Guided by Faith
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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Barbara,
I'm glad to see Emma is making a bit of a recovery, and is being monitored by Seth and Jake.
Interesting about Elliot offering so much to compensate Emma for the accident. Looks like Daddy is used to bailing him out.
Great conversational style of writing.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Hi Barbara,
I'm glad to see Emma is making a bit of a recovery, and is being monitored by Seth and Jake.
Interesting about Elliot offering so much to compensate Emma for the accident. Looks like Daddy is used to bailing him out.
Great conversational style of writing.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 08-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Elliot is used to getting Marc out of trouble, but... I think he's seen the errors of his ways.
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A hard thing for a parent, I'm afraid!
Comment from Pam (respa)
I enjoyed reading this chapter except for George's attitude, although he seemed a little more agreeable as he listened to Emma and her expectations about the car, insurance, etc. He probably secretly wished his son was more like that. I think he admired Emma's determination, and she didn't want fancy cars, etc.
I was afraid she would have trouble doing this, but she was her usual self, very polite in answering questions and sharing her ideas about what George was saying. I like how you handled it.
I hope that Emma can get out of the bathtub herself!! I have to admire how she has matured, and intends to pay her own way.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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I enjoyed reading this chapter except for George's attitude, although he seemed a little more agreeable as he listened to Emma and her expectations about the car, insurance, etc. He probably secretly wished his son was more like that. I think he admired Emma's determination, and she didn't want fancy cars, etc.
I was afraid she would have trouble doing this, but she was her usual self, very polite in answering questions and sharing her ideas about what George was saying. I like how you handled it.
I hope that Emma can get out of the bathtub herself!! I have to admire how she has matured, and intends to pay her own way.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, your writing seems structurally fine. It may because the people in your small town are 'very, very nice' or some other reason, but this chapter seems odd.
notes:
"Emma was in a car accident yesterday. She's at home recovering. I'd be glad to help anyway I can."
-Why would George tell him that? And how does Mr. Elliot even know where she lives?
"Sheriff Baker, why are you here? Aren't you a little old to be a suitor for Ms. Winters?"
- No. A man would never say this, especially not a wealthy man. Their age isn't even far apart anyway.
"Emma's doctor said she shouldn't be left alone. I've been a family friend since she was little.
- Again, why would they (he) tell him this? Why? There's no need, because the reader already knows. Also, the first thing out of the Sheriff's mouth should be, "Leave, you are witness tampering. A crime."
Emma asked, "I'm not sure why you're here."
-What? She is smart. Of course she knows why he is there. To fix things for his boy.
Can you tell me what happened?"
- Again. Why? He is clearly not there to help her. Why talk to him?
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2023
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Hmm, your writing seems structurally fine. It may because the people in your small town are 'very, very nice' or some other reason, but this chapter seems odd.
notes:
"Emma was in a car accident yesterday. She's at home recovering. I'd be glad to help anyway I can."
-Why would George tell him that? And how does Mr. Elliot even know where she lives?
"Sheriff Baker, why are you here? Aren't you a little old to be a suitor for Ms. Winters?"
- No. A man would never say this, especially not a wealthy man. Their age isn't even far apart anyway.
"Emma's doctor said she shouldn't be left alone. I've been a family friend since she was little.
- Again, why would they (he) tell him this? Why? There's no need, because the reader already knows. Also, the first thing out of the Sheriff's mouth should be, "Leave, you are witness tampering. A crime."
Emma asked, "I'm not sure why you're here."
-What? She is smart. Of course she knows why he is there. To fix things for his boy.
Can you tell me what happened?"
- Again. Why? He is clearly not there to help her. Why talk to him?
Comment Written 06-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2023
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A few thoughts. People don't all think the same. Thank you for the kind review.
"Emma was in a car accident yesterday. She's at home recovering. I'd be glad to help anyway I can." Why would George tell him that? (Keith is taking not George. Keith is her dad.)
