Coffee With Iris
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Talk Later"Two opposites meet and connect.
19 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Oh my God, the imagery. Like a convict digging a tunnel with a spoon. What utter perfection! Got to go,stuff to read.********
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Karen
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Oh my God, the imagery. Like a convict digging a tunnel with a spoon. What utter perfection! Got to go,stuff to read.********
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Karen
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you. I will pat myself on the back for that. Lol. Gretchen
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This stuff doesn't seem to load in order. I am writing a series now. It
is a regency romance, heavy on the humor. Please give it a glance. Karen
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pat away.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
No no no no no no. I'm not ready for this. And, yeah, I get it: that's EXACTLY the point. Nobody's every 'ready' for it.
That simile about the convict digging a tunnel with a spoon is brilliant. I also loved this: I thought that one day I would go to bed with brown hair and wake the next morning with hair of white, like the lawn when it snows overnight. But age isn't like that. It's sneaky...
Oy. This is becoming dire. I hate it, but I need to keep going anyway...yeah, yeah; I get your point: like when bad things happen in life.
Excruciatingly well done, Gretchen. xoxoxox
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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No no no no no no. I'm not ready for this. And, yeah, I get it: that's EXACTLY the point. Nobody's every 'ready' for it.
That simile about the convict digging a tunnel with a spoon is brilliant. I also loved this: I thought that one day I would go to bed with brown hair and wake the next morning with hair of white, like the lawn when it snows overnight. But age isn't like that. It's sneaky...
Oy. This is becoming dire. I hate it, but I need to keep going anyway...yeah, yeah; I get your point: like when bad things happen in life.
Excruciatingly well done, Gretchen. xoxoxox
Comment Written 16-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023
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Excruciatingly!?! Love it. Hahaha. Last week at my art group I read them the fly on the wall about when your dress flew over your head and hot stuck on your sunglasses. They were howling. Talk about Excruciatingly well done. Thanks so much. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Short but very good. Iris tries to keep her doctor amused so he won't say something that isn't amusing. Interesting way to ignore the end of life crack. I don't think Jamison would mind if she called. Your characters are well written as the reader can make a good guess what they would do.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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Short but very good. Iris tries to keep her doctor amused so he won't say something that isn't amusing. Interesting way to ignore the end of life crack. I don't think Jamison would mind if she called. Your characters are well written as the reader can make a good guess what they would do.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2023
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Iris is very strong. She has a hard time asking for help. Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from JSD
Oh goodness, this is so good. I'm fighting off the grey but I still ask these questions and I still respond to others with graveyard humour. Your sensitivity in conveying this woman's mind is superb.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023
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Oh goodness, this is so good. I'm fighting off the grey but I still ask these questions and I still respond to others with graveyard humour. Your sensitivity in conveying this woman's mind is superb.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023
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Thank you for this nice review and the great comments. Gretchen
Comment from Sanku
This chapter made my eyes moist. I was particularly affected by the last chapter where she wonders 'how i got so old'. And the beautiful simile of a convict digging a tunnel with a spoon.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023
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This chapter made my eyes moist. I was particularly affected by the last chapter where she wonders 'how i got so old'. And the beautiful simile of a convict digging a tunnel with a spoon.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much. I really appreciate this nice review and the extra star. Love to hear when something resonates with someone. Gretchen
Comment from damommy
This really hit me hard as I will be 80 in two months and have health issues. I know my time is near, but it doesn't seem real. I can identify with Iris. I hope she calls Jameson. They both need something outside themselves to think about.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023
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This really hit me hard as I will be 80 in two months and have health issues. I know my time is near, but it doesn't seem real. I can identify with Iris. I hope she calls Jameson. They both need something outside themselves to think about.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023
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I don't think Iris is comfortable being needy. Thank you for this. 80 is a hell of a milestone. Congrats!
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I'm like Iris. I only ask for help when I'm desperate I hate asking for help.
