Guided by Faith
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Comment from lancellot
A well written chapter. It is good to see the religion aspect reenter. And yes, I know these are all good-natured people from a small town.
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Sooner or later, you may want to explain why Peggy is chasing Seth, like she's dumb, has no self-respect, or there aren't any other men in town. This isn't a complaint. I know I've asked why Seth likes Emma so much too and said we don't 'see' a reason. Also, does it fit Seth's character not to be more direct?
Ben said, "Ms. Emma, I use my phone as an alarm, and it blocks all my calls during the night."
"Good point. So does mine. Let me think about that."
- Sorry, but this makes no sense. Even if a phone blocked all calls during the night. It would have nothing to do with an alarm, and you would simply turn off that feature. Most teens are calling and texting all night anyway.
Seth held up his phone. "I have a solution. I have my police phone. I get calls on it often during the night. I'll give you that number.
-So does every phone. I would remove all this during revisions.
Also, good foreshadowing. I'm guessing Emma's dad saved her from this ex-boyfriend. Are you sure you want more of Emma being a victim?
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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A well written chapter. It is good to see the religion aspect reenter. And yes, I know these are all good-natured people from a small town.
notes:
Sooner or later, you may want to explain why Peggy is chasing Seth, like she's dumb, has no self-respect, or there aren't any other men in town. This isn't a complaint. I know I've asked why Seth likes Emma so much too and said we don't 'see' a reason. Also, does it fit Seth's character not to be more direct?
Ben said, "Ms. Emma, I use my phone as an alarm, and it blocks all my calls during the night."
"Good point. So does mine. Let me think about that."
- Sorry, but this makes no sense. Even if a phone blocked all calls during the night. It would have nothing to do with an alarm, and you would simply turn off that feature. Most teens are calling and texting all night anyway.
Seth held up his phone. "I have a solution. I have my police phone. I get calls on it often during the night. I'll give you that number.
-So does every phone. I would remove all this during revisions.
Also, good foreshadowing. I'm guessing Emma's dad saved her from this ex-boyfriend. Are you sure you want more of Emma being a victim?
Comment Written 08-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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A few posts ago, I mentioned that Seth suspects Peggy is after men with money. I guess you forgot that. I have a phone that I used as an alarm. When I retired, I don't need an alarm any longer and have turned it off, but the stupid phone still insists on blocking my calls during those hours. I figured if mine did it so would other. Just a thought. Thank you for dropping by and reviewing this post. I'm sorry you had to review it with no money attached.
Comment from estory
In this chapter we see Seth making a clear choice for Emma over Ms. Barton, and we also see Seth and Emma working together as a team to make a difference with the young people in the community. I like the dialogue, very natural, very realistic, we see the concerns of the teens, their energy and hope, along with the problems. estory
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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In this chapter we see Seth making a clear choice for Emma over Ms. Barton, and we also see Seth and Emma working together as a team to make a difference with the young people in the community. I like the dialogue, very natural, very realistic, we see the concerns of the teens, their energy and hope, along with the problems. estory
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from Sanku
I have been away on a pilgrimage .So I missed this chapter.
I enjoyed both the the classes and community efforts.Life in a small town is really beautiful.the fund raising and mutual help plan are all so heartening .
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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I have been away on a pilgrimage .So I missed this chapter.
I enjoyed both the the classes and community efforts.Life in a small town is really beautiful.the fund raising and mutual help plan are all so heartening .
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I miss the small-town mentality. I feel we need to get back to it.
Comment from Pam (respa)
Thanks for sharing the artwork, notes, and story, barbara. I remember the song and often hum or sing it to this day. Why didn't your dad like the idea of being a veterinarian?
You did a great job with this chapter. It flows well from scene to scene. It picks up well after Peggy said she was going to be in the class, but of course, she had other ideas afterwards that
were ignored with a different suggestion from Seth.
A very good discussion with Emma and the students. She relates to them well, and they respond to her very well, too. They have some good ideas for fundraisers and activities, as well as a way to share their concerns, knowing they will be private.
This will be very good for Emma and do a lot for her confidence. I can already see differences in her. Well done! I'm glad you had a good vacation, too.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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Thanks for sharing the artwork, notes, and story, barbara. I remember the song and often hum or sing it to this day. Why didn't your dad like the idea of being a veterinarian?
You did a great job with this chapter. It flows well from scene to scene. It picks up well after Peggy said she was going to be in the class, but of course, she had other ideas afterwards that
were ignored with a different suggestion from Seth.
A very good discussion with Emma and the students. She relates to them well, and they respond to her very well, too. They have some good ideas for fundraisers and activities, as well as a way to share their concerns, knowing they will be private.
This will be very good for Emma and do a lot for her confidence. I can already see differences in her. Well done! I'm glad you had a good vacation, too.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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My dad said veterinarians were a male occupation. Boy was he wrong. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome. My mother's dad didn't think girls needed to go to college. He told my mother she was wasting her time sending me. My grandparents were part of the depression era. I was very fortunate to have the parents I did.
