The Leftovers
Never bet with an actress13 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Hey Rachelle,
This story deserved the win! Your characters are round and fleshed out with great attention to details. I love a smart female character, and yours is smart and damn clever. I laughed in several spots of the plot.
Per usual, I give 6's to the writings I wished I had conceived. You, my lady, can tell a fine tale with brilliant wit. Was a visual not allowed?
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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Hey Rachelle,
This story deserved the win! Your characters are round and fleshed out with great attention to details. I love a smart female character, and yours is smart and damn clever. I laughed in several spots of the plot.
Per usual, I give 6's to the writings I wished I had conceived. You, my lady, can tell a fine tale with brilliant wit. Was a visual not allowed?
Comment Written 29-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2023
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It was, and I had one, but the system wasn't allowing for it that night, and I nearly missed the deadline, so I just passed!
Thanks for this wonderful review and for the extra star, as well. xoxo
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, I've heard them good ole boys called a lot of things over many years, but leftovers is a new name on me, but it's fitting. Revenge sex puts the mind in special place. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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Well, I've heard them good ole boys called a lot of things over many years, but leftovers is a new name on me, but it's fitting. Revenge sex puts the mind in special place. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023
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Doesn't it, though? What do you think: it is a better place than make-up sex or not? Inquiring minds want to know!
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LOL. Yes, I'd say, revenge sex seems to have more ump to it.
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Yes, more feral...to make it so much more memorable.
Comment from Andrea Kepple
The story really flows from the characters in the story. Everything that happens feels real and true to the character who is initiating the action and in the way the characters react.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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The story really flows from the characters in the story. Everything that happens feels real and true to the character who is initiating the action and in the way the characters react.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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Wow, what a validating review! Thank you very, very much, Andrea. Very much appreciated.
Comment from JSD
Great piece of writing. Surely a winner. Your style is perfect Americana. The dialogue authentic and reveals the characters in full. Your description is atmospheric and convincing well done and good luck!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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Great piece of writing. Surely a winner. Your style is perfect Americana. The dialogue authentic and reveals the characters in full. Your description is atmospheric and convincing well done and good luck!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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Well, isn't THIS a most delightful review! THANKS very, very much! xo
Comment from LJbutterfly
Haha! This story is GOOD. I felt like I was on a rollercoaster, trying to figure out who was who and who was telling the story. Every word was riveting, without extra fluff, and moved the story forward at a fast pace. I didn't have to read a lot of unnecessary words before you told me what happened. You put me in the action with vivid descriptions and authentic dialogue. Plus, in the end, the lady won. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Haha! This story is GOOD. I felt like I was on a rollercoaster, trying to figure out who was who and who was telling the story. Every word was riveting, without extra fluff, and moved the story forward at a fast pace. I didn't have to read a lot of unnecessary words before you told me what happened. You put me in the action with vivid descriptions and authentic dialogue. Plus, in the end, the lady won. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Well, of course I LOVE this review!! Thank you very, very much. I couldn't appreciate it more. xo
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Form a line, boys.
Nicely written. Kept my attention.
Diesel and Lee-Lee would say she cheated, offering free, wild sex.
The Shark Shack, early on, to establish themselves - You don't need the comma after 'early on'.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Form a line, boys.
Nicely written. Kept my attention.
Diesel and Lee-Lee would say she cheated, offering free, wild sex.
The Shark Shack, early on, to establish themselves - You don't need the comma after 'early on'.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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thanks very much for the nice review and the eagle-eye edits! Very much appreciated.
Comment from GregoryCody
Wow this is intense. I love the refrain. Also great word choices. Guffaw etc.
You have a VERY strong voice. Literally I feel like I hear a voice when I read. Very cool. Unique.
This is a GOOD piece and very hot ;)
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Wow this is intense. I love the refrain. Also great word choices. Guffaw etc.
You have a VERY strong voice. Literally I feel like I hear a voice when I read. Very cool. Unique.
