Germs
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Comment from GWHARGIS
How very true your piece was. But I guess He had his reasons. Balance out life and death. Most of the time it's controlled until mankind gets involved. Great piece. Gretchen
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How very true your piece was. But I guess He had his reasons. Balance out life and death. Most of the time it's controlled until mankind gets involved. Great piece. Gretchen
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
Comment from Eleri
Sorry but 'decided' has three syllables so your first line has six syllables rather than the required five. I am sure that you can change the poem before the contest cut-off date though as this is a great idea for a 5-7-5 piece. You could make your first line something like 'Why did God decide' instead perhaps
Eleri
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Sorry but 'decided' has three syllables so your first line has six syllables rather than the required five. I am sure that you can change the poem before the contest cut-off date though as this is a great idea for a 5-7-5 piece. You could make your first line something like 'Why did God decide' instead perhaps
Eleri
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Whoopsies! You?re totally right, I don?t know how I missed that! Thank you so much!
Comment from JSD
A fascinating and intelligent little 5-7-5. An clever idea that is summed up beautifully in a mere seventeen syllables, and the link/balance is carefully made. Well done and good luck.
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A fascinating and intelligent little 5-7-5. An clever idea that is summed up beautifully in a mere seventeen syllables, and the link/balance is carefully made. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
