Out of Gas
A dialogue between two kids in a car5 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with telling a story with your dialogue-only post! From the words, you created believable characters in a difficult relationship of a one-sided love. But that love is so determined and unconditional that it may just save that person's life. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Great job with telling a story with your dialogue-only post! From the words, you created believable characters in a difficult relationship of a one-sided love. But that love is so determined and unconditional that it may just save that person's life. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Thanks again for the kind words and another great review!
Comment from JSD
Well. What a fascinating relationship, teased out in authentic sounding dialogue with an amusing backstory added in for spice. A really intriguing and engaging read. Glad it ended happily. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Well. What a fascinating relationship, teased out in authentic sounding dialogue with an amusing backstory added in for spice. A really intriguing and engaging read. Glad it ended happily. Well done.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Thanks so much for the kind review!
Comment from JT traveller
Intense and powerful commentary. I often wonder what goes through people's minds when they jump. During the pandemic a young man jumped from the apartment 5 stories above ours. He dropped past us on his way to the concrete. Not a word. Just silence and the swish of his fall. Horrible.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Intense and powerful commentary. I often wonder what goes through people's minds when they jump. During the pandemic a young man jumped from the apartment 5 stories above ours. He dropped past us on his way to the concrete. Not a word. Just silence and the swish of his fall. Horrible.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Oh my, I?m sorry about that. Thanks for your kind review!
Comment from Isabel Fontes
A powerful story with a mighty achievement.
Overall, this is a love story.
The rhythm of the narrative, the way it unfolded from the beginning, had me hooked.
I wish you all the best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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A powerful story with a mighty achievement.
Overall, this is a love story.
The rhythm of the narrative, the way it unfolded from the beginning, had me hooked.
I wish you all the best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Thank you for such kind words!
Comment from Amber Mathis
I felt like the main two characters in this story have actually been in love for quite some time, but the blue text person was tired of the orange text person not seeing how they actually feel on the inside. Blue has a lot more going on in life and needs help. Orange can only do so much for blue. I loved how invested I was in this story, and I want to keep reading. It keeps rhythm well and I think it's a well paced story. Overall this was a great read. I wish you luck in this contest. - Amber :)
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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I felt like the main two characters in this story have actually been in love for quite some time, but the blue text person was tired of the orange text person not seeing how they actually feel on the inside. Blue has a lot more going on in life and needs help. Orange can only do so much for blue. I loved how invested I was in this story, and I want to keep reading. It keeps rhythm well and I think it's a well paced story. Overall this was a great read. I wish you luck in this contest. - Amber :)
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Thank you for such a well thought out review. Glad you enjoyed it!
