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The Followup to Chasing the Elusive Dream

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Comment from lyenochka
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Yes, I remember some of the stories you told us about Christi. I found it hard to imagine why she would be so upset about Connie being born as she and Don were the same age. Don was the one who wanted brother.
I remember the Barbie "raincoat" story. I loved your expression of "as though I'd hung the moon." I think you do look like an actress - like Della Street in Perry Mason. Anyway, it was fun to get more stories about Christi especially the "left behind" and yet she didn't even notice!

Sugar seems to affect the brain a lot in some kids. My youngest is still addicted to sugar. I think she has some form of ADD and the sugar feeds something...

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
    Thank you some much for the review. Christi has read a lot about
    ADD and she claim that she has it. I'm sure Don did he wasn't into surgar the way Christi was. Christi is a procrastonator and it would be easy for her waste hour and no notice time had passefd.
Comment from Spitfire
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A lot of laughs here i.e hiding in your bedroom, finding a new use for condoms! This is followed up with a terrifying moment with Christi locking herself in the trunk. So glad this didn't end in tragedy. You almost lost her again with the gas station incident. I bet you had gray hair at forty!

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the great review. Yes those kids were always doing some that could have ended badly.
    Beth
Comment from Faith Williams
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How in the world did she get the nickname Crispy-Critter? Seems like that's a story. I couldn't help but laugh at the laundry basket incident and the condom story. Maybe you shouldn't tell her that. Though it was interesting she enjoyed talking on the CB radio so much.

One suggestion:
'Not bothering to ask what she might have found; she opened the pack,' I think the semi-colon should just be a comma.

Wow, she didn't even notice you left her at the service station? She must have taken an awfully long time to make a decision. Thanks for sharing another enjoyable chapter, Beth.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
    Thanks Faith. I appreciate the review.
    Back then there was a toy where you used a liquid and metal molds. You heated it and it made lizards, spiders and other insects and was called Crispy- Critters. Crispy sound like Christi so the nickname.
    Christi probably spent a long time in the bathroom before she ever to the candy counter but she is a procrastinator.
Comment from jim vecchio
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I have had some health setbacks recently and so may be reviewing this out of sequence. Another chapter I truly enjoyed. I still feel relief that Christi was saved from tht trunk in time! (I'm so claustrophobic!) Someday, I'm going to read your wonderful work chapter by chapter from beginning to end!

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
    Thank you again Jim. I appreciate you rewarding me six stars once again. The stories that lead up to these are on a book on Amazon called "Chasing the Elusive Dream by me, Elizabeth W. Shelby. There is both ebook and Kindle. It starts when my husband and I got married.
    Beth
reply by jim vecchio on 20-Jul-2023
    I will try to purchase it.
Comment from jmdg1954
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Ah Beth...

This is a good post telling us of Christi's antics. I like the CB handle Christi Critter. As your post read, it certainly did seem to fit her.

The last paragraph still has me in stitches as I'm visualizing it like a movie happening real time. She never even sensed you all were missing.

Writing about family is fun and fun to read.

Cheers,
John

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
    Thank you John, I'm so glad you like my stories. I enjoy your comments.
    Beth
Comment from Wendy G
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Lol. Your children certainly kept you busy. She has quite a personality. Each of yours was quite different and that's wonderful, but hence each one requires you to be a super mum. Well written. An enjoyable read.
Wendy

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
    Thank you Wendy, Yes they were all different and all a challenge in their way. I appreciate your comments.
    Beth
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Haha ha the finale was a kill. Loved this story so good and you made me laugh thinking how she must feel trying to decide whT what to buy and not noticing that's she's alone.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
    Thank you Iza. I'm glad you got a laugh out of this. She was on little world and not worrying that we might be outside waiting for her.
    Beth
Comment from Mary Vigasin
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I enjoyed Christi's story. It is funny, and she seemed to know how to get into situations. They may not have been funny at the time, but they make a great family story now.
Always considered the baby, it is difficult when another baby comes along. While I and my younger sister are not that far apart, I am told that I would steal her bottle. My older sister resented having to care for the two of us.
Best wishes,
Mary

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
    Thank you, Mary, Birth order seems to have a lot to do with the way we tune out. As a only child, I was both the oldest and the youngest. If I had a sibling I would likely have been different. I would have likely been bossy and jealous at the same time.
Comment from Ulla
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Oh I loved this, Beth. That Christi was something else as a child. I loved the scene when she hid in a laundry basket. Hilarious! I would have been mortified. And then you managed to drive away without noticing she was missing. I love it. Ullaxx

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you Ulla, yes all of them were different but found ways to drive me batty at times. Kids make life interesting.
    Beth
reply by Ulla on 16-Jul-2023
    Hahaha, absolutely!
reply by Ulla on 16-Jul-2023
    Hahaha, absolutely!
Comment from royowen
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I'm loving these tales of your family and the difference between the kids, they are definitely quite different to one another aren't they? I would be interesting to hear about them now, as adults we are more skilful at hiding our quirks, beautifully written Beth, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you, Roy. I'll get around to telling your more about them as adults. I'm so glad you like reading about my family.
    Beth
reply by royowen on 16-Jul-2023
    Looking forward