Falling to pieces
God's love can put the pieces back together!21 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
You've undoubtedly had a hard life, and I, for one, can not imagine it in my wildest dreams.
I know I don't have to tell you to keep writing, as writers know the healing power it possesses.
Please stay tight, my friend. And keep praying for peace when you are falling to pieces. You are worth it! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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You've undoubtedly had a hard life, and I, for one, can not imagine it in my wildest dreams.
I know I don't have to tell you to keep writing, as writers know the healing power it possesses.
Please stay tight, my friend. And keep praying for peace when you are falling to pieces. You are worth it! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thanks
Comment from Wendy G
Another very strong piece of poetry, Charity, well written and very dramatic imagery of falling, hopelessness and despair. I hope you can get medication to help with both migraines and bipolar, and ease your pain. That's a big load to carry. Sending best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Another very strong piece of poetry, Charity, well written and very dramatic imagery of falling, hopelessness and despair. I hope you can get medication to help with both migraines and bipolar, and ease your pain. That's a big load to carry. Sending best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thanks
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Wow, this is quite a read, Charity! You certainly lay your heart out here in very graphic and evocative detail. I think it's really impressive and your message of hopelessness couldn't be better conveyed. Your rhyming is excellent and, truthfully, I wouldn't change a thing! I can only hope that this medium of poetry and self-expression can really help you on the road to recovery. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Wow, this is quite a read, Charity! You certainly lay your heart out here in very graphic and evocative detail. I think it's really impressive and your message of hopelessness couldn't be better conveyed. Your rhyming is excellent and, truthfully, I wouldn't change a thing! I can only hope that this medium of poetry and self-expression can really help you on the road to recovery. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Appreciate your review
Comment from Paul McFarland
Haven't seen you for awhile, Charity. Your stuff always looks like it would do well in a slam. Hope everything is going okay in your world. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Haven't seen you for awhile, Charity. Your stuff always looks like it would do well in a slam. Hope everything is going okay in your world. Keep writing.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Yes, it has been working well in my performances.
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Your poem is beautifully written. It flows well and the rhyming, and rhythm are nicely done. While reading your poem, by the words that you use, I can feel some or even most of the feelings being expressed. I feel the sadness and anxiety. This is an amazing poem that you wrote, and I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Your poem is beautifully written. It flows well and the rhyming, and rhythm are nicely done. While reading your poem, by the words that you use, I can feel some or even most of the feelings being expressed. I feel the sadness and anxiety. This is an amazing poem that you wrote, and I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Reading your I'm I hear this rhythm: open your eyes and see sadness has a way with life. Thank you for sharing your masterpiece with us. Life is a journey
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Reading your I'm I hear this rhythm: open your eyes and see sadness has a way with life. Thank you for sharing your masterpiece with us. Life is a journey
Comment Written 07-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your feedback.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There seems to be a lot of anxiety in this poem, the ups and downs of life that have taken its toll and this person has become broken, a sad and poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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There seems to be a lot of anxiety in this poem, the ups and downs of life that have taken its toll and this person has become broken, a sad and poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thanks for your feedback.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Where have you been? It's been months since I last read a release of yours. Still the same genre though. Don't you ever feel the concern shared in response to your ever-dark messages? The talent is obvious. I only wish you'll discover the joy meant for men (generic).
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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Where have you been? It's been months since I last read a release of yours. Still the same genre though. Don't you ever feel the concern shared in response to your ever-dark messages? The talent is obvious. I only wish you'll discover the joy meant for men (generic).
Comment Written 06-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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I know I have been busy with hosting poetry events and working on my book. Also busy with work and performances. I will be leaving fanstory. It's becoming too expensive and has too much negativity.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Charity,
Sounds like you have had some hard times. I hope you can get things under control with faith, friends and medication. I think writing, either poetry or prose, helps us all get through our troubles.
I think tossed should be tossed to match the past tense of ran.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good day and weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Hi Charity,
Sounds like you have had some hard times. I hope you can get things under control with faith, friends and medication. I think writing, either poetry or prose, helps us all get through our troubles.
I think tossed should be tossed to match the past tense of ran.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good day and weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 06-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thanks for your review.
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No problem, Charity.
Joan
Comment from Barbara H.
This picture really puts in perspective how you feel. The body falling and being out of control in the air. I like the purple background, however I would have made the size of the words a little bigger. Barbara H.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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This picture really puts in perspective how you feel. The body falling and being out of control in the air. I like the purple background, however I would have made the size of the words a little bigger. Barbara H.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thanks for your feedback.