Tucker-The Resurrection (Part-8)
Tucker and Farnsworth meet again.29 total reviews
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hi again Ric! (Port Raid Review #2)
Wow, what a night! The Trocadero was exactly as you have described. It's a wonder I'm still alive, for real. Anyway, let me get back to work!
So, the bastard lives. Okay, fine. I should have figured as much. The line about the wind gust was very believable, so I don't claim there was any deus ex machina going on. Great job in the manner in which you brought him back. I did kind of like the image of a shattered jar of Grey Poupon, though.
Ric's Trifecta!
---"Flying fragments of glass, foam, feathers, and wood, among other things, resembled an interstellar vision of magnified cosmic dust under lights." --Feathers, though? Pillows? Very desriptive image! I saw this carnage very clearly.
---"A skip, hop, and a stagger, sharp rocks jabbed and sliced his tender exposed feet." --I giggled at this, because with my foot neuropathy, this is exactly how I walk over any gravel, accompanied by plenty of "oohs" and "ahhs."
---"A skinny shrimp in high-water trousers stood with his pistol in hand. And some lard-butt Neanderthal with bulldog jaws kept nudging him with his foot." --Haha! This was hilarious. It reminded me of Big and Little Enos from "Smokey and the Bandit." Remember them? Although, Little Enos was a dwarf, so maybe that is not the best comparison. But it does seem to be common when it comes to cops to pair the skinny guy with the fat guy.
---"Hyperphantasia" --I actually had to look this up, although I could have used my knowledge of word etymology to figure it out in hingsight. So, Tucker has this? That would be useful when recalling the scene in the last part when he walked in on Tammy changing. Anyway, there seems to be some kind of formatting issue above during this description, almost as if there is a line space that should not be there.
---"advertising his butt-puckered sense of shock." --"Butt-puckered" is another one of your masterful compound adjectives. Very vivid!
---"The flat discs scraped from the road with a shovel, paper thin, that fly like a Frisbee when you fling 'um." --So, I ran out of slots for your Trifecta by the time I got to this one. Consider it a bonus!
So, again, no rest for the weary. I don't know how much time went by between the hiding out among the HVACs on the roof and being woken up by machine-gun fire, but I hope Tucker at least had some downtime between commando assaults.
On to Part 8!
Eyepatch Patrick (and Pookie)
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Hi again Ric! (Port Raid Review #2)
Wow, what a night! The Trocadero was exactly as you have described. It's a wonder I'm still alive, for real. Anyway, let me get back to work!
So, the bastard lives. Okay, fine. I should have figured as much. The line about the wind gust was very believable, so I don't claim there was any deus ex machina going on. Great job in the manner in which you brought him back. I did kind of like the image of a shattered jar of Grey Poupon, though.
Ric's Trifecta!
---"Flying fragments of glass, foam, feathers, and wood, among other things, resembled an interstellar vision of magnified cosmic dust under lights." --Feathers, though? Pillows? Very desriptive image! I saw this carnage very clearly.
---"A skip, hop, and a stagger, sharp rocks jabbed and sliced his tender exposed feet." --I giggled at this, because with my foot neuropathy, this is exactly how I walk over any gravel, accompanied by plenty of "oohs" and "ahhs."
---"A skinny shrimp in high-water trousers stood with his pistol in hand. And some lard-butt Neanderthal with bulldog jaws kept nudging him with his foot." --Haha! This was hilarious. It reminded me of Big and Little Enos from "Smokey and the Bandit." Remember them? Although, Little Enos was a dwarf, so maybe that is not the best comparison. But it does seem to be common when it comes to cops to pair the skinny guy with the fat guy.
---"Hyperphantasia" --I actually had to look this up, although I could have used my knowledge of word etymology to figure it out in hingsight. So, Tucker has this? That would be useful when recalling the scene in the last part when he walked in on Tammy changing. Anyway, there seems to be some kind of formatting issue above during this description, almost as if there is a line space that should not be there.
---"advertising his butt-puckered sense of shock." --"Butt-puckered" is another one of your masterful compound adjectives. Very vivid!
---"The flat discs scraped from the road with a shovel, paper thin, that fly like a Frisbee when you fling 'um." --So, I ran out of slots for your Trifecta by the time I got to this one. Consider it a bonus!
So, again, no rest for the weary. I don't know how much time went by between the hiding out among the HVACs on the roof and being woken up by machine-gun fire, but I hope Tucker at least had some downtime between commando assaults.
On to Part 8!
