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Comment from jim vecchio
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So glad to hear Don turned out okay! My wife had a brother killed in a motorcycle accident, so he was very fortunate. You have so many rich, wonderful tales to tell; I wish I had that many extra strs!

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
    Thank you, Jim. Yes motorcycles are very dangerous. Even in the country off the main highways, you can get hurt badly. I really appreciater you comments.
    Beth
reply by jim vecchio on 20-Jul-2023
    I loved horses, though, and wish I couldr ide one again!
Comment from Spitfire
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Don sounds special. What a talent when it comes to create 'works of art' such as a costume or a boat. Sounds as if someday he'll make more of stuffing pillows into shapes and sell them to gift stores. That can turn into big bucks.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you so much. Yes he very creative. As he got older he learned to paint and is a good artist. He can build anything and make it beautiful. His office and some of the furnishing is he creation but he chose to be a chiropractor.
Comment from Anne Johnston
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I really enjoyed reading this chapter. I raised two boys and so can associate with what this young man put you through. He was very creative and it sounds like, when he started a project, he put his whole heart into it and completed it.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you Anne. Yes, all my children have creative natures but he pursues it more. He can build anything and make it beautiful but he also paints and has a marvelous voice. His profession is a chiropractor. That requires hands on treatment too.
Comment from Faith Williams
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Another great chapter, Beth. Don sounds like a character. I think his bouts of amnesia would have driven me crazy. Do your children read your stories?

Suggestions to consider:
'pleading the fifth' - you may want to add a note about this one for our friends across the pond and around the world.

'Working with his hands, has served him well over the years.' I don't believe you need the comma here.

'After a long weekend of hard riding and an unfortunate jump that bruised him badly, it was summer and he was scheduled to take his turn spending a week with my parents; his grandparents, so we dropped him off and headed back to New Orleans.' I think this sentence is a bit of a mouthful. Maybe split them into two sentences?

Thanks for sharing. I look forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
    Thank you Faith. I made the adjustments you suggested and I appreciate you helping. I forgot other countries wouldn't have our same ammentments to thier constitution so pleading the fifth wouldn' t make sense. Yes, my children do read my stories. Chiristi hasn't read yet but the others have.
Comment from Annmuma
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Good story, well written with good situational descriptions. I enjoy reading - and too often identifying with -- with your son's escapades. I identify with YOU, not your son. lol. I have a son and 2 daughters and they are so different, but always fun.
ann

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
    Thank you, Ann. Kid can drive you a little crazy but they are always good for laughs.
    Beth
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
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The stuffed pillowcase person is hysterical - how old was he when he did this? Very creative:-)

His selective amnesia would make him the perfect witness in a current federal trial - no one remembers anything when questioned. I'm 68 and my memory is better than most, I guess.

"Our farm also became the reason, Don's desire for a Kawasaki . . ." You don't need the comma. "Of course our son had failed to mention to Mom . . ." add a comma after of course

I liked this chapter - Don sounds like a very creative person and I wonder what he does for a living?

Thanks for sharing, Beth.

Pam

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
    Thank you, Pam. I enjoyed reading your comments. I think Don was about eleven when he started building people out of pillowcases.
    Don is still very creative but he is a chiropractor now.
    Beth
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
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Beth,
I like this well-written about your only son. He sounds like he is all boy. You peaked my interest about his mishaps. I'm sorry he had spinal meningitis.
I hope to read the next chapter soon.
Blessings,
Cindy

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
    Thank you Cindy. I'm glad you liked this. He didn't really have spinal meningtis. The old doctor just thought that was what it was because Don didn't tell him he sore from riding the dirt bike. He was fine. Just bruised for all that jumping he been doing.
    Beth
Comment from jmdg1954
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Excellent chapter on a son who made you pull your hair out, time after time.

I saw no spags or other problems. A good clean post on my view.

Nicely presented...
John

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
    Thank you John, I really appreciate the nice review.
    Beth
Comment from royowen
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Heh heh, you certainly had your struggles with the individual ness of your kids. Don sounds a little like our 6 year old grandson, Dion, he's git incredible energy, as his sister, Indah is very "girly" he's very much a boy. Throws himself around, although he's not accident prone. Beautifully written, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
    Thank you Roy. Yes, all those different personalities were a lot to deal with sometimes. I'm glad you liked this.
    Beth
reply by royowen on 15-Jul-2023
    Well done
Comment from Realist101
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LOL! Sounds like our son, only he wasn't that creative except when it came to going out riding dirt bikes or ATV's when we weren't looking! His friends and he once wrecked their four-wheelers in the middle of the night 15 miles from home and snuck in at daybreak thinking I wouldn't know. Now he drives semi's. I don't know how we survive kids. I laughed out loud at this ending. :D

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
    Thank you, I hope you get to see your son often. and I hope you don;t still have people messing around the doing thins to annoy you. I'm glad you like my story. I really appreicate the six stars.
    Beth