This is a GOOD piece and very hot ;)
Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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I totally appreciate this. Thank you!!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Well, I mean really! What man have you ever known who hasn't responded to an invitation to sex?! Even the ones who like to watch the game will take a 3-minute break to get laid.
Rachelle, wasn't this a contest? Did you enter it? I don't see any indication here.
Anyway, very clever, young lady:-)
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Well, I mean really! What man have you ever known who hasn't responded to an invitation to sex?! Even the ones who like to watch the game will take a 3-minute break to get laid.
Rachelle, wasn't this a contest? Did you enter it? I don't see any indication here.
Anyway, very clever, young lady:-)
xo
Pam
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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It is a contest. Hmmm. Now I'll need to go check whether or not something has gone wrong! Thanks for the head's up.
And you're right, Pam: no man I've ever known has ever said no to a sex party!! But the 'three-minute break' reference. HAHAHAHAHA.
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I wonder if it's because I went to your profile and found it there instead of on opening page or contest page?
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Yep. That's exactly it.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
firstly, many thanks for entering.
I think you skinned this just about in terms of word count and content. I think you managed to circumvent the leftovers part almost entirely with only about 170 words or so referencing that part of it - luckily though I'm not monitoring this contest!
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Hi there,
firstly, many thanks for entering.
I think you skinned this just about in terms of word count and content. I think you managed to circumvent the leftovers part almost entirely with only about 170 words or so referencing that part of it - luckily though I'm not monitoring this contest!
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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In this case, the Leftovers were more like the dessert, I'm thinking...
Thanks for the review.
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So, now that everything's over, what exactly did you mean with your reference to the proportion expended to the "leftovers" part and my being lucky that you weren't on the monitoring committee? Was there some regulation about percentages needed that I missed in the rules section? Inquiring contestants want to know!
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Nope there was no regulation as such but I just felt that the bulk of the story had nothing to do with the prompt / competition. In fact, if those bookends were removed it wouldn't really have changed anything.
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And yet, the members here thought those bookends were pertinent enough to be worthy of a win. Go figure! Guess they understand that books on their own aren't exactly stable enough to be sustained. But with some stability fore and aft, a solid, complete package is there for everyone's enjoyment.
Anyway, not to worry, Giraffmange. From now on, I'll check who's the sponsor before deigning to enter another of your contests. I don't want to tread all over your lofty esteem with my substandard fare.
Kindest regards right back atcha, as always. xoxoxo
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Well, joint win and by a single vote. Your analogy doesn't really work here, either as books do stand on their own and don't come with bookends.
I never said the story was substandard. If it was it wouldn't have got the rating I gave.
The point was your story wasn't really about what was intended. It may technically fit but was not in the spirit of the competition. I'll just make sure any further comps I make are more robust.
Your choice to enter or not. Doesn't bother me either way. It was just my opinion..
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Your opinion is one thing. Lots of people offer opinions here, and I listen to them gratefully and take them to heart. Your "opinions," though, always come with a knife edge that I've never much understood. I find your smugness and passive aggression contemptible and not at all in keeping with someone with your talent. As the saying goes, "You're so much better than that." It presents as insecure. What a waste of you.
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A knife edge would be your opinion and shows your own insecurities.
If you think my opinions are such look out for the real world. Done with this now.
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No, knife-edge is a true and valid assessment. As a teacher, I know when a criticism is constructive and when it's made to bite. Even as a human, I would recognize it. But as an educator, I am especially aware of it. I choose my words carefully as a teacher, just as do you, as a writer. So, as Judge Judy says, "Don't pee on my leg and tell me it's raining."
And your being "done with it now" is music to my ears. Thank gawd.
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Lol
Comment from RodG
Oh, I enjoyed your clever, witty narrator. I have never read a story about a female process server before. I think Newbie should become a recurrent character in future posts. I really am impressed with how you set the scene and characterized her through her actions and dialog. Rod
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Oh, I enjoyed your clever, witty narrator. I have never read a story about a female process server before. I think Newbie should become a recurrent character in future posts. I really am impressed with how you set the scene and characterized her through her actions and dialog. Rod
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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I appreciate this very, very much!
