Ancient Art of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Trampoline"A compilation of poems
6 total reviews
Comment from thoughtgame2
once again not disappointed...smile. You have a way with explaining yourself that i do not see in anyone else. I think that's how it's supposed to be??? very nicely done young lady. i understand completely. thanx. talk to you soon.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2023
once again not disappointed...smile. You have a way with explaining yourself that i do not see in anyone else. I think that's how it's supposed to be??? very nicely done young lady. i understand completely. thanx. talk to you soon.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much, I'm so glad that you like it. I'm always happy to receive your reviews. On YouTube continue to be a prolific writer. Though much for stopping by and reading it. And yes, it is how it's supposed to be. Is what I hope for thank you very much. Have a great day!!
Comment from Eleri
This poem has the correct structure for a Naani poem but I will be honest and say that it sounds really weird to me. I don't quite get the trampoline sky bit or the birds bouncing. The clouds airy arms I presume means that they have wispy bits sticking out and sunbeams dress pint green seems Ok. It is just the first two lines that are a bit obscure for me. Having said that though, I am sure that other people will love your poem and completely understand it so good luck in the competition
Eleri
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2023
This poem has the correct structure for a Naani poem but I will be honest and say that it sounds really weird to me. I don't quite get the trampoline sky bit or the birds bouncing. The clouds airy arms I presume means that they have wispy bits sticking out and sunbeams dress pint green seems Ok. It is just the first two lines that are a bit obscure for me. Having said that though, I am sure that other people will love your poem and completely understand it so good luck in the competition
Eleri
Comment Written 30-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2023
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Hi, thank you well when I mentioned trampoline's sky. I say that it's the image I get when I watch Birds flying. They will be flying along smoothly in an arc and also needs switch directions almost like they jumped on a trampoli'm playing so that's the imagery I get from that. And sometimes when I watch the clouds and there's a breeze out, they quickly change shape every once in a while. That looks like something in my case. I saw a large cloud with what looked like arms coming out. So I hope that explains that line to you. I'm always happy to receive your review. They are honest and kind. And I never mistake your meaning so you are an excellent reviewer. Thank you so much for your comment. I hope your day is amazing!
Comment from kahpot
An excellent naani poem, I really like the alliteration in this read, especially "airy arms" beautifully written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2023
An excellent naani poem, I really like the alliteration in this read, especially "airy arms" beautifully written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 29-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2023
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Hi, thank you so much nice to have your review as always. I am appreciative and welcome it every time!
Thank you again I hope your evening is amazing!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Birds bouncing about in the sky with ease on the breeze here and I enjoyed your unusual, inventive and unique words for the contest and wish you luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2023
Birds bouncing about in the sky with ease on the breeze here and I enjoyed your unusual, inventive and unique words for the contest and wish you luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2023
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Thank you i'm pleased you like it! Thank you for your review too and for your time. Hope you are enjoying your night!
Comment from JSD
Some lovely nature imagery here. Well done. I like airy arms, but I'm very glad they're not hairy arms. Good luck in the competition.
John
"Poetry is the space between words."
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2023
Some lovely nature imagery here. Well done. I like airy arms, but I'm very glad they're not hairy arms. Good luck in the competition.
John
"Poetry is the space between words."
Comment Written 29-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2023
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Lol...that's funny! As always, I'm grateful to receive your review. Thank you so much. I appreciate it everyou're even being amazing!
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Aha. I know who this is!
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Lol
Comment from Andrea Kepple
Interesting imagery you used in this poem.
I like the picture you paired with your poem.
I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2023
Interesting imagery you used in this poem.
I like the picture you paired with your poem.
I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2023
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Thank you, Andrea, I'm so glad you like it. Thank you for your time and your kind review. And your comments always appreciated by me. I hope your day is amazing!