2023 Gypsy's Tanka
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Last Night's Moans"-
6 total reviews
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy----and I like your desription; 'morning jagged lies amid broken promises'----the reality of desire, and of questioning doubts
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2023
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Another fine poem, Gypsy----and I like your desription; 'morning jagged lies amid broken promises'----the reality of desire, and of questioning doubts
Comment Written 25-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
wow this was a great tanka
didn't expect it to end like it did
i liked the comparison between the comb and the jagged lies
never thought of it that way
nice work
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2023
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wow this was a great tanka
didn't expect it to end like it did
i liked the comparison between the comb and the jagged lies
never thought of it that way
nice work
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 24-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much, Shelley. :)
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
A beautiful yet tragic poem. I could see one of those Japanese paintings. The traditional kind. Like Madame Butterfly. This was an exquisite write. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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A beautiful yet tragic poem. I could see one of those Japanese paintings. The traditional kind. Like Madame Butterfly. This was an exquisite write. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen
Comment Written 23-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Madam butterfly is such a tragic opera. One of the songs, I can't remember the name, always makes me cry.
Thank you, my friend. I appreciate your kind words and review.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from JSD
More broken love! So tragic but beautifully conveyed. The moans in your hair is brilliant. Well done, as usual.
John. X
"Poetry is the space between words."
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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More broken love! So tragic but beautifully conveyed. The moans in your hair is brilliant. Well done, as usual.
John. X
"Poetry is the space between words."
Comment Written 23-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Thank you, my friend. I appreciate your kind words and review.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I like this! There is such a sense of disconnection, unease by the morning when the reality hits. The tangled hair seems to evoke the love-making combined with indiscretion and friction - a complicated and fraught relationship. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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I like this! There is such a sense of disconnection, unease by the morning when the reality hits. The tangled hair seems to evoke the love-making combined with indiscretion and friction - a complicated and fraught relationship. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
Comment Written 23-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Thank you, my friend. I appreciate your kind words and review.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
Interesting use of the moans and tangled hair from the night before. It seems that despite having connections physically, the narrator's loved one is not faithful and that creates such pains in the morning.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Interesting use of the moans and tangled hair from the night before. It seems that despite having connections physically, the narrator's loved one is not faithful and that creates such pains in the morning.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Yes. You are right. Thank you, big sister. I appreciate your kind words and review.
Love
Marival
