Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

Tears again, gobs. And more to come soon. Did she leave Gert the television and the remote? I would have left her a book from Mrs. Manners.***********************
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Karen

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023

Lol. I think Iris is used to Gert. She's a small doses friend. Lol. Gretchen

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 17-Aug-2023

yes, I had a friend who was hysterically funny, but sharp and a bit mean-spirited. Fun in small doses. I love your stuff. Karen

Comment from Sanku

Excellent

This is very sweet .Jameson s poem is really touching and just as I guessed Iris liked it too. The story is flowing very well ,each time landing the reader in anxiety to know what would happen next ...

 Comment Written 05-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2023

Thanks so much. Poetry is very tricky for me. Was worried how it would go over. Lol. Gretchen

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Exceptional

Gretchen, you made me cry. The poem is so beautiful, I didn't know you are a poet besides a gifted author.

I love the way Iris reacted. She deserves some joy after getting such bad news about her heart.

I love their relationship... it's so sweet.

I'm also happy that Jameson is writing again. It sounds like his wife was not supportive. Now he has Iris to encourage him.

My ex-husband was a writer and when we were dating he wrote long letters and poems about me. There's nothing as romantic as a poem written about you.

I love this chapter as much as the others. You are a very talented writer.

Gypsy

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023

Thank you so much. I'm very humbled by your review. I do minimal poetry. Just enjoy reading others. I think poetry bares your soul more than any other type of writing. Very personal. I really appreciate this kind review and the extra star. Gretchen

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

Apparently, his wife's attitude took his belief in himself right out of him. He will be so much better without her, unless he picks another like her, which isn't uncommon. The poem he wrote for Iris really is quite personal from all we have learned about her. One change in the poem: (Love's)

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023

Thanks so much, Carol. I doubt Jameson will make the same mistake twice. He'll be looking out for Finny. I appreciate this detailed review. Gretchen

Comment from Rachelle Allen

Exceptional

Hmmm. Who wrote that poem, I wonder. It couldn't be my friend GRETCHEN, who claims she is NOT a poet, could it??...

Well, whoever DID write it did a phenomenal job. I am duly impressed. Probably not as impressed as Iris was, of course, since it's not about me...but duly impressed, all the same.

Lovely chapter, Gretchen. Again, I like the way it never gets soppy or lugubrious. It's bittersweet, yes, but it's done with beauty and tenderness. I don't feel like you're "using" your reader ever. That's no easy balance to attain. Super duper work. xo

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2023

I'll pass your compliment on to Jameson. I'm sure he'll be appreciative. Seriously, thanks so much for this. Gretchen

reply by Rachelle Allen on 02-Aug-2023

HAHAHAHAHAHAH

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

What a wonderful, touching poem you wrote in your story Gretchen! You should post your poetry on the poetry side, it would do well. Jameson is a gentle soul and Iris sees and feels his good nature, another fine post, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2023

Thank you for saying that but I am no poet. I will stick to prose. I really appreciate this sweet review. Gretchen

reply by Dolly'sPoems on 02-Aug-2023

I disagree, I think you could write some wonderful free writes Gretchen x x x

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Jameson and Iris are so good for each other. I am so glad they found each other, and I really like this story.


I wander over to the couch. I slide my palm across the smooth soft cover. (Too many 'I' is a short space, try 'I wander over to the couch and slide my palm across the smooth softcover.')

She is winded and I jump up to get her chair for her. (switched subjects so comma after 'winded)

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2023

Thanks, Barbara. I reread that chapter chocked full of I's and knew it was stilted. Thanks for the help. Glad you are liking this still. Gretchen

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Words. Oh, they can change a mood in a minute, good or bad. No better to express what we think or how we feel. Show distaste, love, and make a meal taste all the better. Words, must be chosen wisely. And so many times, I've needed to practice what I'm preaching. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2023

Shoot, we all need to practice that. You aren't alone there. Thanks so much, Ric. Gretchen

Comment from JSD

Excellent

Just a magical episode. Such a sweet, well written poem and such a gorgeous moment of interaction between the protagonists. You are so talented. John x

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2023

I give full credit to the character, Jameson, for the poem. Lol. But I'll pass along the compliment. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Both Iris and Jameson needed a break from the drama. Gretchen

reply by JSD on 02-Aug-2023

Absolutely. Well done Jameson!

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Such a touching episode, with Jameson writing a poem for Iris, which brings tears to her eyes, and gratitude to her heart, when she recalls her days when her and her husband to be were still children making mud pies, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo? Today I venmo money.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2023

Venmo is a cash app on phones here in the states. (Like PayPal). Thank you so much for this awesome review. Gretchen

reply by royowen on 02-Aug-2023

Didn?t know that, thanks for sharing