A Fool and His Money......
Just when you think you know someone28 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Oh my goodness, I know I read this and voted for it...and (duh) somehow didn't leave a review? Well, I guess the site spoke for me when you earned the accolade of contest winner here! My family always loved to play "penny poker" after holidays and I can relate to the story!
Karenina
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Oh my goodness, I know I read this and voted for it...and (duh) somehow didn't leave a review? Well, I guess the site spoke for me when you earned the accolade of contest winner here! My family always loved to play "penny poker" after holidays and I can relate to the story!
Karenina
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
Comment from Bruce Carrington
In love with your story, Debi. All I thought about when I imagined your character was my fiancée - she kicks ass and takes names. She can't play poker, though, but she's similarly tough and isn't scared to take the initiative. I've rooted for the protagonist since the very start - I can only wish to be able to create such a strong connection between the character and the reader so early in the story.
I cannot explain how your description of James inspired me. You listed down four aspects of his character and behavior, and those four points painted the clearest picture. I read this and knew that I will aim to do the same. Absolutely amazing.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2023
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In love with your story, Debi. All I thought about when I imagined your character was my fiancée - she kicks ass and takes names. She can't play poker, though, but she's similarly tough and isn't scared to take the initiative. I've rooted for the protagonist since the very start - I can only wish to be able to create such a strong connection between the character and the reader so early in the story.
I cannot explain how your description of James inspired me. You listed down four aspects of his character and behavior, and those four points painted the clearest picture. I read this and knew that I will aim to do the same. Absolutely amazing.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2023
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Thank you Bruce for the extremely kind review and comments for my story.
I welcome you to the site and I hope we become good friends. I will come over and fan you on your site and if there is anything I can do to help, never hesitate. I usually am better at welcoming new people, but I am guessing you met our Karenina. She is the other one who loves to say hi to all the new people. Thank you again and I can't wait to check out some of your work.
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Thank you Bruce for the extremely kind review and comments for my story.
I welcome you to the site and I hope we become good friends. I will come over and fan you on your site and if there is anything I can do to help, never hesitate. I usually am better at welcoming new people, but I am guessing you met our Karenina. She is the other one who loves to say hi to all the new people. Thank you again and I can't wait to check out some of your work.
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Debi, as an absolute rookie in the craft, your words of encouragement are invaluable. So far, I engaged with Kay, Jay, and Ric, and their feedback, thoughts, and suggestions I took to heart and duly noted in my "So You Want To Be a Writer?" journal. As the top-ranked author, I'd want nothing more than to have such engagements with you too. Wishing you a tremendous day!
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Bruce, you are such a refreshing breath of fresh air as a relatively new person. It will be so easy for you to fit in as you have already gained so much respect from your peers. That is number one, as so many come in and push their weight around right from the start.
My biggest thing in my writing is to know my ending before the beginning. I love surprises and a twist at the end. You will see that in all of my first place prose stories especially.
I used it a lot even in my poetry. But after being challenged by one of the best writers here, I started writing prose. It worked well for me as long as I was writing non-fiction because I chose stories that I knew had cool endings.
However the fiction was a little harder, and I struggled when I didn?t know which way it was going, but once I figured out that the female in my last story could be strong, but also admit to being wrong, the rest poured like sugar.
Thanks so much and good luck with your writing.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Congratulations on you win. I think this was a good poker story. I say 'think' because I know nothing about poker other than it is a card game. Your first fictitious story has a great story line with a satisfying ending. Well done for a first effort.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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Congratulations on you win. I think this was a good poker story. I say 'think' because I know nothing about poker other than it is a card game. Your first fictitious story has a great story line with a satisfying ending. Well done for a first effort.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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Hi Lorraine, sorry this is so late, but I got kind of behind. But I do appreciate it so very much. Thanks for the congrats too. I hope you are doing ok, and I have been thinking about you so very much. Take care of yourself!
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Debi, congratulations on your win. I'm sorry that I didn't get to read this story earlier. This was an eye-opener of a poker game. James got his due. Of special note:
At that point, James announced that the game would be continued after he made a trip to an ATM, and that was when Seth stood up and finally spoke.
(The highlight of the story, and time to get the popcorn.)
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James followed him, begging for help, but the old man said no. "I will no longer support your expensive habit."
(That was a No that was long-time coming. It should have happened years ago.)
Also:
Let's just put it this way, I underestimated him and should have trusted him to know what he was doing. Seth won that jackpot of over $17,000 with three queens.
(I love a good bluffer. Also, I don't think that James, Sr. should have allowed such a high-stake game in his house, especially with co-workers.)
The story ended just the way that it should have ended. A first fiction. Well done. Well deserved win. A pleasure to read. Xo. M
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
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Hi Debi, congratulations on your win. I'm sorry that I didn't get to read this story earlier. This was an eye-opener of a poker game. James got his due. Of special note:
At that point, James announced that the game would be continued after he made a trip to an ATM, and that was when Seth stood up and finally spoke.
(The highlight of the story, and time to get the popcorn.)
And:
James followed him, begging for help, but the old man said no. "I will no longer support your expensive habit."
(That was a No that was long-time coming. It should have happened years ago.)
Also:
Let's just put it this way, I underestimated him and should have trusted him to know what he was doing. Seth won that jackpot of over $17,000 with three queens.
