is just reducing yourself to his level.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Well, I'm happy to say I will never ever be that I learned from him. What not to do not necessarily what to do? But definitely what not to do so I can never get resolution or retribution but I must resolve it and go through it someway and so this is The vehicle to do it thank you again John thank you so much!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Dear Lea, this is a superb, exceptionally well expressed story which I found absolutely riveting. It conveyed such great emotion - terror, anger, trepidation, extreme unhappiness etc - while striking a strong and palpable nerve in your reader. You're expressing yourself with impressive clarity now and it feels like you're emptying your soul, leaving nothing behind. I love your reference to 'ink black' (so evocative and a touch of Dylan Thomas) but, from a writing point of view, I wouldn't use it again in such close proximity as it loses some of its impact. This is trivial in the great scheme of think and was the only 'fault' I found. An exceptional piece! Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Dear Lea, this is a superb, exceptionally well expressed story which I found absolutely riveting. It conveyed such great emotion - terror, anger, trepidation, extreme unhappiness etc - while striking a strong and palpable nerve in your reader. You're expressing yourself with impressive clarity now and it feels like you're emptying your soul, leaving nothing behind. I love your reference to 'ink black' (so evocative and a touch of Dylan Thomas) but, from a writing point of view, I wouldn't use it again in such close proximity as it loses some of its impact. This is trivial in the great scheme of think and was the only 'fault' I found. An exceptional piece! Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 09-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Debbie, your insightful reviews are astonishing really and well appreciated, you and our mutual friend are amazing. Two great ladies with a talent far more than I could hope to achieve. Compassion and support and complete understanding by yourself our friend and others is amazing, and so valued more than gold to me. Thank you for this wonderful review. I'm gonna go ahead and looked at that change. You suggested and once again thank you for bearing with me and reading this tale of my life and the others chapters going forward. All the best to you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness Lea, this is such a sad post and I was shocked that you were punched in the face until you were bleeding. Your Stepfather was a wholly inadequate man with hate in his heart and you were at the mercy of a bully who is also a coward and can only pick on small children. I expect you have grown to be quite strong after your experiences growing up Lea. I hope you are enjoying a good life now after the horror of your childhood. I also hope that you have kept your faith and know that there are good men in the world who are loving fathers and you were unlucky to have been living with a predator. Your post is honest and terrifying, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Oh my goodness Lea, this is such a sad post and I was shocked that you were punched in the face until you were bleeding. Your Stepfather was a wholly inadequate man with hate in his heart and you were at the mercy of a bully who is also a coward and can only pick on small children. I expect you have grown to be quite strong after your experiences growing up Lea. I hope you are enjoying a good life now after the horror of your childhood. I also hope that you have kept your faith and know that there are good men in the world who are loving fathers and you were unlucky to have been living with a predator. Your post is honest and terrifying, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Dolly, I appreciate your in depth and insightful review I very much do. Yes, I can look back on it now and see it from a different light. Having been educated on the subject, both in life and in University I can look at it from a different perspective. Although I must keep myself focused that I don't go down the lane. A pain although I do cry while writing this. It's not a bad cry, it's more of a letting go I appreciate your kindness more than anything. Thank you for that so very much!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This was pretty serious prose in nature. I thought it flowed well.
Just a couple of suggestions:
"Your sister tells me you've been at my desk stealing sugar."
I would put a comma after desk, since 'stealing sugar' is a dependent clause.
I quickly responded, "No I was
I would put a comma after No, because it is an interjection.
Thank you for posting.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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This was pretty serious prose in nature. I thought it flowed well.
Just a couple of suggestions:
"Your sister tells me you've been at my desk stealing sugar."
I would put a comma after desk, since 'stealing sugar' is a dependent clause.
I quickly responded, "No I was
I would put a comma after No, because it is an interjection.
Thank you for posting.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Hi! Thank you so much, I've gone ahead and made those corrections. I appreciate having pointed these things out I very much appreciate that As it can only make my work better So thank you again! And I thank you too for your review. I appreciate you hanging in there and reading some of the toughest stuff I've had to write, but it's a must to do. Thank you again for your review your kind comments your suggestions. I hope you have the best day!