Eyepatch Patrick (and Pookie)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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In case you haven't figured it out yet, which I'm sure you have, I don't know anything about plot devices, Latin or otherwise. I just put words on paper without format, structure, concept, or theme, and hope the characters can put a little life on the page. I'm just honored and appreciative that such a talented writer is willing to spend valuable time reading my disjointed fragments of thoughtless foolishness. And I just hope it can entertain you for a line or two. Thank you so much, Eyepatch Patrick, for another fantastic and kind review!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
i AM LOST. i TOUGHT tUCK WAS IN bIMINI, NOW YOU HAVE HIM IN mIAMI RUNNINNG BAREFOOTED ON FROZEN? GROUND. WHAT'S WITH THAT? chICAGO? AND WHAT'S WITH Hyperphantasia - THAT NOT A WORD. iF THIS WAS A TRUE STORY AND i KNEW IT WOULD BE, i WOULD HAVE BOUGHT STOCK IN DUCK (SIC) TAPE AND A SOLUTION TO GET THE GLUE FROM THE SKIN AFTER THEY ESCAPED ONCE MORE.
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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i AM LOST. i TOUGHT tUCK WAS IN bIMINI, NOW YOU HAVE HIM IN mIAMI RUNNINNG BAREFOOTED ON FROZEN? GROUND. WHAT'S WITH THAT? chICAGO? AND WHAT'S WITH Hyperphantasia - THAT NOT A WORD. iF THIS WAS A TRUE STORY AND i KNEW IT WOULD BE, i WOULD HAVE BOUGHT STOCK IN DUCK (SIC) TAPE AND A SOLUTION TO GET THE GLUE FROM THE SKIN AFTER THEY ESCAPED ONCE MORE.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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You're lost because you skipped part-7 and went straight to part-8. This thing is like going up steps, you need to step on every tread. Like with most all of my fictional stories, there is more truth in them than I'd ever be willing to explain. LOL. Much appreciated!
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I commented on 7 when it came out it seems so I don?t think I added tomit
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Keep up my man. They went from Chicago, to Bimini, to Miami trying to keep from getting killed. Hyperphantasia is a condition where people have extremely vivid mental imagery that rivals perceptual experience. Yes, Tucker's life never slowed down, which is why Farnsworth was willing to go whatever he could to get his assistance. He is 87 now, and still hasn't slowed down too much. He was at the Kentucky Derby two weeks ago, and this past Saturday he was at the Preakness Stakes at Pimlico Race Track in Maryland. This story probably has as much truth as fiction. But who would ever believe it. LOL.
Comment from L. Kalere
As usual, I'm running out of breath after reading one of your chapters. These 2 guys are more like Butch and Sundance than mortal enemies, each cheekier than the other. Lots of fun action with very colorful descriptions. I especially like the tongue in cheek approach. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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As usual, I'm running out of breath after reading one of your chapters. These 2 guys are more like Butch and Sundance than mortal enemies, each cheekier than the other. Lots of fun action with very colorful descriptions. I especially like the tongue in cheek approach. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much, Linda, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid are stiff competition, and I don't think there is a day that I don't remember them sitting on the edge of that cliff and the dialog before they jumped. I think I'd have personally fit well with those characters, and it's nice to think Tucker and Daniel might too. Much appreciated!
Comment from w.j.debi
You've been kind enough to drop by and read my work so I thought I'd check out what you are writing.
Talk about action-packed. Excellent descriptions mixed with a lot of shooting make this exciting. There is hardly room to breathe as Tucker runs from one trap to another. Both Tucker and Farnsworth are in quite a pickle. Great sensory images in the cabin. Yuck! Now how are they going to get out of this? I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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You've been kind enough to drop by and read my work so I thought I'd check out what you are writing.
Talk about action-packed. Excellent descriptions mixed with a lot of shooting make this exciting. There is hardly room to breathe as Tucker runs from one trap to another. Both Tucker and Farnsworth are in quite a pickle. Great sensory images in the cabin. Yuck! Now how are they going to get out of this? I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Debi, for your generous review and kind words. I enjoy reading your work, so I hope I can entertain you a little with my foolishness. I honestly don't know how I'm going to get them out of this pickle. Maybe it's time to start plotting and outlining. LOL. Much appreciated!
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Everyone writes their own way. I don't outline. I tried once and then found I didn't write the story because I knew how it ended. LOL.
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LOL. I tried to outline too. But I hated what I wrote. It was planned out and phony. :-)
Comment from Sally Law
***Virtual six***! OMG! I don't think I breathed until the end. I just loved this and think it's your best yet! I'm glad you left it open for more. What a wild ride!
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for your writing endeavors.
Sal :)) xo
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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***Virtual six***! OMG! I don't think I breathed until the end. I just loved this and think it's your best yet! I'm glad you left it open for more. What a wild ride!
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for your writing endeavors.