Comment from Wendy G
I did NOT want you to stop there. Make her ring Jameson. And quickly, before anything else happens. She may be afraid, but she is also very brave. The comments about old age coming slowly like tunnelling by spoonsful, and the round or flat earth, the difference between her perspective and the child's - all are excellent. Your story is gripping although not unnecessarily complex, and the dialogue compelling. Very thoughtfully, and profoundly, written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023
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I did NOT want you to stop there. Make her ring Jameson. And quickly, before anything else happens. She may be afraid, but she is also very brave. The comments about old age coming slowly like tunnelling by spoonsful, and the round or flat earth, the difference between her perspective and the child's - all are excellent. Your story is gripping although not unnecessarily complex, and the dialogue compelling. Very thoughtfully, and profoundly, written.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023
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Wow. Thank you. I'm so glad this resonated with you. I really appreciate this! Gretchen
Comment from Liz O'Neill
There are probably plenty of reader who will identify with this statement: "I've become quite adept at coughing on cue." My dowsing teacher would say, take that out of the air: "I glance around the room. The walls are adorned with posters of warning signs for heart attack, strokes, and blood clots."
his is poignant.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023
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There are probably plenty of reader who will identify with this statement: "I've become quite adept at coughing on cue." My dowsing teacher would say, take that out of the air: "I glance around the room. The walls are adorned with posters of warning signs for heart attack, strokes, and blood clots."
his is poignant.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023
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Thanks so much. I appreciate your kind review. Gretchen
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***Smile***
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sad post Gretchen, poor Iris is facing the end of her life and wondering how life passed so quickly. Although I am hopefully not at the end of mine yet, I do feel the same, how come life goes so fast! When you feel like it is running out, you take stock and adjust your life to include the things that are most important. This is food for thought and Iris never likes being a burden to others and I also love her sense of humour too, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023
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This is a sad post Gretchen, poor Iris is facing the end of her life and wondering how life passed so quickly. Although I am hopefully not at the end of mine yet, I do feel the same, how come life goes so fast! When you feel like it is running out, you take stock and adjust your life to include the things that are most important. This is food for thought and Iris never likes being a burden to others and I also love her sense of humour too, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023
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Thanks so very much. I really appreciate this kind review. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
You may feel a need to apologize for its shortness, but it's its depth that drives it for me, not its length. Your contrast between round earth and flat earth, which I comment on below, and between the young child looking up at the trees, and old Iris, watching the ground for roots and cracks. You describe the feeling so brilliantly. I've noticed with a kind of self-embarrassment how I have entered the stage of having little control over my imbalance, while I used to marvel at my ability to adjust immediately to inequalibruium. It's like the world suddenly tilts. I lean forward and find myself on a perfectly flat surface but running downhill -- you know, the kind where your torso can't keep up with your legs.
End of life stage. The words hit like a brick between the eyes. I've known about it since I was diagnosed, but it was always in the distance. It was at the horizons line thoughtfully moving with the rotation of the earth. Now, it appears, the earth is actually flat. And I am skittering close to that edge. [This is a superb paragraph with its contrasts of perceptions: The known round world, but the perceived flat one that we live in.]
This is an important chapter -- a hinge, it seems.
Jay
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023
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You may feel a need to apologize for its shortness, but it's its depth that drives it for me, not its length. Your contrast between round earth and flat earth, which I comment on below, and between the young child looking up at the trees, and old Iris, watching the ground for roots and cracks. You describe the feeling so brilliantly. I've noticed with a kind of self-embarrassment how I have entered the stage of having little control over my imbalance, while I used to marvel at my ability to adjust immediately to inequalibruium. It's like the world suddenly tilts. I lean forward and find myself on a perfectly flat surface but running downhill -- you know, the kind where your torso can't keep up with your legs.
End of life stage. The words hit like a brick between the eyes. I've known about it since I was diagnosed, but it was always in the distance. It was at the horizons line thoughtfully moving with the rotation of the earth. Now, it appears, the earth is actually flat. And I am skittering close to that edge. [This is a superb paragraph with its contrasts of perceptions: The known round world, but the perceived flat one that we live in.]
This is an important chapter -- a hinge, it seems.
Jay
Comment Written 05-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2023
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This is definitely going to make their relationship change. Thank you so much for this. Your reviews are always appreciated. Gretchen
