Comment from
Dolly'sPoems
You make death sound so pleasurable here Michelle, I have only ever witnessed peaceful deaths of loved ones, we hope that it is a tranquil time, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
It is not the dying it is the after death. I have been with several and it can be with peace or distress. This is about the hope of a afterlife of peace.
Comment from
JSD
Neatly presented and some effective imagery here. I still think you could suggest more with fewer words - less is more - but your heart is clearly speaking through this and I admire the way you have written it all down.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
I made some changes and I think I know what you mean. Thank you for the suggestion.