(I love a good bluffer. Also, I don't think that James, Sr. should have allowed such a high-stake game in his house, especially with co-workers.)
The story ended just the way that it should have ended. A first fiction. Well done. Well deserved win. A pleasure to read. Xo. M
Comment Written 19-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2023
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Hi there my sweet sis. I happen to agree with your opinion about James Sr not allowing the high stakes game in his house, except that he didn't know about it until the end. I kinda thought that was a given by him walking away. James hadn't even realized he was out yet at that point. However, maybe I should add that was why he was walking away in the first place.
Thanks again for the sweet comments and review, my friend and sis
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Hi Debi, I read the story in two parts so perhaps I missed a link. Xo. M
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OMGosh, I was just having a little fun with you. Never take me serious because I might have been wrongfully expecting it to be a given that it was the reason Sr was walking away. Just being a dork, like always. (Sheepish smile)
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Goodness, Debi you sound like a pro here! I know nothing about the game but all your vocabulary suggests that you're well versed. A very credible story perfect for the contest which I think might have passed. But if not, good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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Goodness, Debi you sound like a pro here! I know nothing about the game but all your vocabulary suggests that you're well versed. A very credible story perfect for the contest which I think might have passed. But if not, good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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Hahaha! Maybe a little bit way back when. I was a little hellion when I was younger. I could party like the best of them. However I had to do a little research for the game, as I too was a little naive. And I did not have the choice to pass or not. My friend Terry said if I finally didn't do it he was going to come up with something worse. He is kinda my mentor and has been after me for a while to do fiction, so I said as long as it wasn't horror or like that I promised I would do it. So I am just the writer, not the character, lol...
I am surprised I pulled it off so well. It was kinda fun being a little naughty for a while but only under someone else's identity. Lol... thanks so much Debbie as your comments are great fun.
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Sorry, Debi, I should have congratulated you! Very well done! You should definitely take up fiction:)
Comment from Dr. Nad
You've done a great job Debbie with your first foray into the fiction world. You never know, you may catch a bug and return often. L O L You were so convincing I thought it was real until I read the authors notes. Embrace the love from above.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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You've done a great job Debbie with your first foray into the fiction world. You never know, you may catch a bug and return often. L O L You were so convincing I thought it was real until I read the authors notes. Embrace the love from above.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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Dan, I'm very thankful that this went over so well and was so well received.
and thankful that you like it too! Also very much appreciate the six stars!
Comment from Lisasview
I actually seldom read long stories but I was drawn into this fun story and read ever word...
After reading it I realized it was you my dear friend Debi that wrote it!! Good for you!!
I think the title should be Eating Crow.... Ha ha
Lisa
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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I actually seldom read long stories but I was drawn into this fun story and read ever word...
After reading it I realized it was you my dear friend Debi that wrote it!! Good for you!!
I think the title should be Eating Crow.... Ha ha
Lisa
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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Hey there my sweet Lisa. I love your suggestion but those last few words of my story were my trump card for hopefully a successful story. Y'know what I mean? It is hard to find one for every post so once I had that in my head, it was easier to write the characters. I am so glad you liked it and it was a challenge from the creator who started me at prose in the first place, a long time ago. But I always only wrote nonfiction and had never tried fiction.
Anyway, I do appreciate your awesome comments and I am so relieved it worked out. Thanks again, my precious friend.
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You are so so welcome
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Very interesting story and great start at fiction, Debi!!! Your story has all the components of a fiction - a premise, a solid storyline, a well constructed climax and a smooth ending. The twist happens a bit before the end, but it makes total sense.
Congratulations!!!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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Very interesting story and great start at fiction, Debi!!! Your story has all the components of a fiction - a premise, a solid storyline, a well constructed climax and a smooth ending. The twist happens a bit before the end, but it makes total sense.
Congratulations!!!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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Mario, as always you are a delight of a reviewer. Thanks for the awesome review and kind comments, my friend,
Comment from JSD
And it's great. Really interesting. Might need a note or two. SOL? Eating crow? Is that like humble pie? Otherwise, this has a nice twist, which you describe very successfully, and good pace and energy. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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And it's great. Really interesting. Might need a note or two. SOL? Eating crow? Is that like humble pie? Otherwise, this has a nice twist, which you describe very successfully, and good pace and energy. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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You are always such a great reviewer, as your suggestions and feedback are very good and appreciated. I just got back from adding that eating crow was the same as eating humble pie. I forget that all sayings aren't known worldwide. Thanks for all your feedback. S O L is a little out of my character as it means, shit outa luck. Must be just American phrase. So I have chosen to leave that as is.
LOL, gotta leave something to the imagination.
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The joys of language!
Comment from kahpot
An excellent story and read, I did stumble on this line, should this be
(what some of.....)
"what some his co-worker friends said they had lost and planned on returning"
Rules must be adhered too when playing for money, cheating is only allowed if you do not get caught, and bluffing is the most powerful card, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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An excellent story and read, I did stumble on this line, should this be
(what some of.....)
"what some his co-worker friends said they had lost and planned on returning"
Rules must be adhered too when playing for money, cheating is only allowed if you do not get caught, and bluffing is the most powerful card, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 17-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Thanks so much kahpot, I appreciate your kind comments and you catching my typo. I love great feedback so thank you so much, my friend,
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Thanks so much kahpot, I appreciate your kind comments and you catching my typo. I love great feedback so thank you so much, my friend,