Sal :)) xo
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Sal, for your generous review and kind words. I've missed reading your work and seeing your smiling face pop up on my screen with your reviews. It's always a pleasure, my dear! :-)
Comment from JSD
Really punchy and exciting writing. Well done. Gripping throughout and you handle the action with real aplomb. Great description and authentic sounding dialogue. Great stuff.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Really punchy and exciting writing. Well done. Gripping throughout and you handle the action with real aplomb. Great description and authentic sounding dialogue. Great stuff.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, JSD, for your generous review and kind words. I'm glad you liked it. This is the first time I've seen your name pop up, but I'll be looking to read some of your posts. Much appreciated!
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To be honest, sometimes the length of a piece puts me off, but this drew me in.
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Yes, when people read to bank away Fan dollars to promote their own work, it's hard to spend too much time on one piece. I try to keep my posts somewhere between 1,200 and 1,500 words and I don't post often. Have a wonderful rest of your week!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Things are not looking too good.
Great action.
I had to wonder, though, about all the shooting early on. Do they want him dead, or captive?
Bets wishes.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Things are not looking too good.
Great action.
I had to wonder, though, about all the shooting early on. Do they want him dead, or captive?
Bets wishes.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thanks so much, Wayne, for sticking with my foolishness. It's the way an old guy gets excitement and adventure from the comfort of his La-Z-Boy. The cartel has been trying to catch or kill them for a while now, but I think they want it done slow and painful, or they have some information the drug lords want to know. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Ric,
Your fast-paced story is detailed, and your words and style make for an excellent taut thriller.
Your characters and dialogue are believable.
I like the photo and would like a cabin like this, without all the noise, of course.
Great work.
Good luck,
Cindy
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Ric,
Your fast-paced story is detailed, and your words and style make for an excellent taut thriller.
Your characters and dialogue are believable.
I like the photo and would like a cabin like this, without all the noise, of course.
Great work.
Good luck,
Cindy
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Cindy, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. I'm with you on the cabin. I was looking to find an old broken-down shack of a cabin, but when I saw this one, I couldn't help but use the picture. LOL. I'm so happy you liked Tucker's latest antics. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Frank Malley
"Resurrection, Part 8" owes its design to the way in which thrilling action stories and movies have evolved. As is true in contemporary thrilling stories, reality can be pretty much overlooked by virtually super-hero heroes.Ric does very well at establishing the wild pace of action, and the survival of the two central characters is no more improbable than many survivals in contemporary movies. There are occasional punctuation errors in this chapter; for one, put a comma before names used in direct address. The word 'relinquished' is misused; 'canceled' or 'ended' would work correctly. Sometimes the author uses unnecessary words in a phrase; is anything added by characterizing this escape as immediate?
Returning to improbability as a criticism, the bantering toughness of the two men when they have been beaten nearly to death is unlikely as can be imagined, but once again, the boundaries of likelihood have always been stretched in fiction, and I am always glad the the good guys prove to be invincible.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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"Resurrection, Part 8" owes its design to the way in which thrilling action stories and movies have evolved. As is true in contemporary thrilling stories, reality can be pretty much overlooked by virtually super-hero heroes.Ric does very well at establishing the wild pace of action, and the survival of the two central characters is no more improbable than many survivals in contemporary movies. There are occasional punctuation errors in this chapter; for one, put a comma before names used in direct address. The word 'relinquished' is misused; 'canceled' or 'ended' would work correctly. Sometimes the author uses unnecessary words in a phrase; is anything added by characterizing this escape as immediate?
Returning to improbability as a criticism, the bantering toughness of the two men when they have been beaten nearly to death is unlikely as can be imagined, but once again, the boundaries of likelihood have always been stretched in fiction, and I am always glad the the good guys prove to be invincible.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Frank, for your generous review, comments, and all the time you've spent with your suggestions. I'll go back and rethink the areas you've pointed out. Much appreciated!
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Your writing has some real fire in it. Best of luck! Frank
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Thanks again, Frank. I appreciate all your advice!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I enjoyed this chapter, and also I like the choice of words, that quick witt that cares the narration well, like in this example: "Tucker woke to two navy-blue suits staring down at him. A skinny shrimp in high-water trousers stood with his pistol in hand. And some lard-butt Neanderthal with bulldog jaws kept nudging him with his foot." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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I enjoyed this chapter, and also I like the choice of words, that quick witt that cares the narration well, like in this example: "Tucker woke to two navy-blue suits staring down at him. A skinny shrimp in high-water trousers stood with his pistol in hand. And some lard-butt Neanderthal with bulldog jaws kept nudging him with his foot." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Iza, for your comments, generous review, and kind words. I probably should have left these characters dead, but people kept asking me to bring them back. Now, it'll take a smarter person than me to get them out of this trap. I appreciate your time and encouragement!