Passion For Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Precious"Book 3 of assorted poems
6 total reviews
Comment from thoughtgame2
there really is no match to the brilliance I see and feel in this work young lady you have behooved me once again with your inner truths. and for that a thank you very much. furthermore, the picture is one straight out of memory and placed in time for ever by you...excellent job. Enjoyed.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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there really is no match to the brilliance I see and feel in this work young lady you have behooved me once again with your inner truths. and for that a thank you very much. furthermore, the picture is one straight out of memory and placed in time for ever by you...excellent job. Enjoyed.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, I'm sorry it took me so long to get back. I was away for a while but I have returned once again enjoying the site I look forward to reading yours. Thank you so much for reading mine. I'm glad you like you have the most amazing evening!
Comment from Isabel Fontes
The poem is truly impressive, with its words expertly intertwined to create a seamless flow from line to line.
The poem conveyed both clarity and darkness to me, which I appreciated.
It is Very well written creatively; it takes us on an imaginative journey. Best of luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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The poem is truly impressive, with its words expertly intertwined to create a seamless flow from line to line.
The poem conveyed both clarity and darkness to me, which I appreciated.
It is Very well written creatively; it takes us on an imaginative journey. Best of luck with the contest!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Isabel once again you give a fine review. I very much appreciate it! You're kind words and you're inside are always period thank you again and I hope you have the most amazing day!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is such an interesting poem.
I think the strongest line/image was this one:
The marine sky kisses graceful mountain shoulders with a whisper.
(although being an artist, I also kept debating on whether it would be stronger as 'aquamarine' or 'ultramarine' since there were no other sea-related images after 'marine.')
Second strongest image: Blue buds of serenity burst amidst a pond of crystal comfort. (The second use of blue here made me think you might consider aquamarine or ultramarine in that first line.)
The last line could be taken in more than one way, that life is like a dramatic ride, or maybe if you are a horse lover it refers to horses, etc.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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This is such an interesting poem.
I think the strongest line/image was this one:
The marine sky kisses graceful mountain shoulders with a whisper.
(although being an artist, I also kept debating on whether it would be stronger as 'aquamarine' or 'ultramarine' since there were no other sea-related images after 'marine.')
Second strongest image: Blue buds of serenity burst amidst a pond of crystal comfort. (The second use of blue here made me think you might consider aquamarine or ultramarine in that first line.)
The last line could be taken in more than one way, that life is like a dramatic ride, or maybe if you are a horse lover it refers to horses, etc.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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An experience I had some years back day dream or night dream I'm not sure. I was flying and I was holding a window frame through the window frame I could see a vast forest and for a split second I had all the answers to all the questions and then I woke and the answers were gone. All that remained was the memory of the window and vast forest. So I'm waiting for another moment like that... A moment to ride again. Thank you for your super review! Have a great night!
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I wish I can write like you. You are a talented poet. You can use so many personification, metaphors and alliterations to make it so poetic. I'm sure you have more moments like this to write about. Just look through your photos.
Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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I wish I can write like you. You are a talented poet. You can use so many personification, metaphors and alliterations to make it so poetic. I'm sure you have more moments like this to write about. Just look through your photos.
Well done.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thank you again. I am t truly honored!! ☺️✨🍻
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This poem starts out very clearly and in a logical presentation. Then I came to:
Jumps, slips and runs between fingers back to obscurity
and I couldn't work out what (or who) was jumping etc. I think it must be just me butI felt lost and that the poem had escaped me somehow.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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This poem starts out very clearly and in a logical presentation. Then I came to:
Jumps, slips and runs between fingers back to obscurity
and I couldn't work out what (or who) was jumping etc. I think it must be just me butI felt lost and that the poem had escaped me somehow.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thank you yes I did change the line to make it clearwr. Thank you for that! Your kind review is as always insightful and appreciated by me! Hope your summers going good! Thx!
Comment from JSD
Excellent free verse Lea. This is your strong suit I think. The imagery is superb as always and the vocabulary winds through this with fascinating beauty. I hope you do well in the competition.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Excellent free verse Lea. This is your strong suit I think. The imagery is superb as always and the vocabulary winds through this with fascinating beauty. I hope you do well in the competition.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thank you! Always happy to hear from you and thank you for your awesome review thanks again! Have an awesome evening!