And how does Mr. Elliot even know where she lives? (In a small town everybody knows where everybody lives.)
A man would never say this, especially not a wealthy man. (A wealthy opinionated man who thinks he's above all else. I have heard some strange things come out of their mouths.)
Emma asked, "I'm not sure why you're here." (yes, she knows but is pretending she doesn't know. I've done that often. It gets one farther.)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I hope George does the right thing and covers all costs. He seems like he will. I still don't trust him, after all, he is mark's father. Well done. Guided by Faith is one of my favorite books. I look forward the next one.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2023
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I hope George does the right thing and covers all costs. He seems like he will. I still don't trust him, after all, he is mark's father. Well done. Guided by Faith is one of my favorite books. I look forward the next one.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouragement.
Comment from Wendy G
A well written chapter. The fact that shhe prefers a car to be within her range of affordability for upkeep shows her common sense. Mr Elliot needs to teach his son to take responsibility for hs own actions however, not be always around to bail him out. I did wonder that Emma wants to be independent of her parents yet accepts a man being in her home, whether that was inconsistent with her somewhat prudish character. Most people would think one of her parents should stay with her for a few days. Just a thought.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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A well written chapter. The fact that shhe prefers a car to be within her range of affordability for upkeep shows her common sense. Mr Elliot needs to teach his son to take responsibility for hs own actions however, not be always around to bail him out. I did wonder that Emma wants to be independent of her parents yet accepts a man being in her home, whether that was inconsistent with her somewhat prudish character. Most people would think one of her parents should stay with her for a few days. Just a thought.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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She gets upset with Seth always wanting to be there to help. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
So, Emma has a flaw. She doesn't plan ahead and realize her limitations when injured. She did very well with Mr. Elliot, refusing to take a car she couldn't afford to maintain. I am wondering how the two men will get her out of the tub if she can't stand up.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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So, Emma has a flaw. She doesn't plan ahead and realize her limitations when injured. She did very well with Mr. Elliot, refusing to take a car she couldn't afford to maintain. I am wondering how the two men will get her out of the tub if she can't stand up.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Barbara,
this installment of your story is a very enjoyable read.
It's amazing how small town people can get entangled certain ways.
I**I love the first part of your story, what you write about God's guidance and protection. It hit home with me.
You tell a story we'll, especially your blocking. (I always know where your characters are).
Good luck in the contest, Barbara.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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Barbara,
this installment of your story is a very enjoyable read.
It's amazing how small town people can get entangled certain ways.
I**I love the first part of your story, what you write about God's guidance and protection. It hit home with me.
You tell a story we'll, especially your blocking. (I always know where your characters are).
Good luck in the contest, Barbara.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 05-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Barbara,
I started to read this but realized, I need to start at the beginning. What I read was great, but it's hard to get started in the middle of a story. When I get some more time, I'll try to catch up.
Blessings,
tom
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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Hello Barbara,
I started to read this but realized, I need to start at the beginning. What I read was great, but it's hard to get started in the middle of a story. When I get some more time, I'll try to catch up.
Blessings,
tom
Comment Written 05-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was very clever. And saying she didn't want the expensive car, but a more economical one showed she wasn't the type to make money out of her accident with his son. Now she's getting a new car. Well done! I'm really enjoying your story, Barbara. :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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That was very clever. And saying she didn't want the expensive car, but a more economical one showed she wasn't the type to make money out of her accident with his son. Now she's getting a new car. Well done! I'm really enjoying your story, Barbara. :)) Sandra
Comment Written 05-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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Thank you for this kind review.
Comment from JSD
As usual I can see little wrong with this. Maybe I'm not fussy enough? I enjoy getting to know your characters and the dialogue is so authentic, helping to scoot me along with the narrative. Most enjoyable.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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As usual I can see little wrong with this. Maybe I'm not fussy enough? I enjoy getting to know your characters and the dialogue is so authentic, helping to scoot me along with the narrative. Most enjoyable.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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LOL Thank you for the encouragement.