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My parents were raised during the depression. Dad planned for me to go to college, but he was paying and felt I should stick with women's occupations, teachers, nurses, and secretaries.
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Thanks for sharing. I decided I wanted to be a teacher in the fourth grade. It sounds strange, but it's true.
Comment from lyenochka
It's good that Emma came in just in the nick of time to get Seth released from Peggy. I like how the teens came up with ideas and worked together. It's daring for Emma to give her personal phone number like that. It's good that Seth can help.
I was a little confused who was talking to whom in ""Looks that way." Seth saw Pastor Pat in the hallway. "You might check my room. " I guess Seth left the room and then asked Pastor Pat to address Peggy?
I didn't understand why Seth said "He grinned. "We'll have ham," when Emma said "Except potatoes."
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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It's good that Emma came in just in the nick of time to get Seth released from Peggy. I like how the teens came up with ideas and worked together. It's daring for Emma to give her personal phone number like that. It's good that Seth can help.
I was a little confused who was talking to whom in ""Looks that way." Seth saw Pastor Pat in the hallway. "You might check my room. " I guess Seth left the room and then asked Pastor Pat to address Peggy?
I didn't understand why Seth said "He grinned. "We'll have ham," when Emma said "Except potatoes."
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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In an earlier post. Emma ate the potatoes. It's the only thing she felt like eating after the accident. I'll recheck the earlier issue. Thank you for bringing them to my attention. I always appreciate help.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Oh goodness, how did I miss a chapter? Am I out of order?
Anyways, this one is great! Ol Seth is getting a lot of female attention. My my my.
Not sure about the comma here:
Emma nodded. "I know Chief Carter well enough to know, he's good to his word."
Great addition!
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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Oh goodness, how did I miss a chapter? Am I out of order?
Anyways, this one is great! Ol Seth is getting a lot of female attention. My my my.
Not sure about the comma here:
Emma nodded. "I know Chief Carter well enough to know, he's good to his word."
Great addition!
D
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the catch. To be honest I'm not exactly sure how that comma got there. I am guessing gremlins. LOL It's gone.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A lovely, fun chapter here with Seth and Emma relaxing in each other's company once they have another more neutral focus with the children. Peggy is still a problem though and I enjoy her disruptiveness - more please:) Thanks for sharing, Barbara. Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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A lovely, fun chapter here with Seth and Emma relaxing in each other's company once they have another more neutral focus with the children. Peggy is still a problem though and I enjoy her disruptiveness - more please:) Thanks for sharing, Barbara. Debbie
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Barbara,
thanks for the information about the Apostles Creed, I wasn't aware of that. I love that I learn so much about so many different things on this site, in large part because so many members were teachers. I thought it was fascinating that you were inspired to go into teaching because of the song. Well done gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Hello Barbara,
thanks for the information about the Apostles Creed, I wasn't aware of that. I love that I learn so much about so many different things on this site, in large part because so many members were teachers. I thought it was fascinating that you were inspired to go into teaching because of the song. Well done gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from Paul Manton
Great, Barbara. Your characters are so sympathetic, it makes the story more enjoyable to read. We are 'on their side' - so when the fly in the ointment, Peggy, turns up, we feel a natural protectiveness towards Seth, in particular. In fact, Peggy has become a palpable threat to the entire venture, being such a loose cannon.
A good, realistic discussion of 'The Apostles' Creed', with the universal sticking point on the word 'catholic' - I say it every Sunday and I still dwell on the word! And after the theological input, another 'realistic' chunk on safeguarding, with all the practical issues of anonymity observed.
A nice input on the lack of a guitar gives the volunteer on the piano; that sounded like a true event. In fact, the whole piece feels 'verismo', which is what makes it so good.
Thank you, Barbara.
Paul
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Great, Barbara. Your characters are so sympathetic, it makes the story more enjoyable to read. We are 'on their side' - so when the fly in the ointment, Peggy, turns up, we feel a natural protectiveness towards Seth, in particular. In fact, Peggy has become a palpable threat to the entire venture, being such a loose cannon.
A good, realistic discussion of 'The Apostles' Creed', with the universal sticking point on the word 'catholic' - I say it every Sunday and I still dwell on the word! And after the theological input, another 'realistic' chunk on safeguarding, with all the practical issues of anonymity observed.
A nice input on the lack of a guitar gives the volunteer on the piano; that sounded like a true event. In fact, the whole piece feels 'verismo', which is what makes it so good.
Thank you, Barbara.
Paul
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your encouragement.
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Welcome, Barbara.
Comment from jmdg1954
Barbara.
I found this to be one of the best, more interesting chapters in the book.
A lot hit accomplished and much has still to be resolved. Little by little those two are getting close, while the town sl__, is still trying, though more effectively shown the door
Thanks for posting.
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Barbara.
I found this to be one of the best, more interesting chapters in the book.
A lot hit accomplished and much has still to be resolved. Little by little those two are getting close, while the town sl__, is still trying, though more effectively shown the door
Thanks for posting.
